Reviews For Beyond The Horizon
Reviewer: luvbunny114
Date: 09/30/05 22:09
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

"What?" Sirius said. "You want a kiss from me too?" ^^major lol^^ likin the story so far. bit of a typo i think. at one point in the end of the Lily section you say Mrs. Weasley... it's Mrs. Evans... i don't know if anyone else pointed that out... didn't read the other reviews yet. ok well, please update, i'll look forward to it!

Reviewer: gabzi27
Date: 08/22/05 11:59
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

loved every thing pls up date

Reviewer: love4liars
Date: 08/13/05 22:58
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

I liked your fist chapter...it was halarious!! And don't worry...I TOTALLY understood the bed-wetting thing the second I read it! That was funny! I don't see how people got confused by that but anyway, really good start! keep going!

Reviewer: HermioneIsAwesome
Date: 08/08/05 15:15
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

LoL Excellent story!!! Really liked the bedwetting cracks from Sirius. Owl names were awesomely funny also. Favorite quote? Eh... well I really liked the one with Mrs. Potter telling James he was a man now and then Sirius saying "apart from the bedwetting that is" I could totally envision him saying that with a perfectly straight face. My other one was: "James looked at Sirius, a smile forming on his face. “What?” said Sirius. “Want kiss from me too?” -- that was funny! :D excellent excellent story!

Reviewer: KJRowling
Date: 08/08/05 6:00
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

lol, loved the bedwetting. It's really good. At one point you called Mrs Evans Mrs Weasley but that was the only mistake I could find. Really good, I enjoyed it :-)

Reviewer: Crazy About Dan
Date: 08/05/05 19:12
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

That was really cool how you started with the same thing for both Lily and James. Sirius was very funny. The owl names were really good. Petunia was also good. GTG

Reviewer: rupertluvr07
Date: 08/03/05 23:23
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

bedwetting?!?!?! thats great!! loved the story so far and i hope you update soon. can't wait to read more

Author's Response: Alright this response is not for just one guy/girl/male/female/man/woman/aunt/uncle/kiddo/kiddi or whatever/whatever (forgive me if i forgot to add something)......anyway this is the answer to ALL of your questions (by ALL the of the people) in the first chapter ... so here goes: First of all the bed-wetting thing: As far as I could find out ... most reader's didn't/wouldn't/or just couldn't understand that part... As far as i know ... they didn't know, how the bed DID get wet/ or the doubted the realism .... anyway Sirius threw a wandful (or bucketful) of water on James ... well that was a LOT of water ... from wetting James's shirt and his trousers it ADDITIONALLY got spilled ON the BED ... so it looked like the bed HAD been WETTED BY JAMES... The BANG thing: That was NOTHING .... like Mark Evans and James's mother's, brother's, sister's, uncle's, son's grandma is NOTHING... that was simply the sound produced by the door hitting the wall rapidly ... get it?... The Evans's part: Didn't mind this even a bit ... the Evans's scene was a little boring ... because ... Face it: That girl's boring (at least for now,), she's got to show a little bit of sensibleness ...if she is at all to become miss no-pranks ...

Author's Response: Alright this response is not for just one guy/girl/male/female/man/woman/aunt/uncle/kiddo/kiddi or whatever/whatever (forgive me if i forgot to add something)......anyway this is the answer to ALL of your questions (by ALL the of the people) in the first chapter ... so here goes: First of all the bed-wetting thing: As far as I could find out ... most reader's didn't/wouldn't/or just couldn't understand that part... As far as i know ... they didn't know, how the bed DID get wet/ or the doubted the realism .... anyway Sirius threw a wandful (or bucketful) of water on James ... well that was a LOT of water ... from wetting James's shirt and his trousers it ADDITIONALLY got spilled ON the BED ... so it looked like the bed HAD been WETTED BY JAMES... The BANG thing: That was NOTHING .... like Mark Evans and James's mother's, brother's, sister's, uncle's, son's grandma is NOTHING... that was simply the sound produced by the door hitting the wall rapidly ... get it?... The Evans's part: Didn't mind this even a bit ... the Evans's scene was a little boring ... because ... Face it: That girl's boring (at least for now,), she's got to show a little bit of sensibleness ...if she is at all to become miss no-pranks ... AS for the 2 chapter ... i've submitted it ... hope they accept it..

Author's Response: Alright this response is not for just one guy/girl/male/female/man/woman/aunt/uncle/kiddo/kiddi or whatever/whatever (forgive me if i forgot to add something)......anyway this is the answer to ALL of your questions (by ALL the of the people) in the first chapter ... so here goes: First of all the bed-wetting thing: As far as I could find out ... most reader's didn't/wouldn't/or just couldn't understand that part... As far as i know ... they didn't know, how the bed DID get wet/ or the doubted the realism .... anyway Sirius threw a wandful (or bucketful) of water on James ... well that was a LOT of water ... from wetting James's shirt and his trousers it ADDITIONALLY got spilled ON the BED ... so it looked like the bed HAD been WETTED BY JAMES... The BANG thing: That was NOTHING .... like Mark Evans and James's mother's, brother's, sister's, uncle's, son's grandma is NOTHING... that was simply the sound produced by the door hitting the wall rapidly ... get it?... The Evans's part: Didn't mind this even a bit ... the Evans's scene was a little boring ... because ... Face it: That girl's boring (at least for now,), she's got to show a little bit of sensibleness ...if she is at all to become miss no-pranks ... AS for the 2 chapter ... i've submitted it ... hope they accept it.. And one last thing ... this story's bound to get a little boring at time ... because ... there's a limited amount of fun in real life (even if it's a wizard,s/witch's magic life)... and i'm striving to make it seem like a reality ... or in mugglenet's own words ... not to get the characters suger-highed!

Reviewer: Mirrorbay2000
Date: 08/03/05 19:28
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

Very promising first chapter. This story seems interesting, I thought it was hilarious when Mrs. Potter belived Sirius that James had wet the bed- even if it didn't seem very realistic for a seventeen year old. There was a few confusing parts for me, though. I didn't understand the opening paragraph about the Evans' being at Godric's Hollow. Is that their home, or is she just imagining this? The only other thing I didn't understand in both Lily and James' sections of the story was the Bang! I'm curious to see what it means because I have no clue if that was an action, or someone said bang, or the badge suddenly appeared. Can you help me with that. Please update, I think your story had a very efficent dose of comedy mixed in with reality. -Ellen

Author's Response: I've made out Godric's Hollow to be Lily real home .... the 'why' question will be explained later...

Reviewer: Marauder by Midnight
Date: 08/03/05 14:43
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

Cute story. The only criticism I have is that your scene at the Evans' didn't fit in with the scene at the Potters'. The Potter scene seemed light-hearted while the Evans scene was really boring (no offense). On the other hand, I really liked the Potter part. Probably because of the addition of Sirius. Favorite quote: "With that, she was gone. James looked at Sirius, a smile forming on his face. “What?” said Sirius. “Want kiss from me too?”" hehe too funny. Update soon -MM

Reviewer: luvthe1uhurt
Date: 07/26/05 10:49
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

brilliant so far!!keep it up!i cant wiat till the next chapter!

Reviewer: Tara Ranae
Date: 07/11/05 11:58
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

Verrrrrrry good story! I really enjoyed the first chapter. I liked how you portrayed all of the characters; they all seemed to be perfect to me. It's summer break, everyone just wants to have a little bit of fun! I give it 10/10. Update soon!

Reviewer: missblack
Date: 07/04/05 18:56
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

Haha..i like this so far. Sirius is so funny. This looks like a good story..i shall have to keep up with it. :)

Reviewer: ma_raie
Date: 07/03/05 0:39
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

Eh, you might want to count this as half of a good review. I loved Lily's portion of the chapter, and it began a seem like a very promising begining to a very promising story. However, I reached the James/Sirius part and found it a bit immature for my taste. Yes, the Marauders were immature teenage boys, but not that immature. I definitely didn't get the bed wetting thing -- that was very out of character. All the name calling and insults were immature as well. As far as Lily goes, I see a promising novel, but the Marauders may bring it down.

Author's Response: You look like one of those sirius...er..sorry...i meant serious and totally in the mood to read very realistic stories....i appreciate that...thanks for giving me advice....hopefully the next chapter will be up to your expectations...or at a bit closer to your taste... i personally don't find it amusing when, even one person finds my fics not worth their while...lol...but then i improve just to make you guys happy...er...now happy?

Reviewer: Lexy Granger
Date: 07/02/05 17:53
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

this sounds reallllllllllllllllllly good!!!!!!!!! pleeeeeeeease update!!! :):):)

Reviewer: mime
Date: 06/28/05 19:07
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

A wonderful beginning to what looks like will be a wonderful story! It was very creative and funny. I loved how the Marauders named all the owls in the owlery! I'd have to say my favorite quote was this though: “It’s not his fault, Mrs. Potter,” said Sirius, and for a moment it seemed to James that Sirius was about to admit his mistake. Sirius however continued, “I mean … it’s not his fault that he can’t … er … keep all the contents in.” I just about cracked up there! lol Anyway, you've portrayed the characters very well and started the story off in the perfect place. Most people start the story on the train. You started it when I find the story really should start. Your first shapter really kept my attention. And must you really wait for 10 reviews? I really wanna read the next chapter! I can't wait! Anyway, to sum it up, great first chapter to your fanfic. I really can't wait until you put up the next one! -Christy

Author's Response: Okay ... just for the readers. I'd cut down the number of reviews at 5 for now. I didn't expect to receive 10 anyway for just chapter, however great it may be. But i WILL expect it for the later chapters. So people, only 2 more reviews to go!

Reviewer: Tara Ranae
Date: 06/24/05 12:03
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

Wonderful first chapter! I really like the way you have portrayed Sirius. Keep it up and don't leave me hanging for too long; update soon!

Author's Response: Thanku ... i'll update as soon as i get a considerable amount of reviews (for a first time ever submitted story, first chapter, anyway..lol) I'll try to keep up to your expectations....thanks again!

Reviewer: Dee Fleur
Date: 06/24/05 11:19
Chapter: That Deeper Meaning

Good story so far... nice character development. Write again soon!

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