Reviews For Take My Heart Away
Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 03/09/07 22:33
Chapter: Sunset Tears

Ooh, I just realised this is the chapter for which I have to most to say... but like, probably won't say all of it. Your quotes are very good >.> how do you find them all? Do you type them in on a search engine, or do you sorta just pick them up along the way, like I do?

I had to giggle when the italics rolled around and he was talking about Helen the actress, she sounded so very Mary-Sue! Which then made me laugh again, because.. that's exactly what she is, actually. She's all an act, right down to the hair!

So I've got this quote lying around, lol. It’s not as if shedding salty water will help your problem. Ppsst. Leaking saline from tear ducts so totally does help sometimes. But I like... how disjointed he was. It reminded me of how not-human he is in HBp, and the way he's described. It was... pretty, lol. For lack of better word.

And I'm going backwards here, so you'll have to excuse that. But, I noticed that thankfully, unlike some other fics, you haven't actually got the canon death eaters as these death eaters. Voldemort is like... 80 years old, right? and the death eaters are forties/thirties, according to the canon Prophet. So yay for that, lol. I love the way you've either just subconsciously attacked cliches, or the way you've thought all your plot points out.

And I thought Tom's internal description of Hermione was... awww like wow. Which recognises BAD BAD BAD in my mind, but I'm still sitting here going ":kiss the girl dammit!" even though it's LV. What powers you possess...

Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 03/09/07 22:24
Chapter: Late Night Suspicions

Ooh, go Hermione! I especially liked the way you used the lyrics to convey meaning again. And Evenescence is just an amazing band, so yay for that. I picked out two quotes this time, so I'm going to be annoying again and discuss development and linkage and all that jazz.

So, I like the way you're changing perspectives and characters all the time. It's good, and fresh because in the books not only do we not get to see all of this, but we actually get to see their thoughts in this, which makes me into a giddy little newbie fangurl again, because you've still got that little bit that I love about fanfiction that's like.. not bordering on Orgi fic; you're still very much true to the books.


The days passed, and Hermione worked hard to keep up her facade as ‘Helen’. She was dully agreeable, and all of the Gryffindors got along well with her.
I just thought the word "agreeable" and the fact that they were all getting on was hilarious, considering how completely opposite it is in the books :D.

His calm face had shattered, and Hermione realized that she had hit the nail on the head. I liked the way she was like "boo! gotcha!" with that sentence. Did I not say she so totally should have said that a couple of reviews again? I totally did :D And branching off from that, the way Tom thinks Dumbledore makes him feel is good.. I think you said glass? Very good, and connects to both the lyrics & the comment from Hermione. More more more more more more... *fades off as she runs to next chapter*

Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 03/09/07 21:01
Chapter: Of All People

Ack. I got interrupted on the last chapter so forgot some of what I wanted to say. But, I'll say it here because I'm deathly afraid of double reviewing by pressing back. Cough. Basically, yuou said something in the last chapter about Tom being as good as Dumbledore in Trans. I said something about that, too, but also meant to say that I was thinking about all the stuff Dumbledore cna do, and also that that was a sort of.. biased opinion of Tom. Obviously he's not as good as Dumbledore, which is shown brilliantly through the first person limited view & bias thing. But I was also thinking, that when Dumbledore joined the staff he probably wasn't given too much of a special treatment. Maybe his best subject wasn't Trans. I don't think they'd kick a teacher out just because the O Might Dumbledore stepped up and wanted their job. And, it occured to me then that Riddle's arrogance is going to play a big part. The "You don't know who I am" line was very good, and I half expected Hermione to say, "Oh yeah boy? I know more about you than you, yo!" sort of thing. But of course, she didn't. And I'm going off point again, but I just liked the way the attributes of Tom carried over a little bit. Although we know Voldemort briefly in the books, we're getting to know Tom here.

And point two I forgot :D I love your quotes. Not a huge fan of AFI, but their music is good, and those lyrics are fitting. And the quotes say a lot about what the chapter and overall story's about. And I think I've pretty much indlued all I wanted to say about this chapter and last chapter, so now I'll move on :D after saying I had a little giggle at Hemione saying she was average, of course.

Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 03/09/07 20:51
Chapter: Helen Nestowe of Germany

I'll do this one backwards >.> I was giggling at the change from Hermione to Dumbledore, and then you hit me with that last comment. It makes me smile happily that you've included Dumbledore's thoughts.

Although Dumbledore refused to admit it, the ‘lessons’ had become a private match of wits between the two of them, since Tom had almost reached Dumbledore’s level of capability on the subject. *inserts quote sneakily in the middle this time* I have a moderate amount to say on this chapter, so bear with me :) I really enjoyed the couple of paragraphs about Dumbledore further up. I won't actually paste the whole section in here, that'd be a little annoying :d so I'll just say I really got thinking about what you said with how he admired & hated Dumbledore. And, the little comment about how the both of them felt a slight attraction was just.. hee ironic.

OH! And I wanted to congratulate you a little. I usually don't like stories that have students coming in from other countries half way, but I actually didn't realise what you'd done until you had Dumbledore chatting about his suspicious, which made me wrinkle my nose in amusement (what? I do!) because you managed to slip it past me! So huzzuh for the manipulation of such a cliche, lol. I think this story will be full of potential cliches from what I've seen so far, but your ideas and your style of writing have actually managed to pull a lot of them off. I say we hold this story up to the light and put a big red sticker proclaiming "how to" on this. And PS. Nice German :D.

Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 03/09/07 20:27
Chapter: Midnight Eyes

Ooh, good chapter! While I'm usually a bit dubious of people changing what they look like with spells, that's just a thing that Steph doesn't like, not so much as... it's not believable. Obviously there's got to be a better alternative to the Polyjuice potion. I'd be interested to know what the "spells" meant though. Usually i just translate things roughly into latin and smirk.

And, in true Steph fashion, here comes a good quote - Besides, Slytherins did not make friends. They made political alliances. - :D I liked this. Especially with all the politics in the world (they're EVERYWHERE, not just in our legal system) but it made me smile, because all the inter connected Slytherins reminded me of all those people who are just.. born into higher class and stay there because they make friends with all their other upperclassmen. And, it makes me think of how fake all their air kissing is :D.

Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 03/09/07 20:18
Chapter: The End

Hello! You'll find that I'll leave lots and lots of little reviews rather than one big one. I love coming into a story that's already finished, just as much as I love stories that arn't finished. But, for the mood I'm in today which is bouncy and craving progression, you'll get me reading this all in one day, unless RL tries to take me away :D

He regarded her with an expression so full of the earnesty she had remembered in the old Harry that she was flushed with a sudden confidence. I'll randomly pick out lines, lol. I like this line because... I love in fics concerning Harry where he actually ACTS like himself. I think that his personality has just been so distorted, so I really hope you do him justice. I likke where this is going so far, and the characters are good. I especially admire the detail and the description of going through the decades with the Time Turner. And now, more heart fic!

Reviewer: beauty and brains
Date: 03/09/07 17:39
Chapter: The Beginning

*Sobs uncontrollably* This story was so beautiful! *Sniffles into tissue* It inspired me to write my own Tom/Hermione! *Wipes tears away and smiles as plot bunnies pop into her head* Can you please do another Tom/Hermione? :] ♥

Reviewer: Escape Artist
Date: 02/19/07 14:01
Chapter: The Beginning

This story was unique, articulate, and overall fabulous. I applaud thee.

Reviewer: Escape Artist
Date: 02/19/07 13:58
Chapter: Black Rose

Oh jeez... spectacular!

Reviewer: Escape Artist
Date: 02/19/07 13:51
Chapter: Worst Nightmare

*Fans self* Oh mylanta.

Reviewer: Escape Artist
Date: 02/19/07 13:44
Chapter: See You Cry

Tear- jerking literary art.

Reviewer: Escape Artist
Date: 02/19/07 13:40
Chapter: Pieces of Agony

Intense!

Reviewer: Escape Artist
Date: 02/19/07 13:37
Chapter: Price of Immortality

Amazing.
Incredible.
I'm short of breath :]

Reviewer: mori_mac
Date: 02/17/07 21:32
Chapter: The Beginning

speechless.

Reviewer: Hermione lover 321
Date: 02/16/07 13:04
Chapter: Helen Nestowe of Germany

And here we see that Dumbledore has always been, and always will be, a meddling genious!
May he live on in our hearrts for ever.

Reviewer: msmarvelfreak
Date: 02/14/07 13:19
Chapter: The Beginning

Wow what an awesome story!

Reviewer: tickled_pink
Date: 02/14/07 1:46
Chapter: The Beginning

This was a beautiful ending!!! I loved the discussion into destiny affecting our choices - thats such an ineresting idea!

~Tickled Pink~

Reviewer: animagusstag
Date: 02/13/07 20:11
Chapter: The Beginning

AMAZING!!!! very well written.

Reviewer: HarryplusLuna
Date: 02/12/07 0:00
Chapter: The Beginning

NOW I understand why this fanfic was placed in dark/angst instead of romance.

How twisted! How tragic! How well written!

Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant!

Reviewer: MizMyrtle
Date: 02/11/07 17:16
Chapter: The Beginning

Oh. My. God. That was really profound. snaps for you!!!!!!
Loved the ending (even though it made me cry)

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