This is a really good poem for something so short! I noticed only one grammerical mistake- in line five, instead of writing "Slowly drowning," you wrote "SLowly." I should tell you, though, that line was very well written. My favorite line would have to be "As the Shadows swallow me." The fact you capitilized "Shadows" really made a bold yet graceful statement. This poem showed how a short poem with well-chosen words can overpower a long poem with meaningless words! Great job!
Author's Response: When I was typing it on the computer I think I was really excited about it and didn't really pay attention to what I was capitalizing... thus the SLowly and the "Shadows" being capitalized, I fixed the "L" though and I'll keep the Shadows the same. Thanks for the review!!!!
VERY original. i always wondered what it was like to be kissed by a dementor, now i know!
Good descriptions. I really enjoyed it.
Nice idea for a poem. Great work!
cool poem I liked it I also wrote a dementor attack poem pwease read!
Actually I submitted 10/10 I'm still not sure why i wrote 9/10
That was realy short , but super good. I realy liked it and I am not sure why no one has already reviewed it. but any way here you go 9/10