WOW absolutely spiffing!
this is very good it cought my attention I really want to keep reading
I've read this at least three times, not because it's one of my top faves, but becuase I forget everything that happens. i noticed this time, however, that nearly all of these chapters have NO spaces! It's not fun. Maybe go over this, if you're still interested in this story, and seperate the big paragraph.
heyy i just wanted to tell u that in grammer u r suposed to make a new para graph when a different person talks! the way u have it now is a bit confusing!
I LOVED IT!!!!! U HAVE EXCEPTIONAL TALENT!!!!!!!! WILL THERE BE A SEQUEL?!?!?!?!? PLEASE GIVE A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I hadn't even logged on in months when I got your note. Thanks. :) I'm toying with the idea of a one-shot (or more) follow-up with Ron as a ghost. So much for simplifying your world by killing off anyone who might prove a future inconvenience. :P I'm not sure what sort of conflict/problem I want to give Draco and Hermione. They've grown beyond the confines of JKR's world here, and I don't want to do something sugary or fluffy and undermine the original story. (Doesn't it kill you when you there's a sucky sequel?)
aww it was just lovely.very creative. well-written. just lovely.
AWWW. I wish you'd write a sequal I think you totally rock.
nice chap. luvd it
dis story ROX
nice chap. luvd it
nice story just... you can use different paragraphs. like that it's not really good to my eyes reading it.
hey.. u`re story is great... but it`s difficult to read it, when there`s harly any space between sentences..
whoah... what a story... it was absolutely great... but if i were to edit it a bit, i'd say draco should be a bit more of himself at the start... you know, the arrogant and sharp tongued type but still be the sweet one in his own ways... yeah that.. but though it was totally wonderful...
This was one of the best stories ever written! I loved it!
Oh and there is research to suggest fish don't in fact have a 3 second memory span.
I'm sorry but is that really all one massive paragraph or is that just my computer. If the latter I apologise. The writing could be amazing but reading that's just like walking through a swimming pool full of treacle. Finding your place once you've lost it is like finding a word in one gigantic wordsearch. Just looking at the size of that paragraph gives me vertigo!
awwwww how sweet, i did like tha, very good
i absoulutly loved your sory:D i read the whole thing in one sitting....hehe i think i hv too much time on my hands but anyways *claps and throws flowers* good job
SCREW THE "SNOOTY NEWBIE MOD" IT'S YOUR STORY--TELL IT YOUR WAY.
Yes, it is a bit slow, but I understand that you have to set the scene first