Reviewer: mcclure_512
Date: 10/21/05 23:11
Chapter: A Wondering Father

First of all, sorry for such a late review. The truth is I read it a long time ago and then I logged in to review it and BAM!computer totally froze. Anyways great poem, loved the use of repitition, it gave it that sort of anxious feeling that I'm sure an expectant father would have. Overall, great poem 9.5/10, but I'll just round up.

Reviewer: Cinderella Angelina
Date: 08/17/05 12:40
Chapter: A Wondering Father

I really enjoyed it as a poem. I thought you captured the anxieties of an expectant father really well, although I'm not sure what the first couple lines have to do with being expectant. I do like the internal rhyme guilt/built, it really got me into the rhythm of the poem at once. Troublemaker is one word . . . let's see, what else did I notice? Just a couple little things like that, it was overall very very good!

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