Just like "The Love of a Sister" this story is really touching. Things like this really do happen all the time, and it's important that people realize it and try to help. I take my hat off to Susan and to the author.
That was really good. Very touching. I'm just a little confused: was Smith raping him or something?
Seren, Seren, Seren. We all know you are excellent at touching a reader's feelings and enrapturing them into a trance; this is what makes your fics so memorable. They can entertain while teaching a lesson, voice your opinion while voicing others' as well, and speak a truth no one has ever though about before. Why do you think so many people love your work? It's because it's worthy of being published. (By the way, if you ever publish a book, I want to know so I may buy it... and read... and fanboy squee all over myself).
Anyways. You're known throughout the HP fandom (so far as my little knowledge goes) and I rarely even get the chance to read most of your work. However, I must say that this is the best fanfiction I have ever read. Partly, I learned something I have never realized before- this is a problem, there are people out there who need help, and we all need that savior in our lives that is willing to fight for us when we are at our weakest point. I also learned that to tread across a dangerous topic very carefully is a hard thing to master, but you rise up to the challenge and hit the ball right out of the park. It's one of my favourite things about reading your work.
It would be near impossible to even find an error, and even using my nit-picking utinsels I have stored, I just can't help but drool at the prospect that I'm rereading it. The Love Of A Brother is what introduced me to your work, and remains to be my absolute favourite fanfic of all time (this and the rest of the series). With that, I'm actually getting to my review. Pardon the fanboy gobbledegook. >.>
If you were not to read the summary, the introduction you give us to the fic is very mysterious, and would have anyone reeled in without a second's notice. I found that happened when I ventured into your author page for the very first time and happened across this; I wasn't able to stop. It's the lord of all hooks- speaking of something that the reader has no idea what it shall be. "She knows this must be done, but she has no idea about how to do it. All she knows is that this is wrong, and she has to stop it."
And It is very hard not to just post the rest of the fic as a single quote and saying "GUH. LOVE" at this moment in time, but I'll try my best to restrain myself. You are a very skilled multitasker in the fic sense; you are not only able to tread on ground most would not even take a peek at, but you are able to give your characters life, meaning, and a soul that cookie-cutter characters would never give us. Your Susan Bones, for example, is absolutely the best Susan I have ever read- and even if it is pretty good in a story, the other authors haven't given it this interesting little tidbit, which gives us insight as to what she does next: "But there's a little part of her, the tiniest, most transparent sliver of her soul that made the Sorting Hat ask Are you sure you're not meant for Gryffindor, child? that makes her stay where she is, trying to determine the best course of action.". Once again, currently restraining myself from absolutely squeeing over the page.
Susan, the way you portray her, is an absolute heroine. She has no trouble with hard work, and she feels no shame with what or who she is- simply a quality that is a flicker that indicates what's to come. She's got two parts to her personality, as well, shown here: "Part of her is scared, but part of her is seething." She is the hero of this story already, wanting to help someone she doesn't know very well- and she wants to do it for what is right, for what she believes in, and she wants justice. Like a true Hufflepuff, which leads back to the fact that you have no problems characterizing a character. You make it so real, and I am left begging for more heroines in the world we live in; heroes to help us when we fall. You left me wanting more, wanting justice. And I'm a proud Ravenclaw. The Hufflepuff is coming out of me, I suppose.
Normally, if this was to be a debate, people might interject here with the fact you're making her into a Mary-Sue. However, I would state au contraire, just look at the next few lines. She's scared, a heroine who wants to do something for this person she hardly knows. But she is scared, and it is shown throughout the words you use, and you make sure that she is like every single person walking the earth. Someone who fears what must be done, who fears what might happen if they go down in the name of justice- like Susan, a person who wanted to do the right thing, but didn't know how. Susan Bones, a normal person who doesn't want to be a hero. She just wants to save a friend- which many of us get lost in translation when trying to convey this message. You bring it to light.
You then begin to make the wheels start turning in Susan's head- she starts wondering how everything else is for him. Does he have anyone else? What if no one is there to offer aid? What if someone else is there, but doesn't do anything about it? Thoughts that are hard to come by in fanfiction- but you handled it beautifully. Now, I won't say that this isn't always the case- plenty of fanfiction does just that, and is wonderful- but Seren, it's here, and it's ready to be devoured by the public. It is beautiful.
So what's she to do? She goes off to save Graham, someone she hardly knows, and is going to save him, to be his savior. She's there to condemn the betrayer, and she wants him to never do this to anyone again. How do you do it? I certainly don't know. Not only is your storytelling flawless, but your characterization speaks wonders as well. I guess that's what I'm rambling about... it's just fabulous.
I just want to leave you with this thought: You write for a purpose Seren, and I don't know what it is- only you know- but I want to let you know you touched me in a way nothing else has ever has. I want to be like Susan, I want to be a hero. You changed me for the better, Seren, and I thank you for that.
I read the second one first and cried . then I read this and cried again . I've been looking for the third but I can't find it . am I missing something or has it not been posted yet?
That was greta. It nearly made me cry. Go badgers! P.S. It says 'trilogy' and I can only find two. Is the third already up or is there not going to be one?
I'm about to cry. This is probably the best Badger story -- ever. I love the internal struggle you've presented here, and the inter-House unity. You showed that even though Susan's not strong as Smith, she knows she has to overpower him to do what's right, even though she's defending a 'baby snake.' It was absolutely brilliant.
Oh my.This was great.Reminding us badgers are firce also when protecting there own.It wasnice how you made it were her aunt gave her courage.I cant wait for the next story in the trio.