that is soo sad I thought he would come back!!!
That was beautifly writen!
it was wonderful and sad....
i love the begining and end bit about tears.
WAAHHHAHAHAA...WAHHHAHAHAHA!!! *sob,sob* *sniff,sniff* so, saad! good, romantic, but so saddd!! im practically crying!!!!
WAAHHHAHAHAA...WAHHHAHAHAHA!!! *sob,sob* *sniff,sniff* so, saad! good, romantic, but so saddd!! im practically crying!!!!
Hmm... I admit that the story was very emotional. It can grip you depending on your perspective of the story.
However, I felt that it was somewhat repetitive in the middle. During that period of repetition of Hermione begging Draco not to leave her and Draco not fully explaining why he had to leave, I felt that you made Hermione's character... out of character. See, Hermione's a very rational person. She would not just crumble after hearing that her love has to leave her. She would've asked for reasons and justifications before going into hysteria. Then, I think you missed the concept of long distance relationship. I thought that long distance relationship would work better in the wizarding world because of apparition and floo network.
Apart from that, I thought that you made Draco well in character. Plus, the short ending really emphasized the state of confusion that Hermione was in. The last sentence also added nicely to the ending.
Overall, it was a good story with great effects on readers in general.
Ciao ciao
That was GREAT!!
I LOVED IT!
~*Mona*~
Well actually..light travels faster then sound.
So their is a "clear"explanation for thunder coming after lightning.
-cough-
Nice story though.
What I wanna know..is how they fell in love when they never actually talked or anything unless it was insulting each other.....
There must be something I missed in the books.o_o
This story is so good I cried a lot, and when draco left i felt like me heart broke two, u are a wonderful writer keep up the good work.
This story is so good I cried a lot. and when drace left i felt like me heart broke two. u are a wonderful writer keep up the good work.
I liked it, apart from the fact that you said there was no explaination for why thunder followed lightening. There is a reason for that.
Apart from that I did like it, even if it was a little bit dramatic for my usual liking. :)
I cried. I'll admit it you. This was extremly sad, and I didn't think it would end that way. Have you ever heard a song called "Konstatine" by Something Corporate? It reminded me of this sotry. I would love to read the sequel (not as much as if Draco was apart of it), and I would help you as much as I can. Here's my e-mail.
ashuhlee.boobah@yahoo.com
Good job. ~ Ashley
I'm not usually very emotional, but my god that was sad. I just wanna cry. *boo hoo*. Why did she marry harry and not Ron? (sorry, i'm adamant about the ron/hermione relationship). Great writing :D
That was amazing! I do want more information about this fic. I do think you should continue on to write a full length fiction. You've got the entire summer to do it. My email is written below:
happy_smile_bubbly@yahoo.com
When you send me the email, please title it "Love is Pain" so I know who the email is from. Hope to hear from you soon. Keep writing, even if it's not for this fiction. You've got a real talent, and you should use it. Write something and get your work published. Your talent would make it easy for you! Great job!
~Cutiepoet
Wow. That was incredibly well written. I felt like I wasn't reading a mere fan fiction, but the work of someone who could most certainly be published. I would absolutely love to read a full-length fiction of this! If you've written it, then if you could email me the url, my email address is fire_theArcade@yahoo.com
Thanks.=D
