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Name: liss8493 (Signed) · Date: 12/15/07 8:50 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
This is an a amazing story! 47 Chapters is briliant! omg i soo cant wait for the competition! woo lol Great Story please keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, liss8493. I'm glad to know you are enjoying it. I might argue with you about the 47 chapters being brilliant. I'm really thinking it is insanity! LOL But thank you so much. I will definitely try. :)

FYI to readers: I've broken the 10,000 word limit for chapters on MNFF with the current chapter, and it still isn't finished. >.< So, you may end up with two smaller chapters as I've had to do before, or my beta, *waves at Marauderswolf* might hack out a lot of rubbish and get it back in line with the site chapter limit. Of course, if I don't finish the darn thing, she won't have a chance to cut it with the big red pen. *sigh* *goes off to try to wrestle bad chapter into submission*

Name: iluvkrum (Signed) · Date: 12/10/07 14:30 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
poor remus having to lie all the time. i'm looking forward to lindi finding out about him. wondering if she's going to figure it out on her own or if remus or someone else is going to spill the beans on him. hoping you update soon!

Author's Response: *huggles Remus* Hopefully, you won't have to wonder for two more years how she finds out or what happens when/if she does, but...gah! I'm having such a hard time getting through this chapter. I wish I could just skip it and move on to the next one. Thank you for reviewing, iluvkrum. I hope I update soon too. >.<

Name: froggie (Signed) · Date: 12/10/07 1:02 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
hey there thanks for responding to the review. now i know you are still alive. or that you didn't get abducted by aliens or move to the rainforest where they don't have computers.

i feel so bad that you are frustrated, but just know that we love this story a lot.
if you can't have it out by christmas, it can be my birthday present, which is ten days after.

your loyal reader

Author's Response: Hi, froggie, actually, I like the abducted by aliens thing. I might start using it as an excuse for why I still haven't finished this blasted chapter. :( Now, I'll shoot for your birthday. If I miss my target, have a very Happy Birthday! Thank you for this nice post. :)

Name: froggie (Signed) · Date: 12/04/07 9:10 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
this is nuts!!! this chapter must have come out a few months ago! if this story gets deleted/dissapears from the internet, i willl be so mad. so please continue with the story! we are your loyal fans.

lots of love

Author's Response: *hides from froggie* I know! It is nuts, but it has only been a little over 2 months. <.< *dies of shame* I wish I could tell you it is because I'm working so hard on making the chapter excellent, but in truth, I'm not getting any time to work on it at all. *blames Real Life* Well, very little and very sporadic, which is a bad way for me to work. I end up getting all out of focus and...bleh! It is giving me trouble, but I promise, I'm not giving up. I wouldn't do that to my loyal fans. :*) My goal is a chapter by Christmas, but no promises, other than the one to keep trying. I am so sorry to keep you waiting so long. Thank you for your encouragement. I need some poking when I start feeling so frustrated about it all. It helps to know you are out there and that you'll be mad if I just give up. *scared* Thanks, froggie. <3

Name: readingislife (Signed) · Date: 12/03/07 15:04 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
I have just read through this story for the third time. You do have quite a flair for writing. I have read several different fanfictions, and there is only one other author that I have enjoyed nearly as much as this story.

Your description of the marauders, their personalities, their way of teasing others, their fierce loyalty, their frequent tussles with the Slytherins, are all believable based on JK Rowling's work. It is infrequent that I feel an author can draw their readers into a relationship with a character that has an incredibly believable personality, has recognizable motives for their actions, and cute quirks. I love the way you have expounded all the characters in this fic. Well done. Lindi is adorably neurotic and Remus is everything I would have wanted him to be written like. He is exactly as I pictured him in younger years (despite that bit of idiocy with Celia, but I completely believed it could have happened, I was just upset with him for doing it...) But he is expertly written in my opinion, very loyal, very thoughtful, and even the way he is haunted by lycanthropy and the way he relates to his parents. I can't praise his character development enough.

Let me encourage you, please don't give up writing this piece... if only because we enjoy it! But it is a very good bit of writing and showcases your talent well. I would not be surprised at all if you had a career in it.

Oh, and I love how each of the marauders is so different, you haven't lumped any of them together. You've showed their personalities and their maturing in their own ways, again excellent.

Thank you for sharing and please keep writing!

Author's Response: *rereads fabulous review* Thank you so much, readingislife. This is one of those reviews that nearly leaves me speechless, and makes me want to quit before I really blow it (especially when I am hating the chapter I'm working on. >.<) I won't, of course, even though it may seem that I have. :*( Thank you, thank you! for the wonderful comments on my story and my writing, particularly the characterization. I am so glad you have enjoyed it and I will try my best not to disappoint you (TRY being the key word.) *prints out lovely review for motivation* Thank you again, readinislife.

Name: HClovesPhelps (Signed) · Date: 11/22/07 10:03 · For: The Crystal Cove
I'm not throwing things at you. Just a little disappointed. This is a really really good story. You have a talent of writing that I will never have.

Author's Response: I just had to check what chapter this was for, and then refresh my memory on what happens in it, to see why you were disappointed. *blush* That's how long it's been since I wrote this. I really need to get more writing finished. *nods* I'm so glad you are enjoying the story and thanlk you so much for the encouraging words, HClovesPhelps. I appreciate the review and thanks for not throwing anything. :-)

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 11/21/07 22:17 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
Oh! Please update soon! I, too, am in serious need of an MOB fix!!

Author's Response: :*/

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 11/21/07 22:15 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
Oh! Next chapter, please! I too am in serious need of an MOB fix!!!

Author's Response: Hi, ren_a87! I'm so sorry for keeping you waiting. I'm having a terrible time finding time to work on the chapter, and to make matters worse, I'm having a really hard time with this one. It's probably because I don't have the time to dedicate to it. *eyes roll* I am trying, but... *sigh* My fervent hope is that I will have it up by Christmas and that you will not find it a poor excuse for a Christmas gift. :( I will do my very best.

Name: froggie (Signed) · Date: 11/05/07 21:58 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
oooh i am soo excited for the next chapter! this chapter was good, kind of a fillerish type i think, but nice all the same i loved the part where they gave each other the same gift--so cute! im getting impatient herebecause i need a new chappie! mob fix.
kk cant wait for update, im excited.

Author's Response: Thank you, froggie! I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. It was a sort of fillerish chapter, though I think of it more as a building block chapter, in that it has information that will serve as a sort of foundation for future chapters. Probably the same thing, but as I am incoherent where the story is concerned, I'm rambling. *blush* I am trying to get the next one finished. I'm sorry for trying your patience so horribly. I hope it won't be too much longer. Thank you for reviewing and giving me encouragement. I really need it!

Name: Roommate of the Quillster (Signed) · Date: 10/30/07 2:47 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
I love how precious and delicately you approach the all-important topic of Remus, a werewolf, dating a beautiful young lady. Remus’s wishes were so lovely and honest. It was quite in character for him to be in awe and gratitude for having such a treasure to hold. It was a lovely moment to read.

Then came the duel with the Marauders. Although it was completely brilliant and great fun, it felt a bit weak for the four of them. I know they were playing nice because Lindi was there. But it seems like if one of them gets to do the teasing, somehow all of them would join in at one point—after all, they are boys. Even though Sirius wanted to make a point, the boys were lighthearted and I could completely see them joining in the fun because they were a little bored or just couldn’t keep them out of the action. Particularly when Lily walked in, I could see a hex miss aiming and James and Lily joining in the duel. Just a personal thought. Though I did like how you resolved it and got them talking about students involved with Death Eaters.

Once again, you leave us loving the characters. This was a lovely filler chapter. One of those life experience chapters where nothing spectacular happens, but people exist. Sometimes I like a little more detail that you so perfectly give about characters and their thoughts and emotions. Or even the little things that Remus notices.

But, I do say that leaving us wanting more was the best thing you could have done. I’d almost forgotten about field day, and now I’m so ready to see Lindi take on James and see who wins whatever bet.

Author's Response: Oh, Roommate, I am so ashamed! It has taken me far too long to get to these absolutely fabulous reviews. I have no good excuse. Please forgive me. I am struggling with the next chapter, to the point I'm ready to delete the whole story, (Of course, I won't, but I want to!) and I can't seem to have a coherent thought about anything related to it, including reviews with such depth as you have given me here. I promise to make a proper response as soon as I finish the blooming chapter. Please forgive me until then and thank you for taking the time (considerable time, I'd say) to share your thoughts with me. And I'm so glad you are back! :)

Author's Response: Oh, Roommate, I am so ashamed! It has taken me far too long to get to these absolutely fabulous reviews. I have no good excuse. Please forgive me. I am struggling with the next chapter, to the point I'm ready to delete the whole story, (Of course, I won't, but I want to!) and I can't seem to have a coherent thought about anything related to it, including reviews with such depth as you have given me here. I promise to make a proper response as soon as I finish the blooming chapter. Please forgive me until then and thank you for taking the time (considerable time, I'd say) to share your thoughts with me. And I'm so glad you are back! :)

Name: Roommate of the Quillster (Signed) · Date: 10/30/07 2:26 · For: No Funny Business
I find it interesting and good that when you bring us back from Christmas holiday, you also bring us back into wizarding current events. It’s not pleasant (but neither is returning to school after a holiday) but the parallel emotion was a nice touch.

I also am interested in how subtly you continue to change and adapt Peter’s character. I don’t think he’s completely thought out. It’s like sometimes you remember that he becomes the traitor and so you throw in something almost… obvious that reminds the readers that he’s not the good guy. But then you’ll revert back to him acting as a typical marauder.

Peter blushed, but looked around nervously before he answered in a hushed voice as his mother had done. “Lord V-Voldemort.”

Although this is appropriate and possibly accurate, it was kind of thrown at us. And then not mentioned again. Perhaps think of evening him out to make him more consistent.

I liked bringing Will Chambers back. I happen to have a mini-crush on him because of the small details you’ve included about him. My favorite line was this:

“He’s a Hit Wizard?” Oh, brilliant…I have a Hit Wizard threatening me if he thinks I mistreat her.

The best part about this was how nonchalantly Lindi mentioned her cousin’s line of work and how seriously it affects Remus. How utterly evil of you to add another stress to Remus’s self-consciousness about dating the beautiful Lindi. :) I thought it was brilliant. And it was brilliant because you didn’t focus or panic about it. You just mentioned it and moved on even though it was something that will probably pop up in the back of Remus’s mind for a while — particularly considering the setting he first met Will the Hit Wizard in. Nice work at this detail. But that’s something you’re usually very on top of is including the details that make your story significant and your characters real.

Author's Response: Wow, another amazing review. Forgive me for taking so very long to respond. Peter...Peter is difficult. I understand and fully agree with your assessment that he is uneven. The problem is, I see him that way. I don't mean you are wrong at all. It is a problem I have. I just think there would be little hints that would show up and I feel the need to hint, though I know they are rather obvious, yet I don't know if it is because we all know the truth about him, or if I'm just being too obvious. Does that make sense? I will definitely try to be more aware of him. The miserable little *^*&^*&

One thing I enjoy is writing things that my characters are oblivious to, ie Lindi's oblivion to the impact her statements have on Remus and his life. Being omniscient can be fun. *hehehe* Or should that be *muwahahaha* Well, thank you for this very lovely and helpful review. I will keep your points on Peter in mind. You may have to keep on me, because I do find him a chore. :-P Thanks, Roommate.

Name: Roommate of the Quillster (Signed) · Date: 10/30/07 2:02 · For: Don’t Drink the Punch
After leaving us with a perfect moment of bliss (I love it when you use that phrase), you bring us back to reality. :) And the fun begins. The witty banter completely met the standard you’ve set in your story — including the CPR discussion and crystal ball of their futures.

You continue bringing in Severus Snape. I will be quite intrigued to see what you do with the tension you’ve built and what has to inevitably happen between him and Remus. However, I do think you’ve hit Remus’s personality accurately — he is by far the most patient of all the Marauders.

Which brings me to the punch. Of all the things to put in the punch, the blabbing potion or whatever it was, was an excellent choice. It was nice to see the disasters coming up as well as to hear what was on everyone’s mind. For once it was nice to see Lindi as outspoken as she was — even if it wasn’t really her. You took a nice opportunity to showcase her thoughts without disrupting the integrity of your storyline.

Personally, I don’t love the idea of Sirius as a complete ladies man in real life. But, you write it well and keep the camaraderie of the Marauders consistent, which is the more important thing.

Once again, after the almost forty chapter build-up, it’s nice to see Remus happy. And with Lindi. :) You’ve hit their romantic innocence right on the mark, and it’s nice to finally have them together.

Author's Response: :*) You like the moment of bliss phrase? *dies* Sometimes I look at the title and have considered pulling a KFC. You know, they don't ever call it Kentucky Fried Chicken anymore. LOL Would you all be able to find the story if I change the title simply to MoB? A long time ago, one of the funnier people over on the forums started poking fun at story titles (all in good fun). It was one of the funniest things I've read, but I was so worried she'd get a hold of MoB. *dies* Part of me was hoping she would, and another was dreading it. Fortunately or unfortunately, she was made to stop. :( Still, I throw the title in once in a while, don't I? Not sure why. Maybe I'm a masochist. LOL Anyway, I'm glad you like it. It makes me feel a little better about it.

Severus...he is complicated for me. I hope I do him justice, though I will admit that I will likely take the coward’s way out and probably not focus on him any more than I feel is absolutely necessary. :*/ Ladies man Sirius... :*) I can't help myself...40 chapter build up...*dies again* This review...wonderful. Thank you, again Roommate.

Name: Roommate of the Quillster (Signed) · Date: 10/30/07 1:30 · For: Some Sort of Conspiracy
Yes, I’m back. :) And it’s official. I’m happy to be caught up on the Remus story.

First, I would like to point out how delectably cruel and perfect it was to steal Lindi away again before they actually get to kiss. It was a wonderful build up and release without dropping the emotional height of the story.

Then, the way Remus told, or didn’t tell, his friends what had happened was perfect. You wrote it so deliberately and sincerely that I could feel the butterflies in his stomach from eager anticipation and joyful memories as I was reading it. But then again, you always did have a way with portraying an excellent Remus character.

I love how you continue to develop the multiple plotlines while still remaining true to your ‘Remus-centric’ theme. The Lindi/Darlene scenarios are well written. I am also fond of the way you develop the James/Lily scenes without over-doing them or rushing them. It’s nice to see Lily coming around without immediately falling for James.

My favorite part of this chapter was the note paper. First, I think it’s absolutely brilliant that the Marauders communicate like this. Because they would. Second, it was fun to see a complete high school approach to genuine flirting. Although flirting is fun in person, it’s nice to see them flirt so openly without getting tongue-tied. And it’s the perfect Marauder Remus side to his personality that we don’t always see.

Great work on this chapter. You kept us in suspense and laughing in the same chapter. You also reminded us of several important points of the character of Remus: his marauder side, his romantic side, and his uniquely Remus side. Nice job!

Author's Response: I am so glad you are back, Roommate! There is a thread on the forums for awesome reviews, and I would post all of yours, but for the fact they have a 100 word limit. I am so glad you are enjoying the side stories. I think they keep me interested even though they are at times the result of my mind wandering. :*) And I'm glad you liked the flirting. I had so much fun with that. I refuse to believe that Remus wasn't at heart a normal teenager and yes, a Marauder to the core. Have I said lately that I love Remus? And I love your reviews. Thank you!

Name: flapjack88 (Signed) · Date: 10/27/07 9:21 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
I'm so so so (x whatever) sorry! I'm becoming a terrible reviewer aren't I? Well, consdering I don't actually review i'm pretty damn poor! *sigh* I don't want to have to use excuses but theres simply no way around it. I've been terribly busy (just started university... and if the workload doesn't kill you the drinking and socialising definately will!!) but just thought i'd quickly leave some form of a review stating:'IM ALIVE AND STILL READING'.

I still love this story tonnes. I stil love Remus tonnes. (And Sirius.. woop!)

I'll try and comment on the actual chapters real soon but to be honest I can't promise anything. Again, sorry. BUT that doesn't mean I don't want to keep reading! Luurrvvvveee this story.
And You.

Author's Response: Eeeesshh...you can say that again! Not about you being terrible, of course, but about me. I have been so negligent towards my reviewers and more so towards my readers in general. Gosh, it has been ages since I updated. I am working on the next chapter but find myself so overwhelmed with real life it is coming very very slowly. I'm glad you are clearly enjoying life enough that you probably haven't noticed how much time has passed. ;) Thank you for letting me know you are still alive! I do start to worry, you know. :-)

Name: I_LUV_MOONY (Signed) · Date: 10/14/07 14:00 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
Ooh, I definitely cannot wait for the next chapter. It had better live up to this one. *wink*

“If you hadn’t gone and got yourself disinherited,” James had once taunted, “you could have bought one of those big manors like the Malfoys have, with separate wings and she could have her own bed.”

“Hrmmphh!” Sirius had huffed incredulously. “She won’t want her own bed. Sleeping in mine will be well worth the risk, mate.”

Do I even need to say that Sirius is funny?

That duel between Sirius and Lindi (if you can call it a real duel) really had some meaning. It showed everyone (readers and characters alike) more of how Lindi is. She's too naïve and trusting. And the underwear thing was hilarious! :D

The runes candy scene was cute and slightly fluffy, but in a good way. Remus really does need to get around to telling her, though. I'm surprised he hasn't spilled already; he has a huge conscience that really loves to guilt the mickey out of him.

The Randolph couple was an excellent part of the story. It really makes one see how the wizarding world feels about werewolves. Poor Remus.

Keep up the awesome work, and update soon! Best wishes!

Author's Response: Gosh, I_LUV_MOONY, did you join SPEW? ;-) So, you think arrogant berk Sirius is funny, eh? *hehe* I'm glad you found some humor in the chapter. I need things to start getting darker, and they are, but it is still the nature of the Marauders to be amuzing, if I read them right, so thank you for that. Dear wonderful Remus doesn't always live up to his own expectations of himself and then, as you say, he guilt trips in a huge way. Poor, poor Remus... Thank you so much for such a great review. I will try not to disappoint you with the next chapter. I'm trying, though it is coming slowly. There are some complicated things in it I really want to get right, so it will probably be a little while. What's new, eh? @.@ *blush* Hopefully not too terribly long. I will definitely try. :).

Name: Little_Mini_Kimi (Signed) · Date: 10/07/07 21:00 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
You should add more chapters to this

Author's Response: Thank you, Little_Mini_Kimi. I think I will. ;)

Name: Eaving (Signed) · Date: 10/07/07 13:22 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
I am loving this story so much! Loyal reader here! Whenever I get the e-mail that this has been updated, I stop everything to go read it.

Author's Response: Thank you, Eaving! I'm really glad to know it. I wish I could get you those e-mails a little more frequently. I think I'm testing some readers' loyalty with the lack of updates, but it is more important that I don't disappoint you when they do come. I will certainly try not to. Thanks for letting me know you are reading.

Name: Gin_Drinka (Signed) · Date: 10/07/07 11:47 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
I'm glad to see Lily's coming back a little. Can't wait for the J/Lness to kick in. And for the challenge, that'll be extremely interesting. I supose he'll be telling her soon. I wish I didn't have a bad feeling about this. By the way, I think you did a great job incorporating DH into this,

Author's Response: Thank you, Gin_Drinka. Lily and James might not actually start dating until 7th year but I can't wait until then to have them interact at all. That would be rather unrealistic, I think; so yes, she'll be popping into the picture from time to time. :) You have a bad feeling? I wish I could offer you comfort, but alas, I can't. No spoilers allowed! ;) I'm glad the tidbits from DH worked for you. I was afraid they might seem too abrupt since I haven't had a chance to incorporate them into the previous chapters. Someday, I hope to build them up a bit more smoothly. But for now, thank you. I really appreciate the review.

Name: muggler180 (Signed) · Date: 10/06/07 21:52 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
really good chapter. I can't believe how close Lindi came to finding out

Author's Response: Thank you, muggler180. I don't think the Marauders can believe how close she came without her even realizing it. Of course, I think they think she's a bit clueless in some ways. <.< *hehe*

Name: paddy_prongsie (Signed) · Date: 10/06/07 15:22 · For: Shining Light in the Growing Darkness
hey... buck up soon... i want to know who wins de bet an im secretely hoping that james wil go bald for a whole day !! pl let it be like that !!

Author's Response: *bucks up* :D Poor James! Do you really want him to be traumatized? LOL His ego could definitely use it, couldn't it? We'll just have to see if Lindi has her game face on that day. (Actually, I know if she does, of course.) I'll try to let you in on the secret soon. Thank you, paddy_prongsie.

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