Reviewer: G_A_Potter
Date: 05/14/06 22:30
Chapter: Steak Knives and Shotguns

I was really delighted with this chapter. It was wonderful laughing at Ron as a chip off the old block. Was that a cliche'? Oops, sorry. It fits. The knife thing... just could'nt swallow it.

Author's Response: Thank you. Please check out my other story, Harry Potter and the Forgotten Solution, too. S.

Reviewer: G_A_Potter
Date: 05/14/06 22:24
Chapter: Damage Assessment

I suppose saying that I stayed up all night to finish this would be going a bit over the top? Oh well, said it anyway. Your imagery was outstanding. The story well thought out and played well. Your dialog I found less satisfying. Obviously the punctiuation and most of the spelling were fine. It's just people don't use uncontracted words much. It sounds too formal and stilted. cannot becomes can't, do not becomes don't etc. Also there were a number of words that just didn't fit. I wish it was possible to be more specific, at 350 pages it's hard to. Actually there is one example, no two. to instead of too, won instead of one, there instead of their. Just because the spell check passes it... well I'm sure you get the drift.
I don't mean to nit-pick, it's just with this excellent of a work that's all that's left. Did I say excellent... I meant SUPERB!!
Sorry, that was a little over the top. Kind of like telling you I stayed up all night reading this...

Godric

Author's Response: I lost A LOT of sleep writing this monster back in August, 2005, so it's only appropriate you lose sleep reading it! Just kidding, glad you're enjoying the story. S.

Reviewer: G_A_Potter
Date: 05/14/06 1:36
Chapter: Awakening

Excellent! Nice wry humor. I liked the slow buildup. And yet what about the stranger on the tow path???? Nice bit of mistery.

Author's Response: Thanks. S.

Reviewer: DUMBLEDORES ALLY
Date: 05/10/06 17:10
Chapter: Damage Assessment

hey great story you are putting plenty of time into and it really shows, the imagery you are using plus the plot really make this a great story to read just a little dissapointed when i got to the last chapter and now have to wait. Haha so yeah more of a compliment then a dissapoint well at least to you but just wanted to say great job
(psst when is the new chapter coming out :) haha have to ask

Author's Response: Thank you. Glad you're enjoying it. Chapter 34 was submitted yesterday but rejected for some odd reason, I'm resending tonight. S.

Reviewer: Watso295
Date: 05/10/06 3:52
Chapter: Snape's Mistakes

has it got anything to do with the fact that its impossible to swim in bubbles. its not water but pockets of air and we cant swim in the air so..... in a strong enough bubble stream i guess it would prob be hard or impossible to swim.

Author's Response: No, the bubbles reduce the density of the water so any object entering it would sink. S.

Reviewer: Watso295
Date: 05/09/06 6:08
Chapter: Threads

a fantastic chapter really enjoying the story. can i just point out though that in the UK we do not have thanksgiving so harry potter would not have a thanksgiving dinner. other than that SLIGHT mistake. this story is amazing! Watso295

Author's Response: Yes, I have to remove that...thanks. S.

Reviewer: Lost_Wizard
Date: 05/07/06 0:06
Chapter: Home Again

Wonderful job agian enjoyed this chapter and a waiting for the new chapter in my own hyper way...

Author's Response: Thanks. S.

Reviewer: HJaneWeasley
Date: 05/06/06 10:19
Chapter: Home Again

Hey, good job, I love this story!
One thing though...in the wonderful world of HP they use "mum" as opposed to "mother" and "mom".

Author's Response: Yes, I thought I had gotten rid of that, too. S.

Reviewer: Mortmagic
Date: 04/29/06 4:02
Chapter: Threads

We do not have Thanksgiving dinners in UK, so HG and RW would not have made one.

Author's Response: Yeah, I know. I thought I removed that! S.

Reviewer: pandafan81
Date: 04/29/06 2:14
Chapter: Home Again

Ooooh! more peices to that puzzle. I'm very interested in what Ginny is up to. I hope we get more informaion on her specific talents and what she believes is going on. I'm glad Harry and Hermione are communicating. And I'm glad Molly is not getting overly worked up about Harry and Ginny's therapy and all that's required.

I caught a couple of small things. Pig is a boy owl. And in England, children call their mothers "mum" rather than mom. And Harry asks for tea, but then Molly gives him cocoa (or is that a hint that Molly's mothering skills are diminishing like the magic is?) :)

Of course, as always I loved the chapter. I'm glad we got to see a little bit of everyone, including Rudy. I still think it's quite comical to see Snape sitting around with Peter and Merlin- now that's an interesting dinner party! Gee about the only people we didn't see were Tonks and Remus (and James!) I hope we get to see some more of them soon. OH and I love that Fred asked out Patty! I think that's a nice twist, and shows that the twins don't do EVERYTHING together. Thank you for the loverly chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks! S.

Reviewer: Vicus Riddle
Date: 04/28/06 23:39
Chapter: Home Again

I really enjoy the story, it has a lot of twists!! But is really hard to imagine Harry calling mom to Molly...

Author's Response: Thank you. Please check out my other story, Harry Potter and the Forgotten Solution, too. S.

Reviewer: jk_charlie
Date: 04/20/06 5:48
Chapter: Damage Assessment

i am new to this but yours is the first fan fiction i have read and i believe that it is entirely credible!
fantastic characterisation and uses of light and dark in your text.
i am extremely impressed and hope to read more soon!!!

Author's Response: Thank you. Please check out my other story, Harry Potter and the Forgotten Solution, too. S.

Reviewer: pandafan81
Date: 04/18/06 16:18
Chapter: Ginny’s Contribution

LOL! I started reading this and thought, Hey! I've already read this chapter! But then I remember that the first part had been attached to the bottom of chapter 31.

I really liked that Harry and Ginny fought, but made up quickly. It shows that Harry IS maturing, by not holding a grudge and his willingness to change/mature. They really are kidst (18 and 17) and I think people forget that teenagers are still emotionally developing. All of the experiences they've had in dealing with Voldemort caused them all to grow up too quickly, but that doesn't mean that they're ready for that maturity (one reason Harry is so depressed). Anyway. I'm glad that you are including the emotional turmoil with the action/adventure. It makes for a nice balance.

Plus, I really loved that Ron was there to support Harry and Ginny. And that Olga didn't need to read his mind about the hunger! :) That made me laugh!

Author's Response: Getting a bit confused, Panda? S.

Reviewer: Lost_Wizard
Date: 04/18/06 11:48
Chapter: Ginny’s Contribution

You cannot get off that ez I was reading this when the up grades messed everything up.
Great Chapter I give it a 10/10.
thanks for the great read.
we W A N T More

Author's Response: Thanks, still pushing the chapters through...10 or 15 more to go. S.

Reviewer: Lost_Wizard
Date: 04/18/06 11:48
Chapter: Ginny’s Contribution

You cannot get off that ez I was reading this when the up grades messed everything up.
Great Chapter I give it a 10/10.
thanks for the great read.
we W A N T More

Author's Response: Thank you. Please check out my other story, Harry Potter and the Forgotten Solution, too. S.

Reviewer: Lost_Wizard
Date: 04/18/06 11:47
Chapter: Ginny’s Contribution

You cannot get off that ez I was reading this when the up grades messed everything up.
Great Chapter I give it a 10/10.
thanks for the great read.
we W A N T More

Author's Response: Thank you. Please check out my other story, Harry Potter and the Forgotten Solution, too. S.

Reviewer: LRS078
Date: 04/15/06 23:13
Chapter: Absolute Power, Almost

Super fic, nice deep story....love to see it updated soon. A very enjoyable trek off the canon path.

Author's Response: Thank you. Please check out my other story, Harry Potter and the Forgotten Solution, too. S.

Reviewer: Lost_Wizard
Date: 04/12/06 16:38
Chapter: Absolute Power, Almost

I just love this story line and want more.Pls help feed my addiction.

Author's Response: Glad you are enjoying it. S.

Reviewer: pandafan81
Date: 04/07/06 1:16
Chapter: Absolute Power, Almost

First of all, the first part of chapter 32 was included at the end of this chapter. And not that I mind, but it totally left an evil cliff hanger! :)

As for the chapter, I'm starting to peice things together (a little). Like always you keep me guessing, but I love that about your story. I was totally grossed out about a note being nailed to dead Fudge's head! *shudder* Hurray for Ron and Hermione tring to have another baby. I think that Hermione's in the right place again to try. Good for them! As always, it was a great chapter. And I hope to see the rest of chapter 32 soon!

Author's Response: Thanks! S.

Reviewer: pandafan81
Date: 04/01/06 12:55
Chapter: Olga's Story

HA! That's quite a surprising reaction there! I started reading this chapter days ago, and of course, a combination of a faulty DSL modem and several distractions prevented me from finishing and reviewing. But I have the entire house to myself today, and the modem seems to be on good behavior. I think Ginny would be an excellent healer, although I think she's going to be disapointed when she finds that Downs syndrom isn't cureable. Unless her magic can change the girl's chromosones- but then, that would alter the girl completely- perhaps even in personality. We're actually having a conversation about this in the Department of Mysteries on the beta forums. Another excellently written chapter. I see that you are editing and revising your chapters, do I need to go back and reread everything for new plot elements? Or are you just fixing grammatical errors and so forth?

Author's Response: Thank you, again. In our world D/S is not curable, but in the HP world... ? I might tone down what Ginny does for Rebecca in the revised version, we'll see. The revision is done as part of my submission to PhoenixSong. It's pretty substantial but the general story line is the same. I fix a few plot errors/holes and a lot of British-isms. S.

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