who did the weasleys,harry,nevil,and luna parent or gardian die?

Let me first say you're welcome and my pleasure for reading this earlier; I loved doing it, you know that. Anyway, to the chapter.

It really is wonderful. And much better now, incidentally. There are several bits I didn't really see before, and lots that's new and adds a lot to the heart of the chapter.

She shifted uncomfortably in the armchair that she’d drifted off in and tried to repress the urges that the dream had awoken within her. This is a very reasonable reaction, to be sure. Hee.

Only a fool, she thought, would seek immortality. This is a lovely bit of philosophy. Hmm.

None of the Weasleys looked like they’d suffered news that a family member had been killed and replaced by a Death Eater. The nonchalance of this line is evident behind Siobhan's tone.

I love that you validated Siobhan's curiosity about the trio, in her own eyes, as a welcome distraction. Her concern is very sweet.

Yay for Ginny's infamous hexing. That was a good detail to add, and I love Ginny, so hooray for that too.

“Some people have even been eyeing me warily like they still believe I’m Bellatrix Lestrange in a red wig.” This is a very Ron-esque line, and goes with the intensity of the situation with a kind of easy irony, if you know what I mean. It's a lovely line, and a good reaction to Siobhan's query.

Siobhan's guilty feelings are a valid reaction to her discovery that Harry's okay for the present. Poor girl... it's not her fault if some random Death Eater she's never met finishes Harry off, but it seems right that she would feel that way. It's interesting that it works the other way, too. That Harry could be Siobhan's hero as well as everyone else's. It wouldn't seem like Siobhan to do that, unless she had some sort of personal stake in the results of the fight like she does.

Her senses about her again, she began to wonder what the reason for his presence in the castle could be. A very good thing to wonder, and sensible of Siobhan to wonder it, as well.

she didn’t regret her lack of ability to be able to think like a group of Dark wizards with a thirst for world domination It's sad that JK sometimes makes all Slytherins this way, but it's also happy that Siobhan isn't that way. This chapter almost accentuates her normalcy, as brilliant as she is, showing she's just the ordinary girl she's capable of being... but in a good, interesting-person sort of way.

Goodness. Their encounter was completely breathtaking, just as Siobhan felt! It must have been terrible for her to endure his presence, but dreamlike, too. You've captured their reactions very well. The moment where Lucius lets down his guard is priceless, and so desperate. I melted a little, then.

Siobhan's little smile at Pansy is so her, it seems. Poor Pansy, so easily thwarted.

And Lucius's cunning, in letting Siobhan know just what he'd done without actually saying anything! That's all I can say. !. It's perfect. As is the way you've added so much to this chapter - I adore it, and you. Brilliant job.

Author's Response: Not much to say, except thank you, dear. :) And, I left in the "speculation" bit because I felt it was sort of important to how Siobhan sees things, and Kasey said it wasn't confusing and it was much easier than taking it out. Thanks for your help, again, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Oh, things are heating up agian rather quickly!

Well, well, well, the manipulative snake is back ... And I'm still feeling a little sorry for Siobhan. She knows what kind of a man he is, but just cannot let go. Does Narcissa know about her husband's affairs? And if she does, does she even care?

Lucius, Siobhan and their 'relationship' is still intriguing. And Lucius is as slippery as ever ... almost perfect. Getting into the Great Hall without arousing suspicion or attracting unwanted attention? Hard to do, without possessing an Invisibility Cloak of course.

I'm waiting for a Lucius-centric chapter to resolve many things and shed some light on him. In any case, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, now that my HP fan fic obsession has returned.

- Mini.

Wowow! LOVE this chapter. The part with Blaise was written beautifully...I almost felt like crying for her for a moment! Powerful writing. I look forward to more. :)

Still reading!

Just a small brief review. That’s the thing with chaptered fan fiction; I never seem to be able to tear myself away, and it’s so much easier to write reviews in the review box when just passing by with an appreciative squee, and then on to the next chapter.

But I found a small nitpicky flaw, so I thought I should mention it - “I’m sure Narcissa would abhor the idea of hosting a dinner in your favour in celebration of your eighteenth birthday” Lucius mused aloud, - very small, as you see. It’s just something that you pick up after reading for a few hours. Cough.

I do like Lucius in this, and occasionally I see a lot of Jenna in the script. I know it’s just for fun, but every so often it lapses into the … I don’t know? Informative tone? I like it though, the little details. Almost as if she pauses to observe.

Siobhan’s developing quite a bit, and I do see a lot of resemblance to you in her character, which isn’t surprising. We all seem to put a little bit of ourselves into a character, which is understandable, it’s our OC. Duh. I love seeing how, though, we give the character it’s own personality separate to ours. I like the books & robes/bathrobes details.

Oh, the eyebrow ;). This has been my favourite chapter so far, by miles.

So, I’m a huge fan on very distinctly canon!style writing. Probably because my own attempts are so far removed from JKR’s particular style. I do think you have your own style, but it’s a good change from the usual, “So this is the random protagonist I’m inserting for the love of it. And by the way she’s cool m’kay”. So huzzuh for believable characters.

"Sorry," Siobhan shrugged uncaringly before sitting down.
McGonagall stared at her.

I’m always hesitant to criticise when I’m not perfect myself, but maybe the second sentence should be attached to the first, instead of being a new paragraph. I think that works better than before the dialogue, because to me, there’s something about reprimanding!McGonagall that always requires a new line for dialogue.

"What are you all chatting about?" … Draco had in store for her that evening.
And again, there needs to be paragraphing. I deleted the guts of it for space purposes, but it’s right before the break before the paragraph on Draco’s inexpertness. Because I know you probably took great delight in writing that and would know where it is >.>.

Speaking of which, I love your not so casual hints about his lack of skill. This - and she felt his already open mouth collide with the bottom half of her face. - would have to be the best one, though.

Lucius sure as hell better be worth this. Interesting. Leaves me wondering whether or not she means in her dreams, while with Draco, or whether she’s actually going to be with Lucius. And now I have to reboot my computer to continue enjoying this!

And by enjoying, I mean, deleting the other review, submitting this one, and saving your page :).

Alright, I finally got around to it. And, I know I won’t be stopping anytime soon. Only parents or something equally as persistant will keep me away. (it turned out to be two days of cold, btw)

Can I just say first that Siobhan has amusing thoughts? Not only because of the way she thinks about him, but because of the way she sees Narcissa through her eyes. And this, undoubtedly, is a Pre-HBP Lucius. Which is always preferred, in my mind, in light of the new book. But yes, I definitely like Siobhan already (I’m getting used to pronouncing her name correctly in my head) and can already sense the type of relationship they’re out for. Which has nothing to do with the other Magnificent story I’ve read on a certain community. Not at all.

I do find it interesting that she refers to herself as a girl, though. I think she’s a lot older than 17, the fact she’s considering herself to be old enough to go after a man 25 her elder goes without saying. And, the mind games she plays with Draco aren’t that of a silly 17 year old girl… somehow, even if not physically, she’s very experienced.

“Well, Miss. Murphy — each of us had a parent or guardian murdered last week, do you mind us having a little chat about it?”

That line was probably the only thing that really stuck out for me. The rest of it was pretty smooth, but the line is a little harsh. I know Ginny has a bristly side that comes out as a shield, but I would expect her to be a little more subtle about it.

And that’s about it. Huzzuh for finally starting to read this!

brilliant. that was great. you're excellent. [:

Dear God!


I can't stop reading...