Oooo I have a million little vampire bites going up my spine at the moment, after finishing this chapter! Brilliance - in one word!
Keep up the writingliness, and, with many praises and talentless back-flips to your expertise, well done!
Seventh
very creative, i think you should become a famous writer!!!!!!!!!!!!
wow i check in every day to see if its updated i absolutely loved it so please update
I liked your cliffhanger beggining but somehow, I can't imagine Snape's mother as being abusive. It always seemed to me that his father was the real mean one, especially considering the scene in the Pensieve in Order of the Pheonix. However, if you really focus in on that theme the idea has the potential to be a really dramatic story. I also think you should have a little more emotion about the girl being adopted and her feelings about that. However, it was very well written and a great story/
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I appreciate any criticism I can get, even if it is negative! I'm glad you liked the chapter, because I'm working on the next one now. I'm having some problems, so it will be out as soon as I fix up the plot and work around some other details.
very good chapter. update soon!
Author's Response: thanks! i really love writing this!
Good chapter! The way you introduced the characters was very good. Update soon!
Author's Response: second chapter was submitted 2 days ago, so it should be out soon!!
Author's Response: I'm really sorry, but I need to rewite my chapter, so I might be a bit slow on the updates!
This is going to be a journal fic, yes? It's fairly balanced as far as description, tangible and intangible. The thing that confused me a bit was the date. You open with a excerpt from her journal from 1971 in which she is hopeful and excited at her invitation to attend Hogwarts and you follow that immediately with a section two years later in 1973 where she has just recieved her invitation to attend Hogwarts. It's either a typo, or I'm reading this the wrong way.
Author's Response: it is a typo, i'm afraid.. i was really tired when i wrote the dates on the journal entries, LOL!! but, it will not be completely filled with excerpts from diaries because it would get very boring after a while. i just started it like that to introduce the characters strangely. i hope you enjoy the second chapter!! it should be posted soon, i hope.
