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Reviews For Take My Heart Away

Name: Gwendolyn Marie (Signed) · Date: 05/30/07 0:22 · For: The Beginning
OMG. this was so good. and so incredibly sad. I loved it!!!

Name: Gwendolyn Marie (Signed) · Date: 05/30/07 0:20 · For: The Beginning
OMG. this was so good. and so incredibly sad. I loved it!!!

Name: joybelle423 (Signed) · Date: 05/27/07 20:20 · For: Midnight Eyes
Hi Maddy! Iíve owed you this review for a long time, and here I am finally getting around to it! I swear, Iím the worldís worst procrastinator. And I canít believe Iíve put off reading such a great fic until now! Really, this is very well written and extremely intriguing. Iím forcing myself to review after this first chapter, when really all I want to do is find out what happens!

From the very beginning of the chapter, youíve completely sucked me in by telling it from Tom Riddleís point of view. This hateful character isnít so hateful after all. Here we see that heís just a regular seventeen-year-old boy, with homework, duties, and distasteful tasks. And ooh, he plays Quidditch! Iíd never considered that before. I feel almost sorry for him Ė I can definitely relate to feeling bored and lonely. I love the way youíve explained his affinity for the Dark Arts Ė boredom Ė while leaving it up to our imagination whether that was his only reason. I like the subtle details youíve included Ė an older Malfoy, expelling Hagrid, Dumbledore not trusting him, Slytherins not making friends but political alliances, etc. Theyíre all woven skilfully together, and not thrown down on the page like a list of facts we need to know before we get into the story. Everything seems natural.

The next section, told from Hermioneís point of view, is just so very Hermione! I love that sheís being cautious and stealthy, and yet is struggling with what to do next. And I simply adore the description of young Tom Riddle. *shivers* Heís positively dreamy, though in a dark and dangerous way. I like that she compares him to Draco, and I love how she has to keep reminding herself that this is a boy who will turn into a vicious, heartless monster. Her logical reasoning with two basic outcomes is very in-character, as is her realisation that the future Dumbledore might possibly have known her in the past. Then the spells that she uses fit in seamlessly. They seem like actual spells from the books Ė thatís hard to do! And heh, I love that she actually forgot that Dumbledore wasnít headmaster at this time. But I was positively groaning when she lied to him! Gah, thatís got to make things more difficult for her! People are forever not confiding in Dumbledore. Thatís a very in-character move for her. And then *gasp* Tom Riddle! They meet at last. I canít wait to see where this goes!

My only critique is that some of her thoughts and memories arenít italicised. It could just be my browser, but you might want to go back through this chapter and double-check those.

Maddy, really, this is outstanding. Iím so glad I had a reason to check this out, and Iím even more relieved to know that this fic is completed! Iím really excited to read the rest of this, since itís a really interesting idea. Youíve set up the storyline so beautifully and effortlessly. Your characterisation of Riddle, Hermione, and Dumbledore is just perfect, and your attention to little details is brilliant. This first chapter is excellent, Maddy! I hope to see more of your work soon!

~ Abigail

Name: footballforeever (Signed) · Date: 05/15/07 1:11 · For: The Beginning
srry for nt submittin a review before but now dat i have finished reading your story...... its the BESTTTTTT fanfic i have ever ever read......
u are an exeptional writer and the whole concept and the way it is potrayed is so beautiful dat i dint want this fic to ever end......ur amazin
and u have just got to write another HrTom fic.....plzzzzzzz...

Name: ForbiddenLove (Signed) · Date: 05/09/07 19:23 · For: The Beginning
I just wanted to say im really sorry for not having reviewed this before. its been on my favs list forever but now ive actually finished reading. this fic broke my heart into smithereens. and whats more, you did that in a truly inventive way. you are a brilliant writer. and the funny thing is, that i am a person who tries to avoid cliches but i loved every single cliche in this story. it was beautiful. very well don. lovely story. im almost sorry i finished reading it because now there's no more left...*sobs*

Name: Scheherazade (Signed) · Date: 04/29/07 16:13 · For: The Beginning
If they couldn't be together in life, they could at least be together in death.
I 'm very glad I found this story and read it through. You are an exceptional author, and I hope that if you ever decide - somewhere down the line - to write another fic featuring Tom and Hermione, I will be exceptionally happy.

Name: Scheherazade (Signed) · Date: 04/29/07 15:58 · For: Black Rose
I almost cried reading that chapter, it was so beautifully written. I'm too at a loss for words to leave a better review than this, but do know that I feel the pain that they felt.

Name: pixie_girl10 (Signed) · Date: 04/29/07 15:16 · For: The End
I kind of saw the ending coming, but I still couldn't stop reading. The plot was amazing and the Hermione/Tom relationship was so original. I hope that you keep on writing stories this powerful, 'cause I'll definitly read them. :)

Name: pixie_girl10 (Signed) · Date: 04/29/07 15:16 · For: The End
I kind of saw the ending coming, but I still couldn't stop reading. The plot was amazing and the Hermione/Tom relationship was so original. I hope that you keep on writing stories this powerful, 'cause I'll definitly read them. :)

Name: GreyLady (Signed) · Date: 04/18/07 22:49 · For: The Beginning
So, this is my review in exchange for the banner that you made me. (It's truly beautiful, thank you!)

This story is also beautiful and quite brilliant. The originality of the plot is refreshing; I loved the irony of Hermione's love creating the monster. Your writing was really lovely in places, especially description, but also the narration; you were often very profound. I liked these lines a lot, in particular: ďTo put it simply, Tom Riddle exhibited Napoleonís ambition, Einsteinís intelligence, Adonisís features, and the Devilís own charisma [Ö] In other words, there was no stopping the boy.Ē The switching of ďThe BeginningĒ and ďThe EndĒ was also very clever.

However, there were some clichťd parts that I didn't like all that much. For instance, the Masquerade Ball. It didn't seem to fit well with the rest of the story and is used often in other fics. There were other parts that I was dissatisfied with for this reason, but that was the biggest one.

I enjoyed your characterization of Tom, as you made him undeniably attractive. ;) You make him feel in as plausible way as thereís ever going to be, though after HBP itís hard to empathize with Tom. There were some romantic gestures that almost became oxymoronic for me, because he is such a calculating individual, no matter how much he loved Hermione. The black rose was one of those gestures, and I canít say that I liked that part of the story very much. I understand that this was written Pre-HBP, though, so I can forgive some of these discrepancies.

Hermioneís characterization was good, though I was surprised by her lack of grief at Ron and Harryís death. I understand that she was off-balance because she was in a different time period, but she seemed to settle in relatively quickly, allowing her to be able to grieve, and yet she didnít. Basically, I felt that that was a weak point to the story, but it didnít drag it down too much. You did an overall good job at making her a strong heroine.

This is a compelling, original story, and I enjoyed it. Again, thank you!

Author's Response: Thank you for this in-depth and insightful review. It means a lot to me that you paid so much attention to my story while reading it. :) Looking back on the story now, I'm not actually very fond of some of the ways I characterized Hermione. It isn't so much the lack of grief about Ron and Harry's death that bothers me, but her lack of a personality in general. I could have done so much more with her, looking back, although I'm generally happy with the way I wrote Tom. As for the cliches, I'm a big defender of cliches in writing; I believe it's useless to avoid them all just because they're labeled 'cliche.' That's just a strange little quirk of mine, though, and I'm sure others agree with you profusely. ;) Thank you again for this lovely review; it'a more than enough compensation for the banner I made.

Name: happy4 (Signed) · Date: 04/18/07 14:52 · For: The Beginning
What a beautifully crafted and articulated story. You have a bright future ahead of you if you continue with this time of plot. Wow! Breathtaking and emotionally stirring...I've read this story so many times, but it still affects me even after countless readings. Tom/Hermione shipper! Who would have thought? Can you write another one? Where do you get all you thrilling and amazing quotes? Great job and keep it up! My favorite fan-fiction without doubt! (one last question: how old were u when u wrote this?)

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'm not planning to write another Tom/Hermione, but I am really near finishing another story about the Black family. I was fourteen when I wrote this. :)

Name: HarrynHermione_06 (Signed) · Date: 04/17/07 18:09 · For: The Beginning
*cries* I love this story!!! This is probably the most thought-provoking and tear-wrenching and heartbreaking story I have read! I love it!

And thanks a TON for the banner!

Name: HarrynHermione_06 (Signed) · Date: 04/14/07 0:42 · For: Midnight Eyes
Oooh! I'm loving it so far! Political Alliance...HA! I'm going to start using that!

Name: slytherin_princess_9 (Signed) · Date: 04/10/07 23:09 · For: The End
What a beautiful story! I nearly shed a tear at the end. It was the perfect ending though; dark, but perfect.

Your writing style is wonderful; it just drew me in. This story sounds like it would never happen in a million years, but the way you tell it makes it perfectly believable.

Once again, you did an amazing job with this story, and I hope that you write more stories in the future!

Name: guiding ray of sunlight (Signed) · Date: 04/10/07 2:25 · For: The Beginning
Hey Maddy!

Well, for starters, I would like to thank you again for my amazing banner. Second, I would like to say that I suck at reviews, so I opologize ahead of time.

Now: I would like to say how I find it terribly ironic, and so totally believeable that what drove Tom to such levels of madness, of hatred, was love. It fits his love-lacking character (in canon) so so much. Even though this story was written pre - HBP, it could still somehow fit in with canon, at least in charcterisation, and that is totally amazing. I love the Symbolysim of the rose, and of how even after death, their love remained. As well, a rose is one of the prettier flowers that exist, yet it has thorns. Their love was true, and beautiful (you ceratinly made it beautiful) yet it had the downsides (that were not their fault. I'd hate to put the blood of millions in the hands of Hermione. SHe doen't deserve it). A rose is beautiful, but it stings.

Also, re-reading it now, right after I read another book, in which a rose has that symbolysim, it has been magnified to me.

Great job!


Name: thunder_storm (Signed) · Date: 04/08/07 15:25 · For: The Beginning
wow! i loved this is honestly brought a tear to my eye. . .i never expected to like a HG/TR story but you did this wonderfully =]

Name: horcrux inthe locket (Signed) · Date: 04/04/07 15:13 · For: The Beginning
I loved this story so much. My friends think I'm a dweeb for crying over this, but I did! Thank You

Name: MarauderGirl23 (Signed) · Date: 04/03/07 17:29 · For: The Beginning
I love, love, love this story! It's probably my favorite. I even printed it out because it was so good!

Name: babekitty_92 (Signed) · Date: 04/01/07 8:17 · For: The End
I like the way you write, Maddy! It's really cool and yeah, well done!

Name: Unknown_22 (Signed) · Date: 03/31/07 22:58 · For: The Beginning
oh wow thats so sad!! i love it
i know this is my fourth review, but i love it !!

now im so curious to no what gave you the idea for this plot?

Author's Response: hehe alright then... I was lying on my bed one afternoon, listening to 'The Leaving Song Part II' by AFI (the lyrics are referenced at the beginning of some chapters), drifting off to sleep. The ending came to me first... the very last part of the very last scene. And I worked backward fromt there. ;)

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