Hurrah for the Tens! I was wondering what your sixteen fics were so I just had to drop in and find out and I was most wonderfully rewarded. This was a lovely little peice and Rufus is really growing on me.
I'm not usually a fan of first person, but then that's probably because I can't write it and I haven't seen it so well written. His descriptions are really well done and his personality comes through really nicely.
I also loved the way Neville ended up with a nice big role in this fic. *is a Neville fan*...
Oh, yes, and the opening paragraph was amazing. It really drew me into the fic and piqued my curiosity about Rufus' personality.
Anyways thanks for a great read!
It's always interesting to see how people interpret challenges. I liked how you took this one and ran with it. The very first sentence set the pace for the story, it moves along quickly and before you know it you've read the entire thing. Rufus recognizes that Ron is brave and knowing he is not. I couldn't help feel a little annoyed at Rufus as Ron was writhing on the floor and he did nothing to save him. And then "If you carry on like that you'll kill him." That's almost humourous! Then a little more than we expected from Rufus...he tries to deceive the Death Eaters knowing if he faces them again, he's a goner. So he is a little brave and compassionate after all. Quite surprised his Slytherin self. Poor Snape! Quite dramatic!
Well, the name 'Rufus' is what attracted my attention, and I am ever so glad that I was correct in guessing Rufus Wainwright. I've seen him in concert also, and it was him in Slyhterin robes I pictured while reading your story. Delightful! Very well done OC story!
You have such a knack for creating brilliant OC's. I can quite see why you have fallen for Rufus - I loved his lazy self-deprecating humour and witty asides. Also enjoyed the narrative style, I could imagine that I was sitting in a bar with him whilst he recounted the tale - you set up a very intimate atmosphere. I would love to see more of him. Poor old Snape, eh?
you took up the challenge nicely, i thought, although it seemed a bit devoid of detail...good use of words though, but you could have made an epic out of it...i like long stories, but this was a good one none the less...good job.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, ellimayer. This was only ever meant to be a little character piece, hence the lack of detail. If you want epic proportions and lots of detail you should check out my novel length fic Daughter of Light. :-) It took me a week or so to 'get' this character but now I have I quite like him. I think we will definately be seeing him again. Thanks again for the review!