Reviews For The Severed Souls
Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 05/17/06 22:56
Chapter: The Heir of Gryffindor

I have wondered for a while if Severus could somehow be Griffindore's heir. I had a feeling he was. I hope that he can somehow help Albert. Albert deserves better then to die a horrible and lonely death. At least he has found he has an heir. That is pretty cool. I'm glad that Remus has somehow come to the conclusion that Harry is still alive. I hope that everyone else sees it sometime soon too. I'm also glad that Harry and Severus have come to some understanding. I don't think they will ever like each other, or ever truly get along, but they should be able to work with each other. I look forward to the next chapter!!!

Reviewer: anAnachronism
Date: 05/17/06 19:32
Chapter: The Heir of Gryffindor

I was right! I'm doing my own little dance of happiness at this masterful revelation. Of course, it was al due to you and your cleverly placed clues that I came to that conclusion. This is a fascinating and unexpected plot twist. I wonder if Voldemort knows? If that's why he keeps Severus around? I can't wait to see what happens next. Please tell me you are working on the next chapter!

Reviewer: Elaine Lahey
Date: 05/17/06 14:03
Chapter: The Heir of Gryffindor

So Snape is the heir of Gryffindor! Will wonders never cease. I love the twists and turns you put in this story. I live for updates. Well done.

Reviewer: deramo29
Date: 05/17/06 9:52
Chapter: Unearthing the Truth

your stories are fantastic!!!! sometimes I forget that this is fanfiction. I wish it was a real book because I would highly recomend it to anyone. Keep up the great work.

Reviewer: Satyafakeer
Date: 05/14/06 5:04
Chapter: Unearthing the Truth

Speed up. it is unbearable.

Reviewer: NoxSomnium
Date: 05/13/06 18:36
Chapter: Portraits.


Reviewer: NoxSomnium
Date: 05/10/06 14:11
Chapter: The Darkest Night

For some reason, I found it difficult to read this chapter up until apporximately when they get to the Dusty House. It really seemed to drag up until then. I'm not sure why. It's not that it's long, I like long chapters. Roderick seems a bit different in this one versus DoL. Not to mention I was about to alternately strangle him and bash my head against the wall when he kidnapped Maeve. IDIOTS! Not you dear, your character :D.

Reviewer: surrypotter
Date: 05/07/06 17:39
Chapter: Unearthing the Truth

Ohhh excellent plot twist, I cannot wait to see what comes of this. I just love your writing style, and your stories. Keep up the excellent work!!!

Reviewer: anAnachronism
Date: 05/06/06 16:13
Chapter: Unearthing the Truth


Okay, so maybe I'm way off, but that what I'm thinking right now. I mean with the ruby in the sword and....oh.

Very exciting chapter (as you can see, I liked it a lot). Keep up the marvelous writing!

Reviewer: miss padfoot
Date: 05/06/06 1:35
Chapter: Unearthing the Truth

Oh, wow! I just can't wait to see how the Snape-Harry encounter goes. Poor Maeve, amazing she puts up with everyone shouting at her, seeing as it's not really in her nature... but given the circumstances, it's quite understandable.

And poor Albert Gryps, I really feel bad for him. He's never kept well, and the news about Severus' parentage is quite interesting. Hope Maeve and Severus get to him before the poor guy dies.

And what is Severus going to do about producing Harry's body? Ah, well... he's at least got some time before Voldemort returns. Maybe he could slip Harry the Draught of Living Death or summat... but I just can't see Harry agreeing to that. Anyway, I'm rambled on enough I think, update soon, Jan!

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 05/05/06 21:19
Chapter: Unearthing the Truth

That was another great chapter. Poor Albert. I hope that he gets to meet his grandson and his wife before he gets too sick. That was a very interesting twist. I love that Maeve had an answer to that question for Severus. Poor Harry having everyone think he is dead. That must really be hard on him. I hope that he can come to believe in Severus enough to follow the plan, at least mostly. I can understand why he wants Ginny told. I still hold to the fact that people that know Maeve would know she would never let Harry die. (I'm leaning most toward Remus, Ron and Hermione though) Poor Draco. Nothing ever goes his way. I can't figure Rampton out. There seems to be two of him or something. I can understand when he helped Jenny, but him collecting Draco seems weird to me. Oh well. I don't have him totally figured out yet anyhow.

Reviewer: Breeze
Date: 05/05/06 12:47
Chapter: Unearthing the Truth

this is an excellent story and a little bit of a cliff hanger at the end of the chapter. The plot is moving along well too.

Reviewer: BloodRayne
Date: 05/05/06 11:05
Chapter: Unearthing the Truth

Oh leave it at that is torture! One little thing...I sort of feel that Roderick isn't himself...not as cheerful and ...carefree as he used to be. But maybe I'm just imagining things. Anyway, great chapter and update soon!

Reviewer: Khrys
Date: 05/05/06 10:45
Chapter: Unearthing the Truth

I am hooked on Maeve! I love these stories.

Reviewer: Fantasium
Date: 05/04/06 7:47
Chapter: Confrontation

Tee hee. Youíre probably wondering what Iím doing now, Jan. Well, I thought since I had completely messed up with my responsibilities for this worthy chapter, I might as well take my original comments and turn them into a review instead. (That, and the fact that I donít trust my e-mailÖ)

I really like how focused this chapter is. Donít get me wrong, itís always amazing to see and learn what is happening in different places of the Severed Souls-world, but since thatís what weíre normally spoiled with this becomes more special. Everything in this chapter concentrates on the same event, and all of the actions become more intense.

Intense, yes, as the potion-brewing and the caring for Harry. Serious as the situation is, this is pure enjoyment for any Severus/Maeve shipper. You have written love-making and tenderness for us before, but I almost dare say this is better. Some of my favourite fictional relationships are favourites just because of that Ė because the author has written two characters in a situation where they need to work together for something important. Through such work, it seems that a good author has got a perfect opportunity to show care, compatibility, understanding and chemistry between two characters Ė just like you have done here.

What he really meant, Maeve reflected, was that if she administered the potion, he could not be said to have saved Harry Potterís life. - I love that Maeve understands this, and I love that you show it to us.

Remus, my Remus. You donít happen to be planning some Remus/Felicia cubs, do you? Because I think he would make quite a brilliant father. His concern for Harry is so touching, so perfectly written. AlsoÖ this might be a bit far-fetched, but for some reason I get the feeling that after getting a dose of Sirius from the portrait, Remus somehow cares even more for his friendís godson. Oh, and donít ask me why because I canít explain it, but when I read this chapter I suddenly had a vision of a Harry/Remus conversation at the very end of Severed Souls, a sort of thoughtful end-of-the-adventure conversation where Harry actually thanks Remus for all that he has done. Yes, Jan, your story does all kinds of strange things to my mind. ;)

Oooh, Iím very excited about Severusí plan! Excellent turn of the plot, Jan! I donít know what I expected to follow Harryís injury, but certainly not this! I had a hunch that it might lead to a Harry/Severus confrontation, but no idea that we would take such a big step on the way towards Voldemort. I simply canít wait to see how things turn out, and Iím more anxious than ever to read the meeting between Harry and Severus. Especially with this: Wherever it was, a confrontation between Severus and Harry would be inevitable, and she knew that she needed to start preparing for that. - It really makes me wonder what role Maeve will playÖ

Bit of nitpicking:

ďBut Severus is.capable. - A mysterious dot has appeared between ďisĒ and ďcapableĒ.

The came corner that had seen Severus commit to acts that he probably would have shied away from without her involvement bringing his sense of obligation to the fore. - Iím guessing that should be ďThe same cornerĒ, not ďThe came cornerĒ?

Then I really need to ask you about something. When Maeve had seen to Harry, she tried to lift him. I wonder why? Where was he planning on taking him? She obviously didnít think about using her ability until Severus suggested it, and she canít Apparate. Those are really the reasons I can think of for her to actually try to lift him with her own strength. Is there a reason she did not Levitate him instead? Yes, I do realise that using magic puts a bit of distance between them, but Maeve is also sensible and should have realised that she couldnít lift him.

And the end sceneÖ Oh, Iím bubbling with questions, but I suppose that was your intent. What is Percy up to, really? And what is the whole business of Roderick and Nagini being at two places at the same time? It feels like that would normally involve a Time-Turner, butÖ And why would Nagini attack Neville when taking him out was Dracoís job? I hardly donít think that Voldemort would put his precious snake-Horcrux at Dracoís disposal? No, there seems to be something rotten inside the gates of Hogwarts, and Iím longing for you to clear things up a bit.

Lol, I donít suppose that Iím in a position to pester you for the next chapter? No, Iíll just try and look extra sweet and pleading instead. :)

Reviewer: anAnachronism
Date: 04/30/06 21:45
Chapter: The Darkest Night

Please update! I can't wait to read more and I feel as though I've been waiting for ages.

Author's Response: Sorry, and thanks for the review! Next chapter is almost ready to be sent to my beta and then it will be up. End of the week at the latest. :-)

Reviewer: jakgarden
Date: 04/27/06 20:18
Chapter: Confrontation

GREAT!!!!! can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: It's on its way, I promise! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: BloodRayne
Date: 04/24/06 18:53
Chapter: Confrontation

Awsome story, update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks, BloodRayne. Update on its way.

Reviewer: Elaine Lahey
Date: 04/16/06 23:48
Chapter: Confrontation

I'm so glad to see this story update! I've been checking every day for weeks now. I can't believe that Snape is really going to go to the bad now; please tell me that Maeve is mistaken. And is Percy perhaps a double agent - or - is Roderick? Please post again soon.

Author's Response: Thanks, Elaine! I have to admit, this poor story has been taking a back seat recently, but it's coming along. And I couldn;t possibly comment on Severus' intentions. ;-)

Reviewer: crazyhpgirl
Date: 04/16/06 21:33
Chapter: Questions, Questions.

FINALLY! Remus gets someone to love forever! That was totally unexpected.

Author's Response: I know. He really does need the love of a good woman!

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