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Name: HanilarLion (Signed) · Date: 12/19/05 16:47 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
You really know how to make me cry. My eyes are still teary. Beautiful job.

Name: GinnyGirlAtHeart (Signed) · Date: 12/14/05 20:52 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
I have never, ever read a story that made me cry. You are a great writer. I wish I could write as well as you! Your story was the first fanfic I ever read, a long time ago, and didn't know how to review. I just read it over a gain, and it still made me cry. This story is the best ever, without a doubt. You deserve infinity out of ten for this story.

Name: GinnyGirlAtHeart (Signed) · Date: 12/14/05 20:47 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
I have never, ever read a story that made me cry. You are a great writer. I wish I could write as well as you! Your story was the first fanfic I ever read, a long time ago, and didn't know how to review. I just read it over a gain, and it still made me cry. This story is the best ever, without a doubt. You deserve infinity out of ten for this story.

Name: RoseOfRavenclaw (Signed) · Date: 11/08/05 17:04 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
*cries* Wow this was absolutely brilliant. I haven't read a piece that made me more sad, but was so realistic and breath-taking. 10/10, without a doubt. Really great, and the description you had was awesome.

Name: 2ChocolateFrogs (Anonymous) · Date: 11/06/05 14:10 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
Wow, your story was AMAZING! It was beautifully written, and had such great insight into the characters' minds....you could totally feel Hermione's pain. Very, very good job!!! ~10/10~

Name: Figuresk8er916 (Signed) · Date: 11/03/05 19:15 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
*tear* . . . I'm sorry, but words just can't describe how beautiful this piece is. *sniffle* Keep it up! (10/10)

Name: Figuresk8er916 (Signed) · Date: 11/03/05 19:14 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
*tear* . . . I'm sorry, but words just can't describe how beautiful this piece is. *sniffle* Keep it up!

Name: AnnaDeBoullans (Signed) · Date: 10/30/05 18:33 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
Absolutely WONDERFUL.Let's see, how many words could I use to describe this INCREDIBLE piece? Awe-inspiring, beautifully sad, delciously descriptive, touchingly poetic...the list goes on and on. Please, oh dear God please, write more like this and never EVER stop! 10/10

Name: Aequitas (Signed) · Date: 10/24/05 17:42 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]

Here is your review, lovely Seren. I was going to review chapter three of The Simple Evolution of a Faceless Butterfly, but no, it's not uploaded yet! *glares* But it was a wonderful thing to discover this little gem. Anyway, your review:

Oh, goddess. It was beautiful. Time and time again I find myself describing your stories as “beautiful,” but I run out of words to call them. For the number of fics you've written with a Last Battle, it's astonishing how you manage to make each and every one of them different, special. This one cut me to the heart as you told of how they died. I could feel Hermione's pain right here, in this chest. I could also see each scene-Ginny, Neville and Luna, all separately. Vivid, truly in color imagery.

I love the recurring themes you subtly remind us of throughout-being a child, the yellow grass, the flowers and the sacrifices they made for the war. The flowers were perfect symbols of re-growth, of coming back and facing what happened that day. The sacrifices were heartbreaking, especially as you put them in Hermione's point of view. Of course, being a child and the “fields of gold” comes to a glorious conclusion at the end.

I must say, the title of this piece brings a melody to mind. I can hear Eva Cassidy in my ear as I review, but I think someone else has sung it too-Sting? I'm not sure, but a touching part of the story. The dull yellow grass turns to gold. I can imagine how the colors must brighten as Hermione comes to term with her past.

A masterpiece, Seren. Another story with more than just a plot and characters. It's 3-D, as I often find your stories are. You brought a story to life for the readers, and I thank you for that. This will stay on my favorites always, as will another piece . . . Now hurry up and upload The Simple Evolution of a Faceless Butterfly!

Name: HermioneDancr (Signed) · Date: 09/30/05 22:27 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
I think, Seren dear, that you know that I try to find some constructive criticism for every story I review. Even yours, even Jenna's. For everyone. No matter how good they are. And while I still think you should take out the parenthesis around the flashbacks (I find them distracting), I don't really have any to offer. Not for this story.

It makes me ache; it's so beautiful. I've read it at least ten times, and it still gives my chills up and down my arms. Hermione's regret is tangible. She is very much in character and yet very much in pain-quite a feat, and one many authors cannot manage. The descriptions are both beautiful and moving. “As they turn her slowly, she begins to tremble. From between tear-laden lashes, she can see the northern most point of the lake, where a friend died, years ago.” Beyond the strength of the prose, you manage to convey so much meaning. Her reliance on Harry and Ron is completely believable, compelling, and in keeping with canon (or should I say cannon just to make you laugh?).

The flashbacks are so well-written they leave me almost speechless. The battle is so vivid it makes my heart stop. I can see it happen in my mind so clearly… I can see them fall. I tried to find a favorite line from the battle, but I can't. I really honestly can't. They're all so well done. And as is often the case with good writing, the whole is far greater than the sum of the parts. You've built it so well. The tension, the rhythm, the tone… they all combine to make a vision so powerful it knocks me down (except for the fact that I'm already sitting).

The end... I can't even begin to describe it. The pain of memories and the desire to start over and be a child again are so overwhelming. They resonate so strongly with me… I told you about seeing a hillside completely golden with flowers this summer, didn't I? That hillside and this story are both beautiful, and linked in my memory. The last sentence in particular has found a resting place in my heart. “And for a moment, the memory of an echo of whispers rose to touch the sky; a little bandy-legged blonde girl, a chubby boy, and a flamed-haired girl ran beside the kids, their laughter vibrating with that of the three children who sped along through fields of gold.” How can I even describe the beauty and hope and poignancy in those words? I can only humbly repeat them and allow them to speak for themselves.

Name: Foxy Wolf (Signed) · Date: 09/19/05 13:52 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
Your stories gives me such a wonderful sad feeling. I cried when Luna mouthed that they loved them and then again when they ran like kids in the end. I love it when stories give me this melancholy feeling and I must say I truly love the way your storis make me fell. This was simply beautiful.

Name: Insecurity (Signed) · Date: 08/31/05 17:29 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
I feel very melancholy after reading this. Being used to reading dark fan fictions, I often don't feel an impact, but I did today. Your portrayal of the war is very realistic, I think it does prepare us for what JKR will have in store.
The layout of the story added to the effect, making me enter Hermione's mind as she feels her way around Hogwarts, triggering flashbacks, only short because she doesn't want to relive it at first, and then in the end letting it all flow out. I think you could have gone into more detail with some of the deaths, such as McGonagoll's, Hagrids and Susan's, although the effect of them flashing by was very good.
I liked the philosophy you gave through Luna and the three ghosts present at the end. It softened the ending, and gave me hope. The description at the end was very vivid, I could see the field in my mind.
I loved the theme of stolen childhood, it is very true to those who joined the Great War as teengers, and never survived it. The contrast between Hermione moaning and then playing at the end allowed me to think of how young the soldiers really are who go to war, the impact it has on their lives afterwards. I do think you could have spent more time having her come to terms with it, she does appear to have a revelation of some kind, possibly from Luna's ghost? If not, it takes slightly longer for someone to realise it's time to move on.

This one-shot has really touched my heart, I have Eva Cassidy singing in my head now, it's certainly a well-written piece.

Name: lunafish (Signed) · Date: 08/28/05 18:30 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
A beautifully agonizing story--I still can't hold back the tears. The worst for me was Neville, I think, esp. having read your "Quiet Courage." It's painful even to think of these deaths, but you've described them in such a way that I can't help but _see_ them myself. I can only hope JKR does not reinforce the image by making it canon. It's amazing how much these characters mean to us. Writing the story from Hermione's perspective made it all the more affecting.

Name: Little_hoole3333 (Signed) · Date: 08/26/05 22:58 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
One part nearly made me cry. It was really good. I liked it a lot. :) :( :P :O

Name: Solembum230 (Anonymous) · Date: 08/26/05 1:43 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
This story was so wonderful but so sad! I almost cried. There are a few typos (lilies is spelled as "lillies" in one part), but I give it a ten.

Name: Fleur_Delacour (Anonymous) · Date: 08/23/05 16:02 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
Awwww, so sweet, and itresting, beautiful meassage. Like I once read, "Do not grieve over my death, but cherish my life." Sort of fits, doesnt it? I think you worked in the character deaths very well, I give you a eight!

Name: luke90 (Signed) · Date: 08/23/05 12:45 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
Woah man, you got talent i love the way you wrote it, although i didnt liek the ending, i though u could of made a twist. anyway flipping amazing.

Name: LbSoCcEr483 (Signed) · Date: 08/20/05 23:08 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
That was truely amazing! I loved ever minute of reading it! Every line showed true emotion and it was very believable!

Name: acire (Signed) · Date: 08/20/05 4:58 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
That was really good. That was one of the best post Hogwarts one shots I've read. I liked the way you had the flash backs. Did the song 'Fields of Gold' inspire you with this story or was it just a random title?

Name: MagicalMaddie331 (Signed) · Date: 08/19/05 17:59 · For: Through Fields of Gold [one-shot]
sweet story!!!! hey that was so totally awesome!! it was really touching, n very powerful. it was short, but it was sooo good!

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