Reviews For A Mother's Lullaby
Reviewer: ThatHPFan
Date: 04/29/12 22:37
Chapter: One

Awwwwwwwwwww..... *sniffle*
That was so sad and sooo cute. I feel so bad for Harry, but it's nice to know that he got comfort from somewhere.

Reviewer: Adeyla
Date: 11/16/08 0:40
Chapter: One

this is so sad, i hate the thought of any baby being left like that! lily's eyes being colored is such a good idea!

Reviewer: Bookwormy
Date: 09/27/07 14:14
Chapter: One

omg. that was so sweet. when lily appeared i was so touched that i had goosebumps all over my body. touching fic, very sweet. i loved the last line.

Reviewer: Bonnie11
Date: 08/31/07 9:10
Chapter: One

I love this story so much, its probably my favourite story on the whole site, i love all your stories but this is my favourite, you are such a talented writer, you should never stop writing...ever!

Reviewer: cAughtonFire
Date: 05/28/07 0:05
Chapter: One

To any on-looker, he was an angel. However, to the Dursleys, he remained a daily grievance.

I thought that that was a really good line. It kind of described Harry life in the wizarding world compared to the Muggle world. In the Muggle world, he was teased and hated while in the wizarding world he was loved and famous.

Harry, being the smart baby he was, noticed this and began yearning for attention, even going as far as attempting to play with some of Dudley’s toys he never seemed to touch anymore. That would result in Dudley crying, Petunia yanking the toy away from Harry, a good spanking following, and Harry would cry and whimper off in his own little corner with his broken hand-me-down toys and spiders as company.

Long excerpt :) I really liked this part because it made Harry as a baby really realistic. He’s always been neglected, and I always wondered how he handled it. I thought that him being a baby and everything that he would have a reaction like that. It was really good that you added that in there to show how hard it must have been for him as a child. Also, it broke my heart when he tried to play with Dudley’s toys, but they wouldn’t let him. That just made me very sad…

As time passed, the smile on little Harry’s face began to fade

That was a really sad, but good, line. It was subtle, but it made the point clearly and dramatically. It was just a really good memorable transition.

In addition to all of that, I really liked how you made Harry’s character. The way you wrote him as a baby really represented him as a child/teenager. When he was 11-14, he bottles everything up and managed to keep smiling, no matter what happened. Then once he turned 15, he finally burst. He was yelling and was really frustrated. He finally let it all out, which was similar to when Harry couldn’t stop crying. It was really great how those two were kind of similar.

Also, I really liked that ending. It was nice how you showed that he remembered it as a teenager. I also really liked how Harry was talking about how he heard it in the wind sometimes. It was just a nice reminder that people never truly leave us forever. It was just really….nice. Overall, I really liked the story. It never got boring, and it was very realistic. I think that it was a really great. 10/10


Author's Response: Wow... now that's commentary... It's amazing to think that you'd write all of that for such an old story... Anyway, thanks for the review and all the kind words. At first glance, I thought it was all the sentences I made mistakes in. Guess not! I'm glad you liked it so much. And nice rating ;)

Reviewer: cAughtonFire
Date: 05/28/07 0:03
Chapter: One

Life at number four, Privet Drive, was nearly perfect. It was quiet, peaceful, a place where not a blade of grass or leaf on a tree was out of place, and a place that housed a loving family of three.

I really liked this first line. I think that it was a good introduction, and it was a great way to show how ordinary and orderly the Dursleys’s lives were before Harry came. I especially liked that “…not a blade of grass of leaf on a tree was out of place” I thought that that was a really good way to say “everything was orderly and perfect”

The bassinette, it should be known, was already much too small for the new baby

I don’t know why, but I really liked this line. It symbolized that Harry was growing up and that since his parents died he grew too fast and now he had to be on his own.

Reviewer: LadyElyssa
Date: 04/21/07 0:40
Chapter: One

Awww that was so sad, you made me cry! But, it was very good.

Reviewer: Castaway
Date: 02/03/07 14:30
Chapter: One

That was very sweet. I like the ending.

Reviewer: harryweazly
Date: 10/09/06 6:11
Chapter: One

great cool wiked just amazing

Reviewer: ginny_x3s_harry
Date: 09/16/06 22:52
Chapter: One

cant write...crying

Reviewer: A_Pink_lady
Date: 09/10/06 11:05
Chapter: One

ahh thats sweet. damm those evil dursleys!

Reviewer: durr_durr_durr
Date: 07/28/06 15:45
Chapter: One

Aww it's so cute... :)

Reviewer: anutz_jsph
Date: 07/21/06 12:52
Chapter: One

i loved it. very touching

Reviewer: pinkgirl526
Date: 07/04/06 1:29
Chapter: One

oh... i love it! Harry seems so cute and is His mum a ghost? But its sweet and even PETUNIA almost gives in to Harry. I love it! this story made me cry and i don't know how they could be so mean to harry i mean he was just a baby! An angel baby that was happy and always laughing. Awwwww! See your making me wanting to go into this fictional world and give the Dursleys a piece of my mind! I loved the lullaby and that Harry was humming it and remembering it. But I feel sorry for Harry facing that at such a young age. Keep writing!


Reviewer: pinkgirl526
Date: 07/04/06 1:19
Chapter: One

oh... i love it! Harry seems so cute and is His mum a ghost? But its sweet and even PETUNIA almost gives in to Harry. I love it!


Reviewer: Coweena
Date: 06/20/06 21:35
Chapter: One

I loved it so much. I was practically crying when I read it.

Reviewer: Coweena
Date: 06/20/06 21:34
Chapter: One

I loved it so much. I was practically crying when I read it.

Reviewer: Celebwen
Date: 05/05/06 18:34
Chapter: One

Wonderful! I was touched.

Reviewer: Riotgrl_Billie
Date: 04/24/06 19:17
Chapter: One

Possitively one of the sweetest fics I have ever read. I suppose many people will enjoy this. And that song is so beautiful.

Reviewer: heartsdesire456
Date: 04/18/06 21:53
Chapter: One

whoa... that all i can say. it makes me cry sooo much! iv recently got where it doesnt take too horribly much to make me cry, but im not like my mama, she does the whole happy tears thing... creepy... but i only cry when someone dies and its horribly sad circumstances ( like in that movie armageddon, gah!) but that was certainly sad... it would be horrble to have to watch your child crying andnot be able to hold them, or touch them at all. i dont have children ( duh!) but that would be horrible.

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