I have enjoyed your story so far. Just one question: What is Mument? As in: he noticed, after a Mument, the smile on the boy’s face. I noticed it twice so far so it doesn't seem to be a mistake. Anyway, to continue on!
Author's Response: Lol! That was a global change error. I probably told word to change all instances of "mom" to "Mum." Thanks for the note, I'll fix it. S.
This is (I think) one of the best FF on MN. I love how it is so multi-layred, but then everything ties together at the end. How do you come up with this suff? I think you should write a real book... I would definitly read it.
Um... on another note, I think the character's were better than a "C", probably an "A"... but the reason it's not an "A+" is bcause of the change you made, i think. Lisa and Carol, for example, just seemed to be those kind of characters who float in and out. Patty Lee, though, I thought she was excellent...
Well this is one of the longest reviews I have ever written, so I'm gonna stop now. You get 100 stars out of 5...
Author's Response: Thank you for the note and kind words. I think my book sales, based on comments similar to yours, would be about 50! As for the characters, Lisa & Carol were going to have larger roles in the second part of this story which I decided not to write (althought I do have 3 other stories out on MNFF.) As for inspiration, can't really say. I knew where I wanted to start and end the story, but inbetween those two chapters I just sort-of let the story write itself. Thanks for the R&R. S.
OMG Amazing story how did u write so much
860 pages size 10 !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WELL DONE Please make another one
Author's Response: Thank you. S.
Author's Response: Thank you. S.
nooooooooooooooooooo how could you do that poor hermione and bad bad ron even her dad is going to kill him hehehe
Author's Response: Thank you. S.
great story though i did skim over merlins stories, they didnt interest me much.
Author's Response: Yeah, I got a lot of negatives on that. Thanks for the R&R. S.
I don't like all the Fudge stuff
you should definitely keep writing-you have a lot of talent. Thank you for a very creative and exciting story.
OMG i loved your story!!! I hope there will be a another of when they're all older!!
Excellent story. Thoroughly enjoyed it. And no, there was no 'wading' at any time. You kept up the pace of the story even in the necessarily technical or explanitory sections. I was glad to see that Galen and Minerva were able to make a life for themselves. All in all an excellent story with my favourite of all endings, a happy one.
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. S.
Author's Response: Thank you. S.
Wow. That is almost all that I can make come out right now. This is probably the best fan-fiction I have read so far. You kept everything together, made everything make sense, and ended it beautifully. Don't take it for granted when someone says it was awesome, because rarely do you hear someone say that it is going to sadden them not finding out that another chapter has been added. In case that was confusing, let me explain. I loved the story, and it makes me sad to know that I will never get another email saying. "Harry Potter and the Story in the Runes" has been updated. Your story held me captivated and waiting for the next chapter to come up was antagonizing. So in closing, I must say Well done..-The Phoenix
Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words. I had a lot of fun writing it and think it turned out better than the other novels I have posted here. S.
great story but i just have one complaint:
U NEVER SHOWED US HARRY AND GINNYS WEDDING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I'd give you an "A". And no, I'm not just saying that. Even if you had a fair bit of strife, this is probably the best "long" story that I've ever seen. And while you say you were just seeing how well you could build characters, I think that the characters you created are masterpieces. I have seen such characters in The Forgotten Solution as well.
I hope you write many more fanfics. You are a great writer.
Again, I'm just so sad to see this story go. But you've done an excellent job with it. I'm a very satisfied customer! lol
Okay, so I'm going to just comment as I go here...
I totally cracked up to find the George is working for Warner Brothers! That's just so perfect! Movie productions will just be stunning with him working there! Who needs special effects when you have real magic?
Although I'm sad for Fred, I hope he pulls it together and finally makes a move with Patty...
I'm very pleased to see that Arthur is going to continue on as Minister. I knew he would as stated in my last review :) I'm also glad to see Tompson staying on as well! The two seemed to really hit if off, and I think they will work well together. I like the idea of integrating the two worlds rather than trying to seperate them again. And making Hogwarts muggle and wizarding... Very interesting I must say. Can I go teach there? I am looking for a job!
Yay for the Longbottoms being fully recovered! And yay for Luna and Neville finally getting together!
Ron as a Rugby player is quite funny, and Hermione withholding sex because of it is just sooo... in character! I'm glad Ron has a job he likes working with brooms. Maybe in a few years the Quidditch leagues will start back up.
I'm also pleased that Hermione is getting the opportunity to write all of this history down. Because, well, it's Hermione, and she's the perfect one for the job. Plus, she definately wouldn't let the integrity of the story get lost to the editor's pen.
And YAY for a baby for Ron and Hermione! They so deserve it. That baby is going to be SO loved. And I'm glad that Hermione and her mother are forming a new relationship, as friends.
Ahhh! yay, the matchmaking worked after all. Agreeably, the plan was rather obvious, but really all they needed was a push in the right direction. And good, it's about time the two kissed!
"Gus"... yeah... Harry may be too near-sighted to realize it. But come on, the guy's been changing his appearance and name for more than a thousand years? Why is he doubting himself? Silly boy! lol But I'm happy he and McGonagall are together and happy.
As for Harry and Ginny, I'm just so happy for them. Ginny being accepted into Medical school, and Harry taking tome to relax and then enjoy his work. They both deserve everything their hearts desire. And them having twelve children... priceless! I love it.
There are a couple of people I would have liked to see at the end here... Penelope specifically. I wonder how she is doing... And of course, I want to know more about Tonks and Remus and their family. You never did give us that full physical description of Tonks! ;)
Really, I just want the epilogue to go on and on, detailing weddings, children, and just where they all go from here... Too much to ask? An epilogue that encompasses dozens of people and the detailed chronicles of the rest of their lives?... yeah, okay, probably.
Just a couple of typos I found:
On the night of 28 June 1999, Harry Potter invited his family and best friends to a Muggle club off Piccadilly Circus to celebrate Ginny’s acceptance into the Royal Academy of Science’s School of Medicine The music was excellent...
There should be a period after Medicine to start a new sentence.
Harry was finally learning to take care of his mental and physical health and to understand the signs his body was giving him of being overe-stressed.
There's an extra "e" in "over"
*sigh* okay, well, I guess that's it for this story. I have enjoyed your writing immensely over the months. You've taken me on a couple of amazing adventures. All I can hope is that you keep at it. And you know... if you write that epic of fluff... I'll be right there with ya! *hugs* Excellent work my friend!
*sigh* I'm always hit with a bittersweet wave of emotion when a story ends. I of course want to know how everything will turn out... but I'm so sad to see the tale end. And you my friend, tell a very fine tale. I can't believe I've been following this from the beginning. It seems like forever ago that I started reading this. I'm just so pleased at how everything has turned out.
I'll leave a lot of my comments about the story as a whole for the epilouge, since I still have a few questions, that I'm SURE you will answer. You're just brilliant like that.
I like how Arthur is going to head up the Ministry for a while (if not longer, like I suspect). His love for Muggles is probably an excellent start in forming a new subculture in the mainstream society. Having leaders who are willing to work together is essential, and I think Arthur is just the man for the job.
I'm very pleased that Rebecca has shown so much growth. I told you ages ago that I didn't really think healing such a disorder would be possible... but yeah, it's magic, so who am I to complain? If only such a thing were really possible *thinks longingly of all the lovely fine children I know with such disorders*. That would be such a wonderful miracle. I'm certain Ginny will have a long and happy career working with both Muggle and Wizarding medicine. She's really going to be able to turn the world around, literally.
Okay, for my few nitpicks, here are a couple of spots that should be looked at:
Harry and Ginny saw Dobby and a few other elves poke their heads up, then Donny started jumping up and down crying,
Just a typo there, calling Dobby, Donny.
And speaking of which, if Hagrid's lost his "giant" side, then why are the house-elves still around? Agg, see, here I am, posing questions you've probably already answered. But let me ponder here. House-elves are very much magical creatures, and if such things like giants are disappearing, then why aren't the house-elves? Not that I want them to disappear mind you, it just doesn't sit well with me.
Shortly after noon, Alice, Frank, and Neville Longbottom arrived in a car drive by a man who...
drive should be driven
...7 Layer Salad...
Yummm... one of my particular favorite salads (my aunt makes it for every holiday)... anyway, you should spell out seven. Although technically I don't think it's wrong, but you have other numbers spelled out in that sentence (three bean salad...) that it messes up the flow.
Okay, back to things I love. I adored the scene with Harry sitting under the tree and observing his friends. It was just so fun to see the actions, and for Harry to know exactly how the conversations went even though he couldn't hear them. Well, even if he wasn't right, it was still funny, and just so, perfect to see life moving on as it should.
Okay, well, I'm going to stop babbling and move on to the epilouge, where I will probably cry my eyes out...
Excellent work my friend.
That was an amazing story! Did the present have somthing to do with time and i have a sneaking suspicion that i know who "gus" is. Great Story and thanks for the fun!
*gasp* how did I make it through this chapter without a review? I must have been sidetracked, or else, lost the review and never got around to reposting it. In any means, I'm pleased to see there are updates and I'm eagerly ready to jump right into them.
But first, I must comment on this chapter. It was really well writen (as always of course) but It did a lot to clear up all of my confusion. Of course, the 4 founders were Merlin's sons and daughters, and it only makes sense that Galen would assume the form of Dumbledore in order to help the wizarding and Muggle communities, and furthermore, be with Minerva. All of my former ponderings on the subject are very clear now! You are simply a master at the slight of hand (or rather, pen).
I'm very sad that Galen!Dumbledore did not continue the relationship with Minerva... especially since they were in the same building for YEARS. So many people pair the two anyway, I don't see why they couldn't have continued to be together... Oh well.
It'll be interesting to see how things will change, evolve and return to the natural state of things. When Galen talks about magical creatures being taken away, does that mean Hedwig and the other owls will return to being just regular-run-of-the-mill owls? How sad! Especially since Hedwig was more than a pet to Harry for years. I guess I could keep on pondering such things, or I can simply click 'submit' and find out for myself!
The thing that stuck out with me the most, and this is something I noticed the most during "Chamber of Secrets", was that the Weasley family has a lot of love in it. This is the kind of family that you'd want to be a part of whether it had magic in it or not. I think you accentuated that point in this chapter.
I can't believe it's over...there is something kind of sad when a favorite story comes to an end, but I guess I'll just have to start on your other stories now :) Seriously though, this was great ending to a fantastic story.
i loved reading ur story ive been reading it for sum time now.. ur a good author i htink u should keep writing good luck