That was very well written, but the pairing isn't really my favorite. I liked the fic, just not really the pairing. You do have talent, though.
This story really is verging on being pornagraphic! You do realise that if Hermione and Harry are adults in this fiction Snape will be verging on becoming an old man and hardly one to draw away Hermione.
Also by placing Hermione/Snape's daughter in Slytherin you are suggesting people are simply the sum of their parents genes. That they are born already programmed with how they are going to grow up to be. I disagree, I think if a child grows up and is taught Gryffindor morals she could become a Gryffindor. But that is nature or nurture. I believe in nurture.
The writing is good. But it suffers because it follows the same sort of plotline television soaps visit and revisit over and over again. Girl has affair, girl gets pregnant, husband/boyfriend finds out gets angry, child finds out gets angry.
I seriously hate that Hermione would do that to Harry. Why didn't she just go to St Mungo's? Snape was pretty gross and in no way necessary. Your style is good, but I don't like the actual plot!
I seriously hate that Hermione would do that to Harry. Why didn't she just go to St Mungo's? Snape was pretty gross and in no way necessary. Your style is good, but I don't like the actual plot!
Ok. Lovely. YET! I don't even know how I got here since I'm Hermione/Ron till death and don't really like the idea of Hermione marrying Harry much less sleeping with Snape after. Other than that great story.
ew. nicely written...im captivated...but...herms and serverous?? please nte, i am deeply complimenting your writing, i think you have a lot of skill... i just loko down upon your opinions...i am canon through and through. lol. well, i hope you take no offence.....
EWWWWWW!
Why would u make a fan-fic about snape and hermoine?
It was ok.
SICKING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Woah! that was a really interesting story...i liked it though
keep it up
it was really good, i liked the way you described the feelings but HG and SS is a bit disgusting but i liked the story, i hope you write another chapter where harry finds out pleeeeease! xXxXxXxXxXx
I loved! great story I even made my self a member just to give you a rating of 10!!!
it was...yummy. I would like it if you would write a sequal and clearly state that its sequal or id nvr see it o_O'
hmmm....different if i might say so myself. I would have never paired Hermione with Snape. Good write. Keep it up...
Intresting. i am not really a HG/SS fan but this was really good.
that was real good.....but WHY did it HAVE to be SNAPE???? EW. but still. it was good, i guess
I think it was really well written. I just didn't like the fact she cheated on Harry. And that it was with Severus Snape! EWWWWW Anyway, it was still good and interesting. It may have been better if it had been longer, but that's it really.
Well...it was really well written, and I think I would have liked it if I could have just gotten over the fact the 1. She was cheating on her husband and 2. She had an affair with Snape, which honestly grosses the heck out of me. Other than that, it was really well written, and I'd like to see what you can do with other subjects.
That was one of the best stories I've read. You should definately write more stories like it
I about cried with joy when I read it!!!!great job!!!!
