Reviews For The Veil
Reviewer: ech1811
Date: 04/10/10 19:50
Chapter: The Veil

I'm literrally (can't spell) tearing up. That was phenomonole (again, can't spell)

Reviewer: namtsho
Date: 01/29/09 0:23
Chapter: The Veil

Good poem! I couldnt have written ONE sentence about the Veil! I am that bad! And you are good. Hope I'll get to write some good and short poems like you!!

Reviewer: Fire_Quil
Date: 04/21/08 13:35
Chapter: The Veil

Short but sweet! I liked it. It explained quite a lot about the veil.

Reviewer: Evilpersonified
Date: 04/18/08 8:27
Chapter: The Veil

First of all, let me applaud you for writing on such an obscure subject. While the veil is important, I don't think too many people choose to write poems about it as it is merely a veil (or curtain) despite having killed our beloved Sirius. *morns*

What I really like about this piece is the adjective beginning each sentence. They could stand alone as a list, and would perfectly describe the veil. Additionally, I love the dichotomy you represent with your first line "aged but sailing strong". I also enjoyed the contrast between "separating" and "ripping" especially with them being so close together. Coupled with the line about it's grace, It just adds the idea that the most harmless objects often do the most damage.

I do have one suggestion, however. "Cutting through the air" sounds a bit clunky to me. Perhaps taking out "the" would sound better, and personify the air, demonstrating the harm the veil causes.

Overall, I really enjoyed this piece. You expressed so much with so few words, a difficult feat, and an essential talent for a poet.

Reviewer: love_letters
Date: 04/02/08 18:50
Chapter: The Veil

en, i've herd beter and i've herd wors

Reviewer: loony1723
Date: 02/01/08 4:53
Chapter: The Veil

you have unleashed your inner spirit

never let it die.

Reviewer: loony1723
Date: 02/01/08 4:52
Chapter: The Veil

you have unleashed your inner spirit

never let it die.

Reviewer: Miss Orange Pen
Date: 10/02/07 16:51
Chapter: The Veil

Brilliant! I love all the description and metaphors - great job!

Reviewer: ARB514
Date: 07/23/07 18:08
Chapter: The Veil

A curious poem.unlike what I write... but still it's brilliant

Reviewer: bellshel_36
Date: 07/20/07 13:21
Chapter: The Veil

wow ive never read a poem as good as that

Reviewer: Fred the Duck
Date: 05/28/07 13:24
Chapter: The Veil

its like the voices that they heard from behind the veil! i loved i!

Reviewer: jlab_hpisdiboss
Date: 05/20/07 18:46
Chapter: The Veil

insighting but a little unclear

Reviewer: Abinlo_Ureesn
Date: 05/01/07 22:12
Chapter: The Veil

ominous

Reviewer: potions_perfection
Date: 04/30/07 14:45
Chapter: The Veil

Simplistic and beautiful all at the same time. I like it, you captured the Veil's... feeling, I would say, perfectly.

Reviewer: dracosgirlfriend
Date: 03/23/07 18:19
Chapter: The Veil

cool

Reviewer: Bellatrix_Lestrange
Date: 01/26/07 11:50
Chapter: The Veil

Great poem very moving..

Reviewer: crazyabouthermione95
Date: 01/20/07 22:22
Chapter: The Veil

Great poem!

Reviewer: Herminoninny
Date: 01/13/07 16:35
Chapter: The Veil

I thought u needed 100 words in a storie...


Great that is unbelieveably gdgd!!!!!

Reviewer: Bookwormy
Date: 01/07/07 8:26
Chapter: The Veil

wow....that was quite amazing.....I loved how the last line rhymed with amaze.....

Reviewer: Rapid Reader
Date: 12/21/06 16:06
Chapter: The Veil

I'm just kidding! WHAT THE HECK?!?!?!?!?!

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