oh my gosh this story is sad and happy at the same toime. im in tears i absolutly love it. make a secual or somthing you have to.
Oh my gosh! That was amazing! It was so touching! I'm almost in tears over here! And I loved your imagery! It was so descriptive! Simply beautiful one shot! Thank you so much for writing this fic! I loved it!
*SOBS* This was sooo moving! I absolutely loved it!*SOBS* I don't cry that often, but this moved me to tears. It was a happy/sad mix. Happy that Harry sould remember it and he heard his mom and sad that he couldn't really remember it. It has taken me 5 minutes to write this because I am still moved. I love your writing. you are very talented. Keep writing and keep your stories "feelable". Is that a word? Oh, well. I loved it! Definitely going im my favorites and I am reccommending it to everybody I know! Lovely! *SOBS* I have never been so moved. Thank you for writing such a beautiful story
OMG COULD THIS FF BE BETTER! I LOVE IT IT IS REALLY INTRESTING, IT IS DIFFERENT THAN ANY FF I HAVE EVER READ!!! WRITE MORE FF'S
This was quite a poignant look at what Harry might have experienced after being placed in the Dursley's home. I don't think I've seen any stories about after Harry was dropped off. Your choice to do this makes his previous situation all the more sad. The fact that Sirius has died also adds emotion to it, even though Sirius is unknown to Harry in this tale. I thought this was really well written. You used good description and your dialogue was great. I thought you captured Vernon Dursley well. I did get confused sometimes about when things were happening though.
...Dudley, where the term “baby fat” was greatly exaggerated. This, to me, is saying that he didn't have any fat whatsoever. Perhaps "understatement" might have been a better word?The bassinette, it should be known, was already much too small for the new baby. Harry was 15 mos old when his parents died. He would have been much too big to be in a bassinet, being able to climb out. Perhaps you meant crib?
As time passed, the smile on little Harry’s face began to fade. He’d whimper more than he used to and cry for his “Mum” and “Dada.” Aw... Does Harry think they're his parents? *shudders* It's so sad to think about his happiness fading. It just shouldn't happen. Also, how much time had passed by at this point? Also, Cheerios weren't around at this time.I thought that it was sad how Harry's life is with the Dursleys. Of course, it's always been sad, but for him to go from such a happy environment to one such as the Dursleys is especially tragic. Your song choice was a nice one as well and I liked how it resounded even as Harry is older.
Author's Response: Ah-ha! A challenge! Alright, I did some research in response to this review (that's a lot of Rs) and I found that Cheerios was in fact around by then. They were invented on June 19 1941. Seeing as this is around 1981, they'd been around for 40 years already. As for the Dudley comment, then yes, I see what you mean. I simply meant that the term extends beyond what was originally meant, but perhaps I should make it a bit clearer. I shall fix that eventually... It's an old story, so there will be mistakes. And the bassinet is logical because this is the Dursleys we're talking about. Dudley has the crib, Harry has the hand-me-down, thus he has the bassinet, so of couse he'd be too big for it. And Harry was a good baby, he would be tired from Dudley and then his acquired attitude would make it so he wouldn't really do much of anything to get out until he reached nearly 2. By then he'd be sleeping on a mattress or something on the floor, more than likely. But thanks for this review! I loved it! And thanks for the challenge! ;)
it's a sad story, i almost cried. poor harry. but great story
Brill, darling, brill! This is awesome writing! Poor baby Harry, I just want to pick him up and cuddle him! And Lily ... poor Lily ... sniff sniff ... okay, I'm gonna cry now ... wonderful story!
This was a great story! As everyone else has said in their reviews, your writing skills are great and the story is very moving. I also think it's cool that the lullaby you chose to use in the story is one that I grew up with. Very good and keep it up!
Author's Response: I thought I would touch a lot of people with that choice of a song. That and the lyrics fit perfectly, but that's besides the point. ;) I'm really happy you commented on it because now I know that other people think the same thing if just one person steps up, and that I accomplished everything I set out to do. So thank you very very much for commenting.
wow. That was really really good. Please write more. I'll definetly read anything that you write!
im cryin ma heart out such a brill story!!!!!
Oh this is a wonderful story! I'm crying now as I type to give you my praise! I've read stories like this before and it's very rare to find them now. I'm glad I have found this story and I do hope you keep writing.
OH MY GOODNESS!!!!! This story is absolutely amazing! It was so sweet! You are an awesome writer so PLEASE keep writing!
THIS STORY RULES!!!!!
I'm on the verge of cring, your a great writer!
Thanks a lot for responding. But i still think you can do a 'rowling'.
thank you for responding! if it's a phantom or an angel, it was wonderful. well done, though i think you don't even need a sequel. just write a new fic; your old readers will return. :)
One of the things I love about the Harry Potter books is that every once in a while, I come across a scene that is so moving, with such strong emotions running through it, that I cry, or laugh, or respond to whatever emotion it is that is being conveyed. There are very, very few writers who can make me feel emotion about characters in a story. I'm too detached from the things I read to really feel the emotions that the characters have. You, however, are one of those select few who can place me in the spot of a character unintentionally, and show me their emotions. Please, whatever you do, continue writing.
Author's Response: It's reviews like that, as well as many others I've received, I love. They are such self-esteem boosters, especially this one. This is why I live for writing, to pull out emotions from readers. If I can make people genuinely cry, laugh, or yell out in anger, then I know I've done my job and done it well. Thank you so much for your comment(s).
excellent job; i love the conversation between petunia and vernon. i have one qualm: if lily was a ghost, she wouldn't have moved on. once you become a ghost, you are stuck that way. unless lily was something else? besides that, lovely... i enjoyed reading it.
Author's Response: Ah, you noticed that, huh? Good eye. I knew about the ghost thing. Therefore, I made her into a phantom. I just hope my general knowledge on phantoms, which isn't much, matches actual information and fits with what I did. If it doesn't, then she was an angel. That in itself can create some rather interesting sequals, which I'm still contemplating on. The story was a one-shot for a reason. But, again, good eye!