Wow I loved it so much!! I really don't know what else to say!! It made me cry! It was wonderful
Wow, she says softly. Wow. It was H/Hr ... and I ... I loved it. It was so -- so perfect. You captured Harry's feeling so perfectly, and you didn't force the romance on the audience. You led into it so flawlessly -- I'm in shock. I never, ever thought that a one-shot that beautiful could ever be written, but you've done it. And I'm not a H/Hr fan either. Wow. Just -- wow.
Author's Response: Oh my word! I don't think I've ever blushed so much in my life! I'm a bit speechless... thank you! I'm so, so happy you liked it, mostly because you're not inclined towards H/Hr. That means a lot. I can't describe how much your review meant to me... I suddenly feel so inspired to write. Your assurances have made me much more confident in my writing abilities. For that, I thank you.
LET THE BLOODHOUNDS LOOSE!!!! MIGHTY WINDS OF HEAVEN HAVE FOUND A BRILIANT ONE-SHOTER!!!!! I LOVE it! Truly, I do! Very touching, so sweet and sincere - for a bit there, one could forget that Rowling never posts segments of her books on fan sites, mucho excellent! I might recommend that ye go ahead a write a whole full-length fic, I would certainly read it...or have ye, I never bothered to check..?! In any case, I absolutely loved it, very sincere, or did I say that already??? Bravo, bravo!! *bows*
Firstly, congrats on writing the first believable kiss I've ever read for this couple! Rather than being super-passionate and quite adult in nature, you portrayed it in a far more natural, teenage kind of way - a bit awkward, but still very sweet. The angst was not overdone and I loved how you kept referring to the setting to put the reader out there in the cold Hogwarts grounds with them. Perhaps the only thing that got on my irritability radar was how deep and pure Harry and Hermione's love was at the end of the story. Personally I always find it difficult to believe a 17 (or 18 or 19) year old boy would have such heartfelt notions of love after just a few kisses - but that's just me being my cynical self. Disregarding that, WELL DONE!! Write more, please!
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so very much for your wonderful review! It means a lot to me, and I'm simply flattered that you enjoyed this story (and the kiss) so much. Yes, I tend to agree that perhaps the way I articulated their love was a bit mature for them... but you got the point anyway, so I'll live. : ) Very detailed compliments and very constructive criticism, so thanks again!
I'm not much of a Harry/Hermione shipper, but this was very, very good. I really liked it. You portrayed them so well. Good job.
Author's Response: Wow, that's very kind of you. I really respect that you took the time to read about a ship you don't particularly like. And thank you for the lovely review, it meant a lot. : )
Well done! My cat jumped onto my keyboard while I was reading and closed the window. I don't think I've ever logged back in so fast - had to get back to the story. Thanks!
Author's Response: LOL! That's funny... and thank you. : )
WOW. I love your story. My eyes were glued to the screen, I couldnt feel everything that was going on. I love it all completly. If you write like that in all of your storys They will only be stupendous.
I wish an 11 was possible in the ratings.
I started reading this story once a little while ago. I was unfortunately interrupted and did not get to finish it. Funny how that happens when you read these stories at work, isn’t it? In the craziness that has been my life since, I have not had the chance to go back and finish it…until today. I have to say that this was a very enjoyable read.
Right in the very beginning, you get hit with a heavy wave of misery and angst. I thought your opening paragraph packed a significant punch and was enough to buy me in for the rest of the story. He turned me into a murderer. He made me just like him. I liked how you carried these ideas through out the story, eventually softening, and then reversing as Hermione helps Harry realize how he is not like Voldemort. It was a device well used to pull your story together and keep in cohesive. Nice job!
I also thought you did a very good job with your imagery. As I read, I felt like I could clearly see the scene as you set it, almost like I was sitting alongside the lake just down from where your story took place. One example is Hogwarts’ lights were reflecting on the water, making it look as if little fairies were glistening as they floated to shore with the tide. You do an excellence job setting the scene for your reader.
My favorite part of the whole story is how Hermione gets Harry to realize he is different than Voldemort by describing what the world would be like had he not killed him. The images of all of his friends dead, Neville insane and Lestrange moving in for the kill while she cowers helpless in the corner are all very powerful. I thought you also did a very good job of portaying Harry’s initial reaction to this tactic; making him take a second to realize what Hermione is trying to do. This part of your story was simply brilliant.
I tried very hard to find something constructive to say about your story. The things I did find were all very minor. There were a couple of places where I wasn’t so sure about the grammar and punctuation. I thought you had a few sentences in there that maybe could have been combined into one to make it read better and without losing any of the impact you intended. For example, The person I wanted to be can’t exist. Because he turned me into a murderer. Another tinything I noticed was starting off sentences with the word and. I noticed quite a few of those. To me, it’s something that is perfectly fine as long as it is used sparingly; so that it doesn’t stand out. It’s just something to consider. I’m not expert.
Overall, I found myself somewhat disappointed that this was only a one-shot. I really enjoyed reading it and will certainly need to check out your other story Run. All around, well done!
Author's Response: WOW! Firstly, Vader, thanks SO much for the long, detailed review. You're the best. Secondly, thanks for all your many compliments and votes of confidence in my story. I'm simply stunned. Your stories are definitely among my absolute favorites, so it's extra special to me that you enjoyed this. This was the first story I ever wrote without giving much thought. All my others were planned for days before I even picked up a pen. This, however, struck me out of the blue and I typed it up in a matter of a couple hours. I'm surprised at how well it's been received by the H/Hr community. The opening paragraph was certainly a new technique for me, but I'm thrilled that you liked it! And thank you for pointing out my setting descriptions... that was very kind. My favorite part is the same as yours, it seems! I thought Hermione using memories and possible outcomes as a means to penetrate Harry's thick skull would bring more emotion to the story, and being a one-shot without a plot, emotion was necessary. I was a bit worried that I "over-did it", but I think it turned out ok. I'm certain you're right about there being some punctuation/grammatical errors. Since this was so spur of the moment, I didn't bother with a Beta reader. *sigh* Oh well... I'm SO very happy you enjoyed it anyway. Thanks again, Vader! xOxO
I really liked your description. It brought everything out to be so real! Stories like this don't seem to be so long because you engaged the reader right into it.
Author's Response: *Blushes* Thank you : )
I'm left speechless. This is really good, and it seems to let everyone actually understand Harry...and Hermione for that matter! This is really good...definitely a 10!
Author's Response: Aww, thanks a lot!! : D
Very cute, and so well written! Quite long for a one-shot, but it was definately worth the time. You are such a talented writer, Harry's emotions (and Hermione's) were so in place, I could really feel it. A proper amount of fluff aswell. I've never doubted that H/Hr will be a couple since what happened in DoM, which you also had in your fic. It was mainly that that broke the ice in between them, or something. I'll stop rambling now, I just wanted to say that this fic is wonderful and one of the best ones I've ever read, and that I hope you'll update "Run" sometime soon! 10/10!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, americana! Wow... I'm speechless... wonderful compliments, and you've really encouraged me to write more. Speaking of which, I just updated "Run" today. : ) It's a shorter chapter, compared to my others, but I'm already half finished the next one. Hopefully that'll be out within the next week. Thanks again!!
Incredible! You honestly tugged at my heartstrings. Very few writers have the ability to create such images and feelings with words, but you did. I commend you on such a wonderfully written story. It was the perfect length, and you captured the feelings of the characters so well. Not only that, but the characters were so very in character as well. Mercy, I just can't say enought at well you did. Please keep writing.
Author's Response: Wow! *Blushes furiously* Thank you, very very much. I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed it... I was incredibly nervous about this fic. *still blushing* I had fun writing it though, so anticipate some more one-shots : ) My lengthier story is called "Run", and the next update should be up really soon. So, you're a creative writing major?! Amazing! I've always wanted to major in that- hope to find a college that offers it. Anyway, thanks again. I reeeeeaally appreciated it.
First: IT WAS AWESOME!! Very nicely done; I love your style of writing and I was literally begging for more when I finished reading it. Second: I'm impress with the way you expressed each feeling and made the reader *feel* them as well. Does it make sence?? ;) The kiss was very magical and sweet. Thank you for not making it all gross and exagerated. The whole thing was like *wow* ^_^ I LOVE it!!!! Seriously, it was great! I hope this is not the last fic you post in here!!(please tell me its not..) (Oh, and I hope I didn't seem to criticizing to you...)
Author's Response: Awww, geeze! You're making me giggly. Thanks sooo very much! What an amazing review! You didn't seem critical at all, and I really appreciated your kind words and detailed reaction. Thanks again- you really made my day
I agree with ProfessorMeliflua! Although i would like to add that if you write a longer story with more chapters I would definatly read it!! I LOVED YOUR STORY!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you!! Actually, I have the first chapter of "Run" posted right now, under H/Hr. I expect it'll be a real kicker... I've thought it out a lot, and (for the very first time) have a Beta reader for it. I want to make sure it turns out well, so you might be interested in that. : ) Thanks again!
Loved it! Other random thoughts ahead. The fluff warning wasn't necessary; there was just enough fluff for a good romance story. Loved the Harry angst, but then again I'm a fan of angsty stories in general. I don't normally like stories set after Voldemort is defeated, but that's because some authors use the fact that the main characters are now adults to virtually ignore character development; you do not, which makes this story all the richer. Easily the best romance/angsty fic/treatise on the nature of fighting evil I've read. Oh yeah, and the ending was great, too. Magnificent work!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I put the fluff warning out of nerves, really... believe it or not, that's actually as "fluffy" as I've gotten so far in a fan fic, so needless to say I saw scared about how it turned out. Thanks for your lovely compliments... they mean a lot to me- truly. Especially since I'm such a die-hard fan of your fiction!
Wow! That's all I can say. It was just great!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot!