This story is amazing. I've just submitted my first Bill-centric story, and I've been a little bit insecure about writing about Bill, a character I barely see on MNFF. I absolutely love your version of Bill-- he seems like a fun, real person, like someone I'd love to hang out with.

I also liked the line about him having felt pro-active in Egypt-- I always wondered what it must be like for Bill to quit being a cursebreaker to work at a bank.

I love this sentence: Lightning bolts of enjoyment fired in Bill's limbic system, and it wasn't until he heard Fleur giggle that he realized he was whimpering happily. This bit's brilliant, too: His reputation as a debonair, chivalrous rake was teetering on a knife's edge right now. Though I think a rake is usually a villainous but sexy scoundrel-- which isn't usually compatible with 'chivalrous.' But Bill's special, so whatever...

Fleur overhearing Bill's nightmare was a nice touch. The idea of her knowing more about Bill than he knows she knows is an interesting twist.

I really like the difference between the way Bill deals with the idea of danger around every corner-- wanting to take action about everything-- and Fleur's way, adapting herself to the situation. A lot of times, when people write stories about the relationship between minor characters, they don't flesh out the personalities of the characters, but I like the way you've done this.

Your descriptive skills are really mind-blowingly beautiful. I can't even cite a specific passage because they're all so pretty.

"You are an 'orrid Breetish oaf." Hehe. ^_^ I also really liked it when Fleur said that she loved Bill, and Bill simply said, "I say." Your version of Bill and Fleur are impossibly cute, without being too deep and serious or too mushy and fluffy.

Great job!

Wow. The best story I've read so far. Extremely well written, lovely idea:)

by the way in my last reveiw it was meant to be "keep up the great work. Rose" just so you didn't think I was congradulating myself on leaving a good reveiw!

That was lovely. I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks!!

That was magnificent! So brilliantly written... And we all know that that's what will happen... P.S. Might you review my stories? Thanks!