Reviewer: Lesa
Date: 08/20/05 16:52
Chapter: Discovery

Heh, good start, MM. You put a whole different spin on Lily's relationship with Petunia and her whole personality then the normal fic. In yours she's firey and bright, while most others have her haughty, cold and a total rule-follower. I liked how you did the relationship with Petty...(the nickname works!), that they were actually friends once apon a time. I'm guessing that all changes with the Hogwarts letter, no? You're right in saying not much happened in the first chapter, but then, how often does that much happen in a first book chapter, really? Not most of the time. Keep going, girl, it's looking good! (1 Knut, if applicable yet...^_^')

Author's Response: It's applicable :) Go post with a link to this review page. I'm glad you like the nickname and yes, their relationship does change when the letter arrives (hint: Chapter 3). -MM

Reviewer: Sparky Nut
Date: 08/18/05 20:54
Chapter: Discovery

so good! keep it up! the only thing though, i think you went a bit overboard on the lily thing. I know you said that Lily was obsessed, but it seems a little excessive. but other than that, totally cool!

Author's Response: Haha I've gotten different responses for that. Some people liked it and some didn't :) I suppose it might be a tad excessive ^^ Thanks for the review -MM

Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 08/15/05 13:33
Chapter: Discovery

I liked that you have Lily being so impatient, and the way she and Petunia were good friends at first, but the scenes between the girls and mom just seemed a little bit too sweet at times. That level of sweetness and adoring eachother just seemed a little bit false. Other than that it was an awesome start! Very orginal which I liked and I liked that you took your time building Lily's personality. Good work!

Author's Response: A bit false? I'll work on that a bit then :) Thanks for your critiques. Glad you liked it -MM

Reviewer: magic sparkler
Date: 08/14/05 16:17
Chapter: Discovery

this is really orginial. its different from thew hole meeting in diagon alley/train/orplatform.

Author's Response: I'm glad you think it's original. That's what I hoped for ^^ Thanks -MM

Reviewer: 3ve_LaLoca
Date: 08/14/05 15:49
Chapter: Discovery

i really liked ur introduction. u didnt rush through the scenes and kept everything original. keep up the good writing cuz im gonna keep readin it!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the introduction :) Thanks for your review and I hope you like what you read later on too -MM

Reviewer: Little_hoole3333
Date: 08/14/05 14:10
Chapter: Discovery

Great start! I like how you described Lily's room. She really lives up to her name doesn't she?

Author's Response: lol she sure does :) If I had a name after a flower, or anything like that, i'd love to have a room like that too :) -MM

Reviewer: ambernbray
Date: 08/13/05 18:29
Chapter: Discovery

I hope you keep developing your story in this way. I don't like it much when people like jump into the story without any background, I really like the pace is what I guess i'm saying. It's very good. It made me giggle some when she hit James. hehe.

Author's Response: I'm glad you like the way I set up the background. For me, writing the background is a bit boring so I might tend to overlook some little things. Hehe I liked that part too. Hope you like the rest of the story -MM

Reviewer: Gemmika
Date: 08/12/05 16:14
Chapter: Discovery

This is marvelous, at first I couldn't figure out when it was supposed to have taken place. Finally it became clear, and it was great. I love the way you describe James and sirius, it's a totally different way that I see them. that's what is good about fan-fics though!

Author's Response: Thanks :) I was afraid it may be a bit confusing to readers. I agree with you there! -MM

Reviewer: missblack
Date: 08/12/05 9:52
Chapter: Discovery

haha i find it rather amusing. I liked it very much actually. I'll be keeping up with this one. Good job:)

Author's Response: Thanks :) Hope you like the rest of the story then -MM

Reviewer: FredtheBetaFish
Date: 08/10/05 19:41
Chapter: Discovery

I loved the first chapter! It was so cute! I have to agree with HarryPotterismyLife it does sound very original! I'm not sure that Sirius' eyes are silver, but overall this story sounds fantastic and I KNOW the future chapters are going to be excellent! Looking foward to reading more...

Author's Response: Wow thanks :) I hope you guys will be satisfied with my later chapters. -MM

Reviewer: harry potter is my life
Date: 08/10/05 18:02
Chapter: Discovery

This is a great start to an original sounding story. I'm guessing that they are all eleven in the summer before they go to Hogwarts. It was nice and descriptive, and I like that you had Petunia so nice to Lily, because she only stopped liking her after Lily got her letter. One thing though (and it's minor), James has hazel eyes, and Sirius has silver. It's a good start, and I can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Thanks :) Hope you like the next chapters! Thanks for the wonderful beta-ing! I'm pretty sure Sirius's eyes are dark though... I read it on -MM

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