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Name: RavenKath (Signed) · Date: 09/28/05 1:08 · For: August 2016
I just found this story yesterday and I must say I am very much enjoying it! Keep up the good work...I really want to know about the daughter. 10

Author's Response: I'm glad you like it and thanks for telling me about it.

Name: shortymac (Signed) · Date: 09/27/05 21:07 · For: August 2016
More questions than answers about Ginny's "daughter" I see, good chapter, can't wait until the next update!

Author's Response: But you got the answer that mattered, and that was she is not Harry's daughter. Thanks, and I'll update soon.

Name: Hermione_Rocks (Signed) · Date: 09/27/05 18:37 · For: August 2016
Awesome! Keep it up!

Author's Response: thanks

Name: Hermione_Rocks (Signed) · Date: 09/27/05 18:37 · For: August 2016
Awesome! Keep it up!

Author's Response: thank you

Name: pandafan81 (Signed) · Date: 09/27/05 14:36 · For: June 2008
Hey! Now that we can review again, I just had to say how much I'm loving this story! It's a really good concept that I haven't seen before. I like the beer for brittish slang game, that made me laugh. Keep up the great work! You always do!

Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it. I'm particularly fond of the Brittish slang game also.

Name: Jules_Monster (Signed) · Date: 09/27/05 12:18 · For: March 2015
I love this story! I really hope you can update soon! I can't wait to find out more about what happened withGinny while Harry was in a coma, and about the child! Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you. And I'm trying to update.

Name: sultryme88 (Signed) · Date: 09/27/05 9:33 · For: March 2015
Hi Steve! Just finished reading HP & the Blood Traitor and left a review (10/10, a masterpiece that rivals Jo's HBP!). I'm about to start reading its sequel, but seen Broken, post Voldemort era, and decided to read this first (don't worry I'll read the sequel after this review!) I like your new writing style, simple and yet intriguing, eloquent. I've read your comment on one of the reviews. Hmm, Harry waking up after nine years, learning that he had a daughter and yet left Ginny behind, broken hearted. I'm starting to get some ideas on who might be the 3rd party behind all this. I hope you'll prove me wrong, coz I love surprises. You're such a clever, inventive writer, and I'm banking on your promise to give us angsty storyline. Yup, I'm a sucker for tear jerkers coz how'll you be able to appreciate laughter when you haven't been sad or hurt one way or the other. Please update soon!

Author's Response: Hey, read what you want in whatever order you want, I'm just glad you like my stuff. Broken, really is a different story and style than anything else I have written. A little clarification for you. I have never said that Harry had a daughter. Ginny does, but I have not answered the question of who the father is yet. I would really like to know who you think the 3rd party is behind all of this. Hopefully I will give you the angst you want with this. I'm trying to update, I can't get things through the queue any faster than I am. It is up to the mods. Thanks again for your reviews.

Name: Harriet Evans (Anonymous) · Date: 09/26/05 11:17 · For: March 2015
Wonderful chapter. I was confused/surprised when Bill seemed to know who Ginny was, and also that she had a daughter. But I guess that's because he has seen Harry's memories? So does Harry know that she has a daughter??? Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Let's see, Bill knows who Ginny is from Harry's memories, and if you remember from the last chapter, he wanted to know what she did to him. Yes, Harry knows she has a daughter, though he has never seen her. Hermione told him this when he forced a confession from her after waking from the coma. Bill knows that she has a daughter because Harry told him about Ginny during his confession to Bill. I'm trying to update. The next chapter has been in queue for a week now, so it should go up soon.

Name: JimboCOUS (Anonymous) · Date: 09/21/05 0:04 · For: March 2015
Guess I missed a couple updates; glad I caught up. Given what I've seen so far, I suspect the next chapter will be a 'corker' (wanna beer?) Seriously, I like how you're using time here, with enough detail to flesh in the gaps while not telling more than you need to to move it along. Interesting approach. (I've been trying to do something like that, with a lot less success! Got stuck at step two:)Nice and clean as far as the mechanics, which is great. So far, this is one of the few post-Voldemort takes I've really been able to get engaged in. I'll be looking for more. Thanks!

Author's Response: Well, I'm afraid your guess as to the next chapter is a bit off.

Glad you like how I'm using time in the story. There are big gaps in it, and things have to happen that you don't get to see. But like you said, hopefully I'm giving you enough to fill in the blanks yourself.

Glad your enjoying the story and hope it continues to engage your imagination.

Name: crazyaboutpotter (Signed) · Date: 09/20/05 18:27 · For: March 2015
Ginny coming to the lodge. Wow! This is a good chapter. I like that Harry and Ginny meet Bill in a simalar manner. And Ginny has a daughter! I have to say wow again.

Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying the story.

Name: Czarina (Signed) · Date: 09/20/05 11:49 · For: March 2015
Okay, you have seriously got me on the edge of my seat! I loved everything about this chapter. I adore Bill - your character development has been solid and not overdone. I'm apoplectic over the question of Ginny's daughter and I can't wait to find out what happened and whose child it is. I've never begged anyone to update before, but here I am doing it. Excellent chapter!

Author's Response: ditto.

Name: Czarina (Signed) · Date: 09/20/05 11:48 · For: March 2015
Okay, you have seriously got me on the edge of my seat! I loved everything about this chapter. I adore Bill - your character development has been solid and not overdone. I'm apoplectic over the question of Ginny's daughter and I can't wait to find out what happened and whose child it is. I've never begged anyone to update before, but here I am doing it. Excellent chapter!

Author's Response: I've reduced you to begging, have I? I hope the next chapter and the answers you are looking for do ot dissapoint you. Now, when are you going to update??

Name: Neli P (Signed) · Date: 09/19/05 23:38 · For: March 2015
'She was as broken as he was'... Now you've done it, Huskers, I got the teary eye!! This is a very different FF, and I suppose the 'relax & peace' mood of the first chapter just got us soften for the next chapters! Great job!

Author's Response: Yes, it is a different type of fan fic. Hope it works for you guys.

Name: Neli P (Signed) · Date: 09/19/05 23:30 · For: March 2013
The chapter is Great, as usual! Ok, I know it's after a coma and all, but I don't like seing Harry like this... it breaks my heart a little bit :( Again, Bill is quite intriguing...

Author's Response: Well, it is supposed to break your heart as to the state Harry is in. And Bill, he's a Muggle version of Dumbledore.

Name: Neli P (Signed) · Date: 09/19/05 23:24 · For: June 2008
What a wonderful first chapter! It is ... touching ... that Harry takes his father and godfather's names and disappear somewhere to find (I guess) some peace... :) What, and the other guy's name is Bill?????? Hmm!!

Author's Response: Thanks. Seemed appropriate for Harry to use those names if he was going to hide from the world. Bill, there is no significance to his name. Just seemed like a good name for a 50-60 year old resort owner in the north woods of Minnesota.

Name: shortymac (Signed) · Date: 09/19/05 22:56 · For: March 2015
Finally, I can review! First I love the concept of the story, the first two chapters were great, and the third was even better. So Ginny has a school aged daughter, it is safe to assume that she is at Hogwarts? I can't wait until it all plays out!!

Author's Response: Glad you like it. Answers to Ginny's daughter are coming in the next few chapters.

Name: Czarina (Signed) · Date: 09/19/05 20:55 · For: March 2013
Excellent job with the chapter. I like the ease of your writing and I think the decreased length actually adds to the story. Sometimes less detail is better and I think this is the case with this story. I like that you end each chapter with more questions for the reader than answers. There are two things I found strange. The first was Harry referring to himself as the most powerful wizard in the world. He says it very matter-of-factly, but it seems too boastful for him. He always seems to shy away from publicity and being singled out. The other thing I thought was odd was his showing Bill the Wizarding world, although I'm sure you have a reason for it. Anyway, overall I think it was a very good chapter and I can really see a great progression in your stories as you continue on.

Author's Response: First, I'm glad you liked it.

Second, Harry is confessing who he is to Bill. I felt it was neccessary for him to be truthful about just how powerful he is. Notice, he does qualify the statement with the remark about someone else being born in the last few years who could be more powerful.

As to showing Bill the wizarding world. I really don't think it is that uncomon for a witch of wizard to include a Muggle friend, who the trust, with this information. I mean look at all the Muggle borns, whose familly must be integrated, and what of the witch or wizard who marries a Muggle. I didn't think it to be odd or out of the realm of possibility. Beyond that, Harry needed to tell someone, other than someone who already knows, in order to begin to truly heal from the wounds he suffered.

Name: phoenix_trills (Signed) · Date: 09/19/05 18:09 · For: March 2015
I'm liking this story! I love how there's a lot of mystery in the background. Update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you.

Name: Biggstone78 (Signed) · Date: 09/19/05 15:55 · For: March 2015
I don't have much to say right now its a bit too early. I can't wait to read more, its a good start!!!

Author's Response: Thanks

Name: KenF (Signed) · Date: 09/19/05 8:31 · For: March 2015
At first I thought it was clever of Bill to spot Ginny, but after seeing Harry's memories, the only question is how much he was shown and how much did he guess? And we get a few hints about the past. Ginny has a school aged daughter, and has not had any other close companion in three years. We don't know who the father was, and we don't know who she was with. Its very devious the way you give is just enough information to want to speculate, but not enough to get anywhere. BTW, these stories seem to be cleaner in terms of grammar and mechanics than the earlier ones were. Thanks a lot, it makes them easier to read.

Author's Response: I'm glad you like the way the story is unfolding. I really tried to be very careful with what I gave in each chapter. This story was an exercise in giving just enough for the reader to figure out what happened. I hope that there is not one extra fact or bit of info in this story that is not needed. So, the reader will really have to pay attention to understand everything.

Thank you for noticing the spelling and grammar. That is the other thing I tried to really make an improvement with. I hope it continues to feel cleaner to you.

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