Reviews For Absent Friends
Reviewer: megan_lupin
Date: 02/03/07 0:28
Chapter: (this is the first and last chapter.)

Hello.

Personally, I liked this story, and I think one of the most unique things about it was the way that it was written. The one-shot was like a bunch of thoughts -- broken up and vague, yet powerful at the same time.

I love your description of how the Veil is eerie and isn't understood, even by the people who work there. It is a very odd and mysterious thing, and I liked how you wrote that.

A typo (I think) that I noticed was in part of the statement of the Ministry's workers about the Veil -- agonized them were the Veil, -- I think it needs to be "agonized them was the Veil," since the second part of that statement is separate, and the Veil is singular.

Another thing that I found a bit questioning was the voice. Did you have a particular person in mind to say "Harry," or was it Sirius / Dumbledore / someone else? I want to say that it's Dumbledore, strictly because of the whole feather thing (which I loved, by the way), but I'm not sure.

Finally, and as a last little note, I absolutely LOVED the ending. The second-to-last paragraph is really nice, but my favourite line through the entire thing was the final one -- For he knew he would not be facing the day alone. -- It's a perfect line for Harry post-HBP.

Once again, let me say that I think you did a wonderful job on this uniquely told story.

~Megan

Reviewer: WitchatHeart77
Date: 09/13/05 13:02
Chapter: (this is the first and last chapter.)

Very nice! Moving, even! I would love to see more of your work!

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it. I do have a humerous selection in que right now, so that will be up soon, I hope!

Reviewer: smart_one
Date: 08/28/05 10:11
Chapter: (this is the first and last chapter.)

This was beautifully written. Your attention to detail set the entire mood and reallly brought the story out. Although it was a little on the short side, it got the point across. Keep up the fabulous work! 9/10!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I appreciate the encouragement. My next one will probably be a little longer. :)

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