NOOO YOU LITTLE EVIL VOLDEMORT!! Ah sorry lost my cool for a minute there =D Awesome one shot simply amazing!
I cried. It's amazing how you can get so teary-eyed about fictional characters, ya know?
OMG! I'm crying right now! It's so sad! I feel so bad for them. Great job. Peter Pettigrewe is a coward. A dumb a**, lying, coward.
Omigod, I have tears in my eyes. That was so good! It was almost as if I was there with them. I would like to take this opportunity to express my extreme dislike for Peter Pettigrew. I hate him!!! If he was real, and if I was a witch, I would hate him even more!!!!!!! Great story, though.
THAT was soo beautiful! One of my favorite fanfics of all time. It made me cry, it was so good. Great job, and thanks for the good read.
Aww! LOL now you hate me! I hope your second chapter gets accepted, and i hope its soon! I need somrhting to take me away from the dreaded horrors of... school! Please, continue writing, and even if i DO pick up on some mistakes, i wont be really picky. I just know form ewxperience the hardest chapter to get up is the second one! Mine was rejected 8 times, for all of the reasons you were lucky enough to slide by with! Its now got 8 chapters, so the hardest barrier to overcome, as far as Im concerned is making the second as good as the first, and that miht be abit of a challenge for you becasue this is awesome!
I agree with Quill down there, she seems ot like the same stories I do! As with your other story, there are few tiny mistakes, but obviously your mod was nice enough to let them pass. I know from experience the second chapter is the hardest!
“Well well well, found you at last.” he said hoarsely. Around him there seemed to a cold wind, which caught in James’ throat. it should be a , === "...you at last," he said hoarsely. The same with the line underneath that aswell, you put a period instead of comma. It's alright, its all very confusing at first! I like the way at the end you said Lily was already dead. It showed their "undying love" as people put it, ... well it does die. "Theres no happy ending to true love, because true love doesn't die" Lily and James proved that theory wrong, their love has helped Harry through so mcuh, Lil's love for him especially. I almost cried when she said they would be with James soon! Well done for one of your first fics! ~Steph*
Author's Response: That was one of my first fics, so I was going for content, not context. Thank you for your help.
Oh, that was beatiful. The worrds wee like poetry. The story was like, like I don't know what but is rolled over me like a gentle wave of sadness and beauty. It was amazing, touching and absolutely the way I thought it would be! Poignant
Author's Response: thank you so much! I had no idea this had even got in, I just came on today, and I was so surprised!
wow... that was truly a very, very good description of their death. Obviously very sad as well, but really touching. That last line... You have a very good way of making someone feel certain emotions. Great job.
Author's Response: thank you very much! It really means alot to me that people like my stories!
This is a great story. That last line has been haunting me. I look forward to reading more stories from this author.
Author's Response: thank you very much. I am going to submit more stories, but mugglenet doesn't accept my stories, so that's why I was so surprised to see that they had accepted this one!
i can't believe that no one has reviewed your story yet! you are such talented writer and i absolutely fell in love with the story even though it was so sad. do you have anymore stories? i really really want to read them!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I have submitted another story here, but they havn't accepted it. If you go on harrypotterfanfic.net I have lots of stories on there. I will try and submit more stories here, if mugglenet will accept them!