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Reviews For Yours To Break

Name: BrokenPromise (Signed) · Date: 03/06/12 20:17 · For: one-shot
Beatifully written and very sad, although I did notice quite a few errors with spelling/grammar.
'How dare them' should be 'How dare they.'
'I had almost began to believe' should be either 'I had almost begun to believe' or 'I almost began to believe.'
'I still fill the same for you' should be 'I still feel the same for you.'
'do women not want to be pursued.' should end with a question mark.
'my very sole was taken down' should be 'my very soul was taken down.'
However, mistakes aside, I really liked this. Hermione was not OOC to me at all. I felt that the bit about his brother's wedding was slightly irrelevant, but it was well explained. It was very sad though and like another reviewer, I would suggest re-categorising it to Dark/Angsty. But I really really thought that it was very lyrical and absolutely beautiful.

Name: Luna_Loves_the_Moon (Signed) · Date: 02/28/09 22:20 · For: one-shot
Wahhhhhh! sadness! very well written, but so saaaad!

Name: malfoy_felton (Signed) · Date: 08/19/08 10:35 · For: one-shot
this is truly beautiful. It is amazing that you compiled all of this thought and created a mind-set that hermione herself would have had. You definently captured the greatest aspects of hermione and her personality to write something that fits her so well. Great, great, great job! :D

Author's Response: thank you, thank you, thank you =D

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/02/08 1:22 · For: one-shot
I really sympathise with Hermione in this story. Belivieng someone is yours only to find out you never ahd them. While Ron taking another girl to the wedding seems far fetched her reaction seems so normal to me. You said that mabey Hermione was over reacting but she's a girl regardless, i do think it might have taken more then a simple overheard convesation but to me it seems like the drop that spilled the glass. I do think she might be a bit over dramatic prefering he was dead becasue i would think she still values the friendship but it was a good story over all. You really managed to capture the essence of a heart break.

Author's Response: thank you for being such a thorough reviewer. You're right that it is the last drop it took to spill the water from the glass. I've said before that this is based on an experience in my own life and that's exactly what it was. Little thing, after little thing, until it finally hit me square in the face. And it's not that she wishes he was dead; It's that it feels that way to her but because of the circumstances surrounding the situation she's not allowed to be upset, cry, be hurt in public and must stay composed for the masses (so to speak). and if he were actually dead, she'd be allowed to feel how she felt openly and no one would think anything of it.rnrnsorry for the extensive response...but thanks again for the review. your opinion is really good to hear. =)

Name: thesmart1 (Signed) · Date: 05/06/08 19:59 · For: one-shot
i like it but..... couldn't you have ended it happily??

Author's Response: sorry it was based on real life and the real story didn't end happily...

Name: moldy999 (Signed) · Date: 01/13/08 19:30 · For: one-shot
dont worry about it, its just its about 2am im overtired overworked and sick to death of people killing off ron or hermione, very deep, yes i know hermione isnt that hormonal seriously ive seen worse *shudders* seriously its not gd when u walk in on your 2 best friends kissing, i stay away from them at alll costs now mostly because of the fact that they were both female

Name: moldy999 (Signed) · Date: 12/14/07 6:02 · For: one-shot
im confuzed.. i agree with u rewriting it

Author's Response: im sorry

Name: Vicster (Signed) · Date: 11/04/07 20:36 · For: one-shot
i thought it was very intresting (in a good way!) i liked how deep it was! very emotional and full of meaning ;]

Author's Response: thank you =)

Name: HowWonderfulLifeIs (Signed) · Date: 02/26/07 0:23 · For: one-shot
That was so intense. It seemed like it would be simple to quote any line of it. Amazing. So deep.

Author's Response: wow, thanks =)

Name: Elissy (Signed) · Date: 10/21/06 9:25 · For: one-shot
I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT! You are a VERY talented writer. I'm really looking forward to reading other things by you.

Author's Response: wow, thanks! =)

Name: lilywink (Signed) · Date: 07/24/06 17:53 · For: one-shot
Ron still likes Hermione right??? Right??
I mean there meant to be together right?? *breaks down in sobs*

Author's Response: oh dear, im sorry...i didn't mean for u to break down in sobes...

Name: hufflepuffgal (Signed) · Date: 05/15/06 18:01 · For: one-shot
I enjoyed this story, but I liked 'I was a famous child witch or wizard better'.
Anywho... I did enjoy it.

Author's Response: thanks yeah, i like the funny stuff better myself too...this is just something i did when i was depressed oneday...thanks for coming and trying my other fic out though =)

Name: obsessedwithron (Signed) · Date: 04/18/06 21:29 · For: one-shot
Okaaaaaaaaaay...I'm a sucker for happy endings. This does not have a happy ending...BOOHOOBOOHOOBOOHOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: i know i like happy endings myself but i was terribly depressed when i wrote this one, sorry =/

Name: Adelfore Flamell (Signed) · Date: 04/07/06 12:47 · For: one-shot
Very very beautiful. I alsmost resembles a poem. it might be a bit OOC for hermione, but it is ok. It connects real life in a way we can understand. We know ron and hermione, and through this, know how she would feel in this situation. very well done!!

Author's Response: thanks for the review and taking the time to express your opinions =)

Name: TheEvilBroomstick (Signed) · Date: 12/30/05 7:56 · For: one-shot
*tear* it really intrudes on real life (Not too sure if I used that right.. couldn't think of any other word lol) anyways, very sad story, I liked it, 10/10

Author's Response: i'd say that was used right...because it does intrude on real life...it started out as real life and then i altered it to work in the potter world...i'm glad you liked it =)

Name: Hermione Weasley_Ginny Potter (Signed) · Date: 12/27/05 7:26 · For: one-shot
this story is so well written, it never fails to make me cry. im serious, just the words "my heart was yours to break and you will never know" really got me going. beautiful story!

Author's Response: i'm sorry it makes you cry, but i'm glad that you understand it...this story is a torn out part of my being...lol, wow, sorry for the dramatics...glad you liked it =)

Name: Not_so_dead_Prewit (Anonymous) · Date: 11/19/05 11:14 · For: one-shot
Thanks a lot for your help! Lynn's first Chapter is up!!!! Yay! But the prob is that everything that was written in italic or bold, turned to normal, and in the description of the story, none of the paragraphes are accepted, so it's just horrible big clump of writing. Do you have any idea how we can fix that? Again thanks for your help on submitting the story! When are you gonna publish the continuation of DoP? Well, hope to hear from you! :-D

Author's Response: I sent you an email in response to your questions. I hope you got it! =)

Name: Not_so_dead_Prewit (Anonymous) · Date: 10/16/05 9:27 · For: one-shot
Hey! This story is so cute, but kinda depressing! I only just noticed this one (I reviewed the Drought of Prospicio as Rons_and_Hinkpunks_Rock, I'm now reviewing from my sisters acount)! I'm soo glad ur writing a sequal to DoP, so I hope you get some time outside of class to work! ;-P Um, my sister is trying to submit her own story, but we have no clue what one's supposed to write under: Post to Mailing list (what is a mailing list?)... We'd appreciate if you could clue us in on this code language... X_X Also, what does: OOC mean? I really have no clue about this stuff! OK, so can't wait for u to subnit the sequal! BB

Author's Response: sorry for the depressingness...OOC, means out of character...u don't have to put anything in 'post to mailing list' i don't even know what it is...it's not a required field....posting new fic's and chapters gets more comfortable and familiar the more you do it, if you need any help feel free to e-mail and i'll try my best to answer your questions...thanks for the review =)

Name: LilyPotter (Signed) · Date: 08/25/05 19:44 · For: one-shot
Oh...I got an Idea, I will write an alternative ending!!! "Suddenly, Ron burst in, says 'I love you', and they start snogging." The end :-) yeah, I know...I AM a genius, aren't I? ;-)

Author's Response: I wish=)

Name: LilyPotter (Signed) · Date: 08/24/05 22:55 · For: one-shot
sorry for clogging...again...*hands ice-cream cone with yellow and green sprinkles on the shape of 10's as a sorry*...but I wanted to know if you could write a sequal-type-thing to make us all feel better...

Author's Response: i like the cloggage...it boosts my ego, lol...sorry, this is based on real life, and there was no gushy happiness to fix the situation in real life so i'm sorry to say the situation will be left as is for this fic=/

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