That was funny! I'm still laughing!...I love it..funniest poem i have ever read!
Haha...funny! Yeah, it did seem like the Marauders actually wrote this!
Awww, I'm not sure whether to laugh or be disturbed, so I compromise *shakes head dissaprovingly and laughs*
LOLZ I LOVED IT! It's fuinny! Wee!!! Marauders and poetry make a great mix!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
LOLZ I LOVED IT! It's fuinny! Wee!!! Marauders and poetry make a great mix!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hahaha, amazing! I sent it to my enemy that me and my friends call Snivellus(she really, hates it) I thought she was going to kill me. Me and my friends act some what like the Marauders, so I really injoyed this, amazing really!
I love Severus. But this was still really funny. James and Sirius are such goofballs. Good Job!
Lol. It actually does sound like something the Marauders (especially Sirius or James) could have written!
Heh... I'm guessing that Lupin had to correct their spelling and grammar, and Peter just giggled. *laugh* ~Katie-kun
PS: Please check out my poetry!
SO FUNNY! I LOVE IT!
Author's Response: :)
This is so FUNNY! I was laughing almost all the way through! Other than including some more details about their torturing Snape, I dont think there's anything you could have done to make this better. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks!
*snigger* *snort* *sniggersnortsnigger* I *snigger* think that *snort* this *sniggersnort* portrays exactly how the marauders feel abou Snivellus! *sniggersnort*
Author's Response: I'm glad. That is what I was aiming for.
This is cute! I like the last line about how they will cherish their hate for him.
Author's Response: Me too :)
10! I love this poetry.. it sounds like they are the ones that wrote this...!!! Nice one!
I dunno, I really don't. The first stanza was probably the best, but that probably could have been done better as well. I think the main problem was the meter and flow. If I can't think of any other way you could have said it, I'd be fine. But most of the time I can see a way to make it shorter -- or longer -- to better fit the meter. For instance, Don't try to deny it, for you know it's true. This could be shortened to "Don't deny it, for it's true" for the meter's sake, and it's still saying the same thing. When you write poetry, you have to work on things like that, or it makes the poem seem mediocre.
i don't know much about poetry, but i really love your ode to snivellus. it will hold a place in my favorites section forever.
Alas - I found the childish insulting nature of this poem amusing! Here you have your traditional rhyming poem with a hint of grease and trouble, it was great.
I found it became a little bumpy after your superb opening stanza, but you picked up the pattern nearing the end. I would have liked to hear more of the Maurauders exploits in their on going torure of Severus, I particularly liked your mentioning of the chair!
I can almost vision them writing something like this, though no doubt Moony would be a little ruffled by it all! Well done - Good Job!
