..........You're asking them to kill eachother aren't you? (just kidding)
EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!!!!! Good work i loved it!
Brilliant! I hope to see more from you.
Ever heard of seperate paragraphs?
Hmm... it is sad that I will never read your story.
I suggest you separate sections of the chapter into proper paragraphs instead of leaving us readers to squeeze our eyes to read a chapter that only consists of one paragraph.
ahh my eyes! would it hurt to use paragraphs?
u might wanna seperate it into section or paragraphs
kinda hard to read so i stoped
It seems pretty good but I wish you had put it in paragraphs b/c it is hard to read like this!
Hey it was nice but i never got how did he fell in love with her. I mean no winks, no hugs, nothing. But still it was good.
Draco can move to my place anytime!
its good so far but it is a little bit hard to read. i think u should edit them and put spaces and new lines so that its not much strain on the eyes
its good so far but it is a little bit hard to read. i think u should edit them and put spaces and new lines so that its not much strain on the eyes
I loved this so much, but I cannot understand something. About 50 people have told you that your story is wonderful but it was terribly hard to read, and all 50 have politely asked you to break it up into paragraphs so they could enjoy it more, and yet, 14 chapters in, you still haven't done it. WHYYYY! I want to read this story so badly and my eyes are aching trying! Please please please break it UP!
awwww.....that was shooo cutttteeee...
that vos a very interesting story if i may say so myself.
YOU SCARED ME AT THE END!!!!!! I THOUGHT SHE HAD DIED!!!!!! DON'T YOU EVER DO THAT AGAIN!!!!!!!! ~breating returns to normal~ okay, i'm good. loved it! keep writing and i'll keep reading.
Mrs Bookworm Malfoy
