I liked it casue it has a message for everyone, and I'm guessing it has a hidden message. That was really cool!
i have read better
You really did a great job on your poem
interesting . . . i like it!!!!!!!! it sums up the veil really well.
WOW! The way you described so much, in so little, was truely amazing!
It was like I could see the grey, silvery viel in my mind's eye, and I could see it moving. Every word your wrought breathed life into that picture.
I kinda like it,
I love it!
The Veil is a tantalizing subject for a poem and one that I don't think many would single out for the purpose of writing about it in this particular format. Poetry is tough - you've got to say a great deal in few words. An excellent piece. I hope we'l;l be hearing more from you!
"Come over to the dark and angsty side!"
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You know you're a dedicated Harry Potter fan when you write fan fiction about it, and especially if you can write that good of a poem about a single part of it! Very well done!
It is short, but still good
This poem had a lot of impact and stlyle for a short poem. Honestly, I saw this poem on the tens smallest story list, and didn't read it with high expectations. While I expected this poem to be brief, I didn't expect for it to be so sophisticated. I can tell from this small medium you have a great way with words. The words really flowed, and even though the poem itself is a short and compact peice, it had a great legacy. This poem is sort of like, in terms of performing, a little kid with a big and beautiful singing voice. It doesn't seem rushed or crammed at all, and fits the space it's given perfectly. I really can't say more, for fear of writing a review more than twice the size of the poem, but congradulations on an excellent job!
Author's Response: I'm starting to really like these top tens lists...I'm getting publicity! :P I'm glad to see my story rose to and beyond your expectations. Your in depth review and compliments are greatly appreciated. :) xxacirexx
Wow, very nice! You combined the right words together to make this a great poem!
Author's Response: Thank you. :)
wow, this is an incredible 'shortest story' (I just found the tens button, so cool!) Well done really meaningful. I love it!!! 10/10
Author's Response: :) I was actually rather suprised to find my poem in the tens. I didn't really think that it might be the shortest one on the site... anyway. Thanks for your review.
that was a realy good poem!!!! i liked it a ton!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Good job! I was looking through random people's faves. and this one looked interesting. Good job! You did a good portrayal of what it is from the books. I like it! 10/10
Author's Response: Oooh, another review! Yay! Thanks for the review. I hope to get more fics up here, like I've probably explained before, so just keep your eyes peeled and you should see more fics coming from acire!
that was great. you reviewed my poem so i decided to review yours. truly excellent.10!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing my poem! Good to hear you liked it. :) xxEricaxx
BRILL! Love it, even though I hate the viel.... evil pile of.... anyways, can't wait to hear more story stuff from you!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I really want to get more fics written, so I'm sure you'll see more from me. Glad you liked it. :)
Well Done Erica! I'm so glad to see you posted this poem, and I'm proud to think I saw it first! :) Beautiful words, short snappy and rhyming. Just how I like it. I also hope you put more up soon, you've got real talent. :) Keep writing, xxx Claire xxx
Author's Response: Thanks Claire. :D Another nice review....I shall go and review your new one too now.