Reviewer: Dragen
Date: 06/06/06 8:08
Chapter: I Spy With My Little Eye

Now you got to be kidding me Tom Riddle a teacher, have you gone mad, he is a bad gay... will it's your story and as you said in your AN, we have to wait and see if he is Voldemort...

Will I hope that Draco never be able to become a third tier (Can you tell me what one of those are, I know it most be a high ranking witch or wizard, apart for that I don't know much) will make him a better person... but I don't know. Just have to wait and see.


Author's Response: Third tier is the pinacle of the AU's wizarding society. They are allowed to parttake of the elixer of life and to join Turpin's immortal court.

As for Riddle, being a bad guy never stopped them from becoming teachers in JKR's universe. Things aren't so different in mine ;)

Reviewer: Dragen
Date: 06/06/06 7:37
Chapter: Orientation

First off Harry Green, right more like Harry Potter... I don't know much about how the class thing work... but I'm happy that Hermione is in Class 1 and not 2... as this make Malfoy unhappy... which makes me happy.



I don't know about how they shorted in how powerful they are but making Draco 2rd powerful and Harry Green more powerful then Draco, is a good idea...



Last thing I do hope you do being in Ginny, I'm not happy that she won't be a Weasley... but as long as you put her in there somewhere, and romantically linked with Harry, then I don't mind what family is in...



Almost forgot, what happened to Harry to make him become Green??? Please keep up the good work, and update offten.


Author's Response: Green = the name the Group Home (orphanage) gave him and his sister. He is incognito. His parents don't know he is alive and he doesn't know who they are. There is an over-arcing evil plot behind it all. :)

Reviewer: Dragen
Date: 06/06/06 7:10
Chapter: A Rebel at Heart

What were you thinking of killing Harry and his brother, I just hope he's alive somewhere, as Lily and James do need some good news... but a good story anyhow.

Author's Response: Killing them? Me? <.< Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Dragen
Date: 06/06/06 7:00
Chapter: Prologue

Nicely done... can't wait to see what happens next... I hope there is Harry/Ginny love in here somewhere!

Author's Response: Love, love, I'm a bit light on love in here, but no comment on Ginny.

Reviewer: fantasygirl7
Date: 06/04/06 5:38
Chapter: Withholding

yay. nice. the story is really coming along. well done. hope to see the next chapter soon

Author's Response: Thanks :)

Reviewer: purplepills
Date: 06/01/06 12:03
Chapter: Withholding

I wanna tell you that I absolutely love your story. It's really nice but there's only one thing: it seems to be crammed with so many different story-lines. But its good to see things from different people's perspective. I really like the reapers' idea, they're like sort of Death-eater-dementor combined and Harry-Draco friendship is great. You know, I wish you'd give more space to these kids. Anyway, nice work!!

Author's Response: I hope the many plotlines aren't too confusing! Next chapter is almost no kids, but the chapter after that is back at school and becomes all kids for the most part. :)

Reviewer: Her My Own EE
Date: 05/27/06 23:57
Chapter: Withholding

Lupin & Tonks, one of my favorite cannon pairs. If you can work them in as such it would be brilliant. If not I already think this story is brilliant.

Author's Response: Romance, when do these busy people have time for romance? ;)

Reviewer: Her My Own EE
Date: 05/27/06 23:31
Chapter: Rat in a Trap

Don't know how I missed the update.... Anyway great chapter as always too much to comment pn it all. My favorite part was Draco's party. Off to read the next Chapter!

Author's Response: :) Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: FuNnYcIdE
Date: 05/24/06 20:35
Chapter: Withholding

Wow, pretty much one of the most amazing fics I've ever read. Absolutely astounding!

Keep On Writing;)

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I hope you continue to enjoy it.

Reviewer: HJaneWeasley
Date: 05/24/06 16:54
Chapter: Withholding

I love this story!!!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: nuw255
Date: 05/24/06 15:55
Chapter: Withholding

Hooray! It's always nice to see a new chapter up, and, as usual, you've done an excellent job. I'm going to assume that the lie Dumbledore told to Sirius was that James already knew, is that right? That's what I gathered from the conversation with Melinda, anyway.

I'm dying to know what Dumbledore's plan is, and what happened to Snape. Oh, and Fred and George (I almost forgot). Keep up the excellent work, but please try to update more often. You're killin' us!

Author's Response: You have excellent reading comprehension. Yes, the lie Albus told was about how much James knew. Plans, and updates all around next chapter. It's a good 10000 words. :D

Reviewer: GreyLady
Date: 05/24/06 15:12
Chapter: Withholding

I nearly had a heart attack when I saw that you had updated (the good kind of heart attack). Is there a good kind, though, lol? First off, I adore the little "excerpts" at the beginning of each chap. They sound so...I dunno...impressive. They make me feel a sort of vague repungance toward your AU wizarding society, besides putting forth some thought-provoking ideas, even if they are sometimes perverse ideas compared to canon.

Professor Umbridge...nice touch. :) I'm quite proud that I guessed that Umbridge wrote the letter before you mentioned it. *shrugs* "She envisioned her brother going to the toad they had teaching the less promising children, Professor Umbridge, and hexing her pink-cardigan into choking her unless she moved his sister back to the real classes." That was MOST amusing, as was "Tell me someone murdered the Hippogriff that ran me over." You are really great at interjecting humor. :)

Melinda is a wondeful OC. She seems well thought-out and I enjoy reading her. Your imagery is also really pleasant to read because it's not too flowery. Umm. there's was loads more I wanted to say that I can't remember, sorry. Is there any chance for some Remus/Ton--oops, sorry--Nyt? *looks hopeful*
I'll leave you with some light concrit. Let me know if I'm too critical. Thanks.

"Leave the baby first-years alone you brainwashed, nutter."
I felt that the comma was unnecessary in that sentence.

'A small lie could often set the mind at ease." I would have either un-italisized that comment or made "could" "can" to make it seem more like a thought.

"Are you sure about this," Was there supposed to be a question mark after she says this? Its absence threw me off for a moment.

Thank you for a wonderful update (finally)!

Author's Response: Hi GreyLady!

I'm so glad you like the chapter toppers. I often put important things in there and then think that I shouldn't that people probably don't really read them. <.<

Yay, I'm glad you liked the humor, and there's a bit more Umbridge next chapter.

Melinda is fun, spunky, and not always right (as she is soon to be informed). Remus Nyt... <.<... >.> I can't comment on romantic entanglements but they are in a lot of the next chapter.

*makes note of constructive comments* Thanks for the thoughtful review!

Reviewer: lantis222
Date: 05/24/06 8:51
Chapter: Withholding

I just wanted to tell you how much I like this story. It is so inventive and I can't wait to find out what happens next. Try not to stay away so long, this is definately one of my all time favorite stories.

Author's Response: I have 2.5 chapters written that aren't posted at the moment! *is excited* Thanks for reading and letting me know you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: bkwrm0502
Date: 05/24/06 7:37
Chapter: Withholding

Well, finally! I was very glad to hear that you'd updated...and now I got to read it, lol. Let's see..excellent, as usual. I'm assuming that Dumbledore lied about Peter still being prisoner, so Peter must have escaped. Which is a shame, but whatever, at least Dumbledore knows now about what happened. Qudditch camp sounds like FUN (well, for me, anyway, I would love to play Quidditch). I wish I could spend a summer there. I have a feeling that this letter Harry got from Wood might influence him later, but I'm not quite sure how. I highly doubt you'll make Harry run away to Antarctica. Is Isobel getting a pink note important? I mean, I know you added it in for a reason, but I just don't see how Harry's sibling's wizardry ranking is a key point. We'll see. I also liked how you threw in a mention of Umbridge. That was amusing. Speaking of character mentions, Nyt does sound like she has the same metamorphagus (I know I spelled that wrong) abilities that Tonks has. Does that mean we'll see some Remus/Nyt action sometime soon? Can you tell that I'm really into the whole romance aspect of things? So, did the spell at the end backfire on him? Or did it go according to plan? Hmm...anything else? Oh, right, I better mention that I wonder what Melinda's assignment from Dumbledore is. And how Snape, Fred, and George are all doing. And James and Lily too, for that matter. Can't wait for the next chapter...I'll give you maybe a week before I start bugging you about it.

Author's Response: Dumbledore did not lie about having Peter in custody.


And Isobel is important in several key ways. She draws attention to the other tiers of education. Ignorance can be a tool of oppression. Educating 20 witches and wizards a birth year is leaving a lot of people without knowledge.


As for the folks you're curious about... next chapter :)

Reviewer: TheVault
Date: 05/23/06 23:48
Chapter: Withholding

She took out the comma mallet on yours, too, eh? >.> Excellent, excellent work. I'm dying here. I think the scene between Dumbledore and Melinda was my favourite... okay, and... um, who is Nyt? Am I supposed to know her, because I have some sneaking suspicions that she's not entirely 'original, but I might just be crazy. I like the Harry/Draco relationship, and I think you should stop worrying so much about the Quidditch -- this worked excellent. I feel bad about Isobel and the 'pink slip'. *sigh* Well, I guess as long as she doesn't go the way of Siobhan? >.> *snickers and hugs Bridget before running off*

Author's Response: Jan and her Mallet are quite important to this fic *nods* Melinda and Albus are an interesting pair of conspirators. Bart isn't exactly going to like it though. He has good instincts for when his wife is not being competely honest with him. Siobhan? :X

Reviewer: Ice Nine IV
Date: 05/23/06 22:45
Chapter: Withholding

This is really one of my favorite on going fics, and the wait was long but entirely worth it. Love Capt. Nyt, I had geussed that one, but was still glad to see it through. The whole Prison ship idea is brilliant and very haunting. You're still leaving us hanging on Snape which I was sad about. Anyway keep up the awesome work, can't wait for the next installment.

Author's Response: Snape was supposed to make this chapter, but the ship appeared when I was trying to write a prison and it took a bit more space and time that a plain old building would have. Snape should definitely make it to the next chapter. Thanks for the kind review. :)

Reviewer: MorganRay
Date: 05/22/06 21:37
Chapter: Chocolate Frogs and Crimson Dragons

Fred! Ak. That made me so sad, and yet, your story is moving nicely. Peter sold the children, well, I thought something sneaky might be coming from Peter. I enjoy how you're still keeping to canon, yet, you're changing it to make an original story. Kudos for originality.

Author's Response: I love Fred and George... and well most HP characters for one reason or another. Thanks for the kind review.

Reviewer: HJaneWeasley
Date: 05/21/06 20:38
Chapter: Rat in a Trap

I love this story! You seriously create your own "alternate universe" and it's so absorbing! I'm not afraid to admit- I'm terrified of your reapers. I had trouble going to sleep last night because I was thinking about this- not a bad thing. It means your writing is convincing! I'm very impressed!

Author's Response: Wow! That's terribly cool :) They're meant to be scary. Thanks for the kind review.

Reviewer: ilyena87
Date: 05/15/06 15:21
Chapter: Rat in a Trap

seems like a good story but was it really necessary to make james brown haired and brown eyed? he has black hair, the same as harry, and his eyes are hazel

Author's Response: That was me channeling the movies when writing instead of the books. Apologies. It's an error that I shall go back and fix.

Reviewer: MorganRay
Date: 05/10/06 14:07
Chapter: A Rebel at Heart

This is an interesting story. I don't think I've ever seen Harry Potter this way. Your intro chapter was very good, but this chapter is what really caught me and brought me into your story. I don't think this was a weepy chapter, as you called it. I thought it was a very informative, insightful, and a very descriptive chapter overall. Your Sirius is still canon, even though this is AU. I like how you're keeping much of the character's canon, even though it is AU. I can't wait to read the rest. I can't really think of too many criticisms except don't forget to keep explaining your AU world. You don't want to confuse the reader, but you have been careful in that area.

Author's Response: I'm glad you've enjoyed the story so far, and I hope you continue to.

Peace!

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