I like the burried tension and conflict. Damage like these four have been through takes a long time to fix, if it can be at all. You seem to be taking that time. Keep it up.
Can't say that this chapter is my favorite. But it was definitely necessary. This story is very "Harryish" with the heroic exit. The only part I didn't like (which is by all means - only one persons opinion!) is how Harry asks - or better yet, tells - Ginny to watch over Hermione. I am sorry, but I don't care how much of a wonderful person Ginny is, or how brazen Harry is, I can't see Ginny accept the way he practically insists upon this. "Okay honey, love of my life, I am about to abandon you, but I need you to promise me that you will look over my ex-lover, and your neice or possible future step-daughter..." I agree that she would do it anyway, but I think that could have gone without saying. Don't worry about making any of them look like a bad guy, focus a little bit more on realism, not a fluffy, lovey-dovey realtionship. I just read my review, and please don't think I am being harsh, I just love the concept of this story, and it's potential is limitless. You are doing a great job! Not to be negative, I just wanted to let you know my thoughts, because I am a huge fan of this story. Just realize that the characters don't always have to be loving and understanding. They may be magical, but they are still human.
Good chapter - I would still like to see a little more anger. I would even expect Harry to be defensive, and Ginny more catty with Hermione. You know how girls are - she might tell Harry everything is okay, but I wouldn't expect her to be best friends with Hermione so quickly. Girls, wizards or not, don't generally act that politely... :-) Keep it coming though.
Author's Response: In my mind, Ginny is still hiding her true feelings from Hermione because of the baby. She wants it to be safe. All I have to say was that I planned a lot more for this chapter, but I couldn't fit it all in, so it'll be in the next. I hope that helps!
Nice Chapter. I hate seeing Ginny in so much pain, but sometimes that is life.
Liked it. Now it probably sounds like I don't like it, but that's wrong; I just liked it. Nothing more to say.
I actually got tears in my eyes when I read this chapter. The first time was when Harry was so angry and scared Ginny; it felt as though I was her. The second time was when Ginny finally got to know about Harry/Hermione.
Author's Response: Wow! I am always impressed when I get that sort of response. All I have to say is that I put my own feelings into the situation and that's why it's so real.
Great chapter!! Can't wait to see what happens next!! Keep it up, 10!!
This is one of the best Fanfics. It's going on my favorites!!! When do you think you'll update????? 10/10
Author's Response: You have extremely great timing! I am about to go submit the next chapter now. My beta got back to me very quickly! For future reference, check for any and all updates on my writer's blog. The link is on my author's page.
i was so happy to c this new chapter, u have no idea! oh but it disappointed me. i expected it to b more exciting, but i understand that its got to build up because im writing some fan fiction, so i understand and i give this chapter a 9! :)
I was also pleasantly surprised to find the new chapter! And I LOVE IT! Now that's the Ginny I've come to admire and respect! As far as Hermione's OOCness - I like it! Harry? I'm not sure about Harry - he seems too aloof to me, I see him as more of a worrier. (But that's my perception, everyone sees them a little differently.) But I'm still loving this story. Great job!!!! Please update soon!
Author's Response: I only ever see Harry worrying to himself, as in, in his head. There is so much going on he hasn't had time to show his worry yet. I hope that makes sense later and I hope that helps you see inside my mind a little more.
As you obviously know, *pff, duh*, Hermione is way out of character in this, and to me, Harry and Ginny kinda fill the roll as the sensible one. i still love the story tho, so PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!
Well, I think that getting into such a situation is way out of character for Hermione, but now that she's in this mess, you seem to be steering the tale quite nicely. This looks like a fun one and will be completely different from anything else out there. I'm keeping my eye on the updates.
Author's Response: Thank you! That's exactly what I was going for, something completely different. I'm glad you are enjoying the story!
woohoo, first comment! i literally jumped in my seat when i saw that this chapter had been added; i've been checking it every few hours. it displayed emotions pretty well, but with not as much action as the previous chapter. keep writing!
Again, I am a huge fan of this tale, but to your note - I can see Ginny sucking it up for Harry's sake, but Ron is a lot more pig headed. I guess I will have to just wait like everyone else to see more... :-)
Best chapter so far! I (Like UltimateAuror) Thought Ron and Ginny were too forgiving too soon, so I'll just have to wait and see where you take this story... Update soon! Dawn (Griffindorstudent)
This was my favorite chapter yet!!!! Ron and Hermione are still together and so are Harry and Ginny!!!
it was soooooo gud just as i had expected it to be nice presentation n u described rons reaction very well nice job i am waitin fr the next chapter do keep up the gud work. this chapter deserves a 10
it's my favorite chapter so far. nothing else to say. EXCEPT IT WAS FLIPPIN AWESOME!!! =) also, i was wondering if you submitted it before the submissions were closed, because this chapter was added while it was closed. please answer soon n submit more chapter asap!!!
Author's Response: It's my favorite chapter so far too...hehe...and Yes I did submit this chapter about a week before the shut down. The next chapter is ready, still being Beta'd, so when submissions open back up, I'll get it back from my beta and submit. Thanks for being such a dedicated fan!!
I am head over heels for this story. Sadly, I check the site daily to see when the next chapter is out. Things are very OoC, but that is what makes it fun. My only criticism, is that I was a tiny bit dissapointed at the ractions of Ron and Ginny. While I don't doubt that they would eventually forgive their better halves, I can't fathom them doing it so quickly. Ron being so moody and jealous already, and Ginny being so stong and independant. I promise, that is the only thing. But please, keep writing, and update soon! I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Do you really think they completely forgave them? *evil smirk* Or do you think they are just trying to make things easier for their already hurting significant others? *evil laugh* Just wait and see!
ok that was REALLY GOOD AND EVERYTHING but i agree with magicalmaddie331 i'm a ron/hermione person!
Author's Response: Keep reading, it gets better, I promise! I still won't say who the baby's daddy is though. *evil smirk* Hehe, everyone will just have to wait and see.