Reviews For It's Witchcraft
Reviewer: winxcharmx
Date: 05/10/08 19:55
Chapter: Decisions

wow I didnt think the chapter was to short...
like the text it was purfect

Reviewer: winxcharmx
Date: 05/10/08 19:53
Chapter: Choices

ouch
poor draco
and just because I cant belive I said it Ill do it again
POOR DRACO MALFOY

Reviewer: winxcharmx
Date: 05/10/08 19:48
Chapter: Confession's Aftermath

This is 1 of the best fanfics EVER

Reviewer: winxcharmx
Date: 05/10/08 19:48
Chapter: Confession's Aftermath

This is 1 of the best fanfics EVER

Reviewer: winxcharmx
Date: 05/10/08 19:35
Chapter: Reality

WOW

Reviewer: winxcharmx
Date: 05/10/08 19:23
Chapter: Together

wowy wow wow

Reviewer: winxcharmx
Date: 05/10/08 19:14
Chapter: Happy Christmas

WOW

Reviewer: winxcharmx
Date: 05/10/08 18:53
Chapter: Confrontation

Amazing
she should had said "thats a lot of clop when she snorted at the end

Reviewer: winxcharmx
Date: 05/10/08 18:48
Chapter: With One Look

amazing I love it

Reviewer: MerrryD
Date: 04/24/08 20:42
Chapter: Secrets

“So, uh, what were you and young Weasleby whispering about?”

hehe. I like how you keep Draco in character. It's nice to read a fic where he doesn't *transform* for Hermione.

A shiver ran down her spine as someone stopped directly behind her. “’The affects of the Irresolutus potion’,” a voice she recognized as Draco’s quoted. “That’s the essay.”

I'm not sure that quoted is the best word here. It reads like "That's the essay." is being quoted. Not that part that acutally is being quoted. And "...a voice she recognized as Draco's quoted." just doesn't flow to me. The wording seems a little off. I think it would flow better if it read, "...quoted a voice she recognized as Draco's."

In all honestly, she didn’t really want to.

Then why did she? I would've liked to see some details about what she say in Draco's eyes that convinced her to go.

She snorted, “No! Honestly, we’re nearly adults, you know.”

That is so like Hermione. But, she's only sixteen. Sixteen-year-olds, studious or not, have hormones and they crave intimate contact. Hermione probably wouldn't have any problems with just snogging.

Much to her relief...

Why? Why is it much to her relief? She let him kiss her, so why would she want it to end?

Gently leaning his forehead to hers, Draco finished, “We can’t get enough of each other.”

I love this line! It's the perfect way to end the chapter.

-Mere

Reviewer: MerrryD
Date: 04/20/08 13:15
Chapter: It's Witchcraft!

Evidently, the latter had won out.

So Malfoy follows his heart. It's nice to know he has one. :)

“Because you want me,” she mocked his words from the previous day.

Man, she has got courage. I really like how you show her as a brave, courageous girl who says what she thinks, even to Draco.

Logic leaned toward the former, but the current state of his soul almost wished for hurt.

This is so sweet and touching. I felt Draco's inner anguish in when I read this line.

“What are we going to do about this then?”

Ahh.. Hermione. Always the logical thinker.

“Now I wish it were witchcraft,” she snorted. “Because then I could stop it.”

heheheh. He's not that bad, Hermione!

Great chapter!
-Mere

Reviewer: MerrryD
Date: 04/20/08 9:29
Chapter: Confrontation

It was the first time in her life that she seriously considered skipping class.

This is a great line. It shows us exactly how much Draco is bothering her.

Today he was determined not to look for her, or think about her at all.

Haha. This is like those New Year resolutions not to eat chocolate or something... you break them within ten minutes of making them.

“What was that about?” Ron asked from across the table.

I think it's a little weird that Ron and Harry are so oblivous. Ron may not be great at feelings, but if Draco is affecting Hermione as much as were led to believe, I think he'd notice something. And if Harry is as obsessed with Draco as you are implying then he would most definately notice that Draco's been staring at Hermione all week.

...Zofia was on duty for the match.

Umm... I don't quite understand this part. Hermione is the brightest witch in her year, and a year older than Zofia, so it doesn't seem like Zofia would be that much help. Especially at a Quidditch match where Hermione is going to surrouned by Gryffindors, Ravenclaws, and Hufflepuffs anyway,who would all jump to her defense if Draco tried anything.

I'll also take this time to comment on Zofia's name. So far it fits her very well, she seems to be as wise as a fifthteen-year-old can be (yes I did my research!).

Hermione’s heart sped up...

Is this due to fear or something else? *wink nudge wink*

He could almost see her heart shatter in her eyes.

I love this description. I can clearly see in my head what this and the whole scene look like.

Great job!
-Mere

Author's Response: "Zofia was on duty" it was just that they didn't want Hermione to be alone, and even she thought it was ridiculous at the match, that's why she left on her own.rnrnThanks you for doing your research about the name! I generally have some sort of purpose behind my character's names, it's nice to know someone noticed!

Reviewer: MerrryD
Date: 04/20/08 9:03
Chapter: With One Look

Great chapter!

Then it hit him. His thoughts clearly weren’t natural.

I love all the assumptions he makes. Because he's pureblood and a Malfoy he couldn't possibly have feelings for a lowlife Mudblood. It would have to be something she was doing, nevermind she looked at him in fear. :)

If only Potter knew that his girlfriend was desperately after him.

This line made me giggle. :) Draco and his assumptions again. teehee.

I also like how you're switching between Hermione's and Draco's thoughts. It's great to see each of their thoughts regarding each other.

Great Job!
-Mere

Reviewer: XLR8
Date: 04/05/08 2:50
Chapter: Decisions

short but still great :]

Reviewer: XLR8
Date: 04/05/08 2:48
Chapter: Choices

i've submitted reviews for all the chapters i've read so far and now im not sure what to write. umm .... ?
it was a good chapter :]
thats it really. =/

Reviewer: XLR8
Date: 04/05/08 2:41
Chapter: Confession's Aftermath

hmm, interesting.. i wonder how the story will end...

Reviewer: XLR8
Date: 04/05/08 2:32
Chapter: Torn

umm, i dont know what to say about this chapter.
it was good though.
hermione is changing....

Reviewer: XLR8
Date: 04/05/08 2:24
Chapter: Reality

lol, now its intense.
"..his lips burned." woah..
:]

Reviewer: XLR8
Date: 04/05/08 2:23
Chapter: Together

getting intense ;O

Reviewer: XLR8
Date: 04/05/08 2:11
Chapter: Happy Christmas

:] awesome!

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