That was a sweet bubbly little poem! I liked it. And, as other reviewers have said, the last line, numbers never lie, is brilliant. I wish poetry sounded this good for me!
I read this once before I got my account. I looked at the stuff on mugglenet about Arithamacy and I'm sad to say I only understood about half. Which is very very pathetic. Anyway, I loved this. It just such a happy little poem.
Author's Response: Oh, Elle. You were always so wonderful at reading and reviewing! Thank you!
Hermione/Ron seems to be taking over the fanfic community.
Author's Response: It could've been Hermione/Malfoy...if Malfoy's eyes were blue. And, yes, it does have quite a base, doesn't it? thank you for your review.
*chuckles* yeah for not liking romance... I haven't read your other fics but this is plain cute--not mushy or gushing or profoundly lovey-dovey. Ah, made me smile, that's nice =)
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I'm glad you liked my little poem.
I LOVE THIS! It's sooooo good!!!!!!
Author's Response: I'm sooooo glad you liked it! It's one of my personal favorites, as well. Thanks for giving me a review, I appreciate your comment. *D*
I really liked this. I think I'll have to get my arithmancy chart out to find out who 'boy' is. Hmm... Well I loved this story! Faboulouse Job! ~HermyRox12~
Author's Response: It could potentially be one of two "boys." But actually when I wrote the poem I didn't realize that one of them really didn't have blue eyes. So that put a damper on my experiment. Thanks so much for your review, it brightens my day! *D*
That was really good. I think you used some really good words. I really don't know much about Arithmancy either. Nice try.
Author's Response: Thank you. :) This review has amused me to no end for a few years now. I'm glad you think it was a nice try.
Nice concept. Of course Hermione would go to numbers for her solutions. She is like the super-intelligent witch that would shun her horoscope in favour of numerical answers without realising that the two were more connected than she could ever realise. It reads very well. I really enjoyed the image of it spreading gloriously. If it's telling her what she really wants to hear then of course it would spread gloriously...and all those numbers adding up... that would be glorious for Hermione. But do numbers really never lie? I like the fact that this comes right at the end. Mathematicians put such faith in numbers. It seems to contradict everything we know about love and the human heart. Can a heart really be reduced to numbers? That says a lot about how Hermione would view romance. If it can't be quantified then it's not worth the effort or the risk?
Author's Response: Um, well, I don't know if that's exactly what I was heading for . . . but I do imagine that something like this has happened in Hermione's teenage life. It's just a more sophisticated way of, as you said, viewing horoscopes. Also I couldn't help but be happy when I found that "Boy" and "Hermione" had the same heart number, the concept for this poem came from that.
This was very nice. I noticed there were a few lines that while the syllables were in rhythm, if said aloud, they sounded odd. For example: "There could not be a better sight to my work-wearied eyes." Not to rewrite your poem or anything, but one variation to make it flow better might be "No better sight could be before my worked and weary eyes." Besides a few lines like this, your poem was excellent, and the imagery was excellent.
Author's Response: Hey, that might work! I've been too lazy to try and figure something out to fix those lines.
Hey! Thank you so much for taking the time to review my story! I'm glad you liked it, so I thought I'd take the time to review yours. I thought it was pretty good. Hermione seems like the kind of person who would try to figure out her feelings by using facts... it was cute! Much Love, Michelle
Author's Response: Thank you for your review.
I like it. I agree with the nutty imp; I can see Hermione doing something school-related to find out something such as that. Short but sweet, and really gives you a warm feeling. I notice no real error; and, of course, that made reading it even better. Nice job!
Author's Response: Thanks, Pat. :) Now that it's been almost 3 years, I'm finally responding.
This poem captures Hermione so well. I can totally imagine her using a number chart to figure out her feelings for a certain someone ^_^ I like how your were able to use simple words but send a clear message on Hermione's thoughts and emotions. I can imagine her poring over the charts and shrieking for joy over her results. ^_^
Author's Response: Thank you Miel! I loved getting your feedback and I'm glad that you thought my characterization of Hermione was good.
I liked it...I have a question, though. Who exactly was the boy?
Author's Response: That's why I put the url for the arithmancy page, so you can figure it out yourself. I'll give you a hint--it's just his first name that you figure out the heart number for (his whole first name).
This poem is very creative and well done, as well as properly structured. Also I enjoyed the fact that Hermione had been denying something but in the refrences as somethign so technical as numbers she believed the fact she was in love.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I appreciate your feedback on my poem.
The rhyme and the meter were both pretty good in this poem. But, what really impressed Vader was the way you captured the essence of Hermione. It was brilliant from that standpoint. Especially since she loves Arithmancy so much, the last line, numbers never lie was particularly effective. It is also easy to see the shriek of joy escaping her as the number chart reveals her desires to be true. Vader liked that part.
He doesn’t know that he has any constructive criticism to offer here. Maybe, just maybe, he felt that a line or two fell slightly out of rhythm. Like, there was a line that had close to the same number of syllables in it, but length of the syllables in the line where mostly shorter. Maybe that’s just how he read it. Either way, it is slight enough that he didn’t feel like it drastically interrupted the poem’s flow. Furthermore, Vader doesn’t know how he would change it without a lot of rework…which he doesn’t think this poem needs. In short, this is very nicely done and he wouldn’t change a thing!
Author's Response: Yes, thank you, I worked for a long time to try and get the scanning right, and I finally gave up in the end. As you said, it was good enough as it was. The perfectionist in me screamed bloody murder, but so it is. Thank you very much for the review!