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Name: Honorary_Marauderess (Signed) · Date: 03/04/08 17:22 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
please up date soon

the story is amazing ! i cant wait to find out what happens next

Name: xXRon_luverXx (Signed) · Date: 12/03/07 19:51 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
wow... blown away lol that was good!!!! but u must must must write anouther chapter or i might cry lol its starting to get susspensfull!!!!!!!!!! well i do like it but i dont like how lucius and siobhans relationship so far has been all about sex.... i mean they dont even like talk about anything they just... do it lol but i still thinks its good

Name: xXRon_luverXx (Signed) · Date: 12/02/07 20:58 · For: Chapter 8: Fulfillment
ok well i liked it... but im like 13 sooo... that was..... er interesting in a nasty way lol but i think you perfectly captured lucius's character so far... u made him still have his... well high self respect and arrogance but still showed his gentle, loving side... i loved it!!!

Name: LMGurl (Signed) · Date: 11/27/07 12:38 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations

Name: xoxomrshmalfoyxoxo (Signed) · Date: 11/25/07 22:16 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
ohh dear!! A cliffhanger!! Please update as fast as possible!!

Name: Karya (Signed) · Date: 11/24/07 21:00 · For: Chapter 10: Domination and Submission
OMG wow your such a good writer this is such a good story ur amazing

Name: heartthestrokes11 (Signed) · Date: 11/24/07 0:28 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
Great ending. It didn't drag on and on. It was subtle, not the long predictable endings that stories usually have.

Name: Narenlith (Signed) · Date: 11/19/07 21:11 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
PS! I couldn't stop reading your story. So now the time is 04:09 here in Sweden and I'm finally going to bed after some hours of fantastic reading.

Name: Narenlith (Signed) · Date: 11/19/07 21:06 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
I must say that your story actually have made me a fan of Lucius Malfoy, whom I didn't cared at all about before.
Furthermore, I find it most interesting to read about hogwarts and everything from another persons view. And it's really wonderful when all JKR's main characters are in your story as biparts, that creates the feeling of seeing what happens in the books from a different view and it gives deep to it all.
Love your way of writing and storytelling.

I really would love this piece to continue. It can't end there I want to know how it really ends.. I love Siobhan, she's the perfect mix of cool and kind.
Actually I'm hoping for a happy ending, I'm now cheering for Lucius.

Keep ut the great work!

Name: Narenlith (Signed) · Date: 11/19/07 20:58 · For: Chapter 1: Dangerous Attraction
I must say that your story actually have made me a fan of Lucius Malfoy, whom I didn't cared at all about before.
Furthermore, I find it most interesting to read about hogwarts and everything from another persons view. And it's really wonderful when all JKR's main characters are in your story as biparts, that creates the feeling of seeing what happens in the books from a different view and it gives deep to it all.
Love your way of writing and I really would want this piece to continue.

Name: loveginny (Signed) · Date: 11/14/07 20:39 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
Please don't let that be the end. I'm dying for more! You've done a great job with this story.

Name: dumblegrawp (Signed) · Date: 11/14/07 20:08 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
I loved it!

I've been addicted to it for quite some time, reading a chapter or two a night. Tonight I read five chapters. I just couldn't pull my eyes away!

I can't wait to hear the rest of the story!

Name: chyara (Signed) · Date: 11/07/07 5:14 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
lovely story... please update soon!

Name: Alexarama (Signed) · Date: 11/02/07 4:49 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
OMFG! lol

Name: beautyfades (Signed) · Date: 10/11/07 7:36 · For: Chapter 3: Of a Stranger
I loved this chapter. You did such a lovely job of portraying Potter and the whole detention scene, all together was absolutly adorable. I greatlt enjoyed it and the dialogue. Very good.

*Beauty Fades

Name: turtles_rock (Signed) · Date: 10/08/07 19:40 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
Update soon PLease!!!!!!!

Name: Fantasium (Signed) · Date: 09/25/07 13:56 · For: Chapter 20: Revisitations
Fanfiction is such a fine thing. A thing over which one can squeal and shout when it is first revealed in a secret LJ post (if one should be so privileged, I mean), but also a thing to which one can return, much later, to quietly ponder over its finer points while eating pear slices and enjoying a cup of Earl Grey.

You have got an unusually good chapter here, my love, in all senses, but most noticeably in the sense that it’s seamlessly written and thus very difficult to chop up into easily reviewable pieces. But I will try to start at the very beginning.

Yes, for a moment there you fooled me, and made me think that what I was so desperately hoping for had already happened, without more suffering and struggle. But as far as I’ve learned about your writing, you’re not in the habit of taking easy shortcuts, so I wasn’t really surprised to find that Siobhan was only dreaming. It’s kind of cruel of you, you know, to show me exactly what I want Siobhan and Lucius to be, and then so mercilessly slap us back into reality. It’s effective though, and my sympathy for her is as strong and real and overwhelming as ever.

It was not a simple weariness of the hours, but of an age. She had never before understood the concept of eternity as she did now that her soul felt stretched across it, as if she had known the world since before her birth, and would suffer existence long beyond her death. The ticking of the second hand did nothing to cure her of the tedious trials of living. The rising sun renewed nothing. Meaning and purpose evaded her as she sought, with a tired spirit something, to live for, and found nothing.

…did I just quote all of that? Hm. It seems I did. I guess I really couldn’t help myself, seeing as it’s possibly the most beautiful thing you have ever written. Like, her soul stretched across eternity? How do you do it? How does your mind come up with these things? *sighs and is in awe* Only, in that very last sentence, the comma after ‘something’ needs to step back one word, I believe.

Those are two very interesting paragraphs you’ve written on immortality. It fits our HP-verse very well, with Voldemort and his cheating of death, Hallows, and such. I like the idea, the contrast, that a bad character like Voldemort has become immortal by evil deeds, while Lucius, also bad, has become immortal because of his ability to make a woman love and lust for him.

And, then… Ron and Hermione. The way you bring them back – together, as, if not a couple, then at least a team – is for some reason breaking my heart. I don’t know, perhaps I accidentally took a potion that turned me into a hardcore R/Hr shipper, but I’m getting a thrill simply from seeing them walking next to each other. Sigh.

It’s excellent, how you start the third scene of the story that reflects the end of the first – with the thought of Lucius’ death, and the one of Harry being alive.

For the first time since the war had begun, Siobhan had a deeply personal stake in the fight. […]Now, after the Lucius-ordeal and with Potter’s disappearance, they were a personal enemy.

Sometimes they’re quite alike, our OC’s. Maybe they were not exactly content with the parts they had been assigned to play in the world, but they had at least accepted them. And then a war breaks out, they meet people, and all of a sudden there is something to care about, something to fight for, something to make a difference. Perhaps they ought to have a chat sometime? Oh, wait, they already did, didn’t they? Well, a chat under less miserable circumstances, then.

LUCIUS! LUCIUS IS HERE! :D Ehm, yes, what was it that I said about returning to quietly ponder? Scratch that, because – just – I – LUCIUS! :D Now, to those of us who have read The Only Answer, this is just… gah, such a THRILL. Knowing what Lucius has done, what he’s thinking and feeling, and what he wants… Maybe you ought to mention the companion in your A/N? Because, without it this is excellent, but with it this part of the story is completely mind-blowing.

And when Siobhan walks down to the dungeons, and Lucius calls her name – oh, Jenna, the conversation between them, and the looks and the politeness and the underlying battle, it’s exactly what I’ve been wanting and waiting for. I want to slap Lucius for what he’s doing to Siobhan, but at the same time I’m grateful he’s doing something to win her back. Or, well, not win her back, but… um… reclaim his possession? Oh, if only Siobhan knew what he had done to help Harry… But Lucius won’t be telling her about that, will he? It would be a very easy way for him to regain her favour, but perhaps it’s not the kind of thing he would want to admit? Maybe he wouldn’t want Siobhan to know that he took such a risk for her, because that would be the same as telling her how much she actually means to him? I mean, he hints at it in the end of this chapter… but he’s still his arrogant self, and makes sure to end the conversation on his terms. He’s such a prick! And completely irresistible at the same time, of course. Sigh.

Okay. There. Now I have the right to say it: I’m DESPERATE for the next chapter! Stop torturing me like this! I NEED it! *displays severe withdrawal symptoms* This chapter was beyond excellent, but I can’t sit quietly and simply appreciate it, because I’m so busy CRAVING chapter 21! See, it’s all your fault!

Oh, and PS: I love you. =)

Name: chasing_willow (Signed) · Date: 09/25/07 4:36 · For: Chapter 19: In Want of a Distraction
"and his fingers closed around his wrist."

her wrist, maybe?

Name: chasing_willow (Signed) · Date: 09/25/07 3:29 · For: Chapter 17: Disillusionment
they’re warnings
(Replace: their)

Name: chasing_willow (Signed) · Date: 09/25/07 2:54 · For: Chapter 16: Rising Tides
Okay, scratch that - Severus is pure evil.
He would be fluffy evil too, if he ever showered.

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