Nutty Imp, this is brilliant. You need to write more poetry. I was wondering, I am writing a one-shot about Lupin, and I was wondering whether you'd allow me to quote your poem as some do song lyrics. I would obviously give you all due credit and lots more. Just a thought. I understand if you refuse though.
Author's Response: ^_^ As with all my poems :) Feel free to use them. If it inspire some plot bunny all the better ^_^ The honour is all mine :)
Very good work here, Nutty Imp. You have done very well to capture a wealth of emotion and angst that a werewolf certainly must feel. My favorite lines are those two that you repeat as your third and sixth stanzas, “I wish to hide from the moonlight; The creature within I cannot fight.”
Roam goes a little better with alone as a near rhyme. So, in that first stanza, how about something like into the forest did I foolishly roam -- Now fated I am to be always alone.
I also feel like the rhythm changes as the reader moves through the poem. Despite this, the poem still has decent flow. However, a more consistent meter would make it flow even better. Overall, this was a very well done poem that I enjoyed very much.
Author's Response: Thanks Vader. You're suggestions are highly appreciated. You're right, it does sound better your way and I improved the rhythm/meter a bit as well.
Interesting poem title... my own poem seems to be of a similar namesake. Your rhyming didn't seem to flow (though I'm a big sucker for patterns) quite right but what you were trying to portray was wonderful. I like the repetition of light throughout the piece.
Author's Response: Yes. I think I read and reviewed it... Thanks for stating that. I've just worked to improve it slightly.
coolies, i like, i like!
Author's Response: ^_^ Thanks for saying so ^_^
