Incredible! I loved it. Personally, I'm still wanting Lucius and Siobhan to be together. I felt so bad for her this chapter. She's really lost someone she cares for. I love her wit, though. Bruises on the knees... hehehe. Anyway, it was great to see the update. Keep writing, it's an amazing story.
I had never thought of Lucius in such a way... until now, of course. Soibhan seems extremely witty. Very good story.
nice,but no clue about what s going to happen next
"Friday lessons seemed to drag onward with all the speed of a dying Flobberworm"
hahah
that quote is Amazing!!!!
Poor Siobhan! I hope that she is able to come up with some idea to help get herself over the loss! She really needs a friend, and with Harry gone, there is no one around for her to run too. It was great to see this story updated. Cyns
oh i feel so bad for siobhan
this was a really good chapter
update soon!!
emma x x x
Awesome chapter. I especially loved it when Siobhan shoved Blaise away; the way she broke down like that made me feel very sympathetic to her. That comment she made to Pansy about her knees was very clever and witty. Anyway, loved everything about this chapter, every word, every happening, everything!
Just thought I'd let you know, as it seems neither your beta nor moderator has picked it up - the expression 'could care less' is actually 'couldn't care less' she couldn't care less if the stone was from the street... for example.. in other words it didn't matter to her that it may not have been valuable (from the street).. hope this has been a helpful criticism... Fabulous story by the way - no other faults found!!!
I think this is my favorite chapter yet, dear. :) I especially like Siobhan's wit. She's just fantastic, I don't know how many times I can say that. It just shows up constantly. I love the Pansy-Siobhan exchange. I nearly died laughing at that. *sniggers when looking back at it* Oh, I chose an instant gratification review, btw, Hope you're happy with that. :D I might come back and leave a better review later, though. :D Jenna, fantastic as usual. It's great, you're great, you're writing is great, Siobhan is great... So much greatness.
freak out
make up ur mind gal!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
you ROCK vaultiiee keep up the BRILLLIANTLY sexy stories and update soon!!
I think you have captured Lucius perfectly and you have created a real atmosphere
but what about harry?!?!?! i know this isnt tecniqually (how do you spell that word??) his story, but it is still his world and surely she must realise why lucius is being called?? i feel so sorry for her. its so mean.
i really like this story. its really well written and flows really nicely.
Dear, dear Jenna. How I have missed reviewing for thee. I’ve been reading Sins since my last review which was chapter what - 15? 14? 16? Somewhere around there. And even though that’s not many chapters without a review from me skipped, I still feel unfaithful to Sins. It’s simply unfair how much control you have over me using Siobhan and her story. Now I feel the need to review every chapter I missed in order to make it up to Siobhan. Dang it. I’ll have a guilty feeling everywhere I go. *sigh* Enough blubber. Time to get to the meat.
Now, me being the First Mate of HMS Tiramisu and the dedicated shipper I am, I was very pleased to see that Siobhan is in the throes of despair over Lucius. Their relationship kept the story going, and it kept revealing a darker side to what once was a lust-filled free-for-all. Now that it’s all been thrown in the open and the smut has been wiped clean, what do we have to keep us tied to the story besides your fantastic writing and our dedication to Siobhan? Surprise! The Lucius/Siobhan dynamic! While we are getting snippets of Harry/Siobhan from unexpected sources [which, hopefully, will continue. >.>], the Lucius/Siobhan relationship spirals into its climax. I say this because - while the side plots are anything but romance, the focus is the relationship. I look forward to what you have in store next.
I looked for nitpicks everywhere - and unfortunately for my review - there was none found without me being such a picky person that it would seem incredibly unfair to point it out. So, you’re off the hook. ;)
I do have something I would like to bring up with you: Miss Pansy Parkinson. You can handle her character so well. She’s nasty, she’s feisty, she’s a downright b*tch. You made it so marvelously clear that she wants to bed Draco, and that she hates Siobhan for thinking she did just that. Oh, how I wanted to slap her. You’ve heard this many times before from me, but I get such a connection with your characterization that it is absolutely unreal. ““Filthy,” Pansy sneered. “That’s what you are. A filthy little slag.” Pansy’s insults are so… imaginative. XD We know Pansy isn’t the brightest bulb in the box - who in their right mind would like Draco? - but she’s not afraid to get filthy with her words. Scandalous, my dear. XD
Siobhan. How I love thee and your dialogue. “I’d like to know why you’re entitled to an explanation.” I love it when there is dialogue between Siobhan and someone else because it’s always an interesting affair, and it keeps me very much entertained. I just thought I might as well go ahead and throw that in there. She’s the epitome of awesome.
You know I love Sins just as much as I love Tiramisu. It’s got everything you need in a story - action, betrayal, discovery, smut. I’m just leaving another fan boy review. Please excuse me. [And this is shorter than my typical review because - well - the chapter is shorter than normal ;)]
Oh my god, this story is so good! A bit sordid perhaps, but great nonetheless! I can't wait for the next chapter! :D
This is the most emotional chapter of Sins so far ... and in a good way, Jenna. Siobhan's disillusionment with Lucius is almost heartbreaking - because even though Siobhan is devious, she is a strong girl. It's almost as though she herself is being used in the process of using others to get to her now ex-lover Lucius - even though the situation is partly her fault, I can't help but feel sorry for her.
“Yeah?” Pansy asked, and Siobhan heard a tremble in her voice. “So, is that why you spent all last term warming up to him? And then spending the holiday at his house?”
Pansy can be extremely thick sometimes, can't she? If only she could have pieced two and two together and figured out who Siobhan was after ... but the plot can still take unexpected twists that I can't even fathom.
And speaking of twists ...
She let out a troubled sigh and rested her face in her hands, wondering whether or not she could bring herself to turn Lucius Malfoy in for his crimes.
Nice cliffhanger ending, dear! The story is sounding more and more like a romantic thriller. The chapter ending is really thriller-esque, and I can barely wait to read the next installment. Good luck!
- Mini.
