I luv this chapter so much!!! Iknow I say that a lot, but I really, really like this chapter. I loved the end!!!please, update soon, even tho you just did. It's just too good.
Author's Response: Don't worry....it doesn't get old :) Thanks for the review!
lol i am so wiht those 2 i check it all the time! another GREAT job! yeah!
Author's Response: I hope you'll have reason to check it very soon! Thanks!
Hey, it's me again. I'm now officially addicted to this fic. Well, I was before, but I'm, now at the point where I check to see if there's an update every hour. I screamed and did a little jig when I saw the next chapter was up. I'm really lovin' the penseive scenes, but I'm depressed that this fic is almost finished. I agree that Sirius is far too hot. Why did he have to be the one that fell through that stupid veil, why? My favorite thing about your writing? It's AU but is so believable it feels like there's a huge gap in the plotline of OotP. You've done Jo proud. On the edge of my seat waiting for the next chapter. ~Becky~
Author's Response: Thank you for such a lovely review! I hope you'll have the opportunity to dance your jig again very shortly!
Damn, Sirius is so hot. I'm at the point where I check to see if you've updated at least 5 times a day, I love this story so much. I really liked the way you showed Miriam's thoughts on why Sirius HAD to be the Secret Keeper. I know you just updated, but do it again soon! Can't wait
Author's Response: Chp. 16 is in the queue...I hope you enjoy it! Thanks for the review!
I am just speehless!!!(and that is saying something:) This story is just breath taking!!!! please update and keep up the good work:) oh and did i mention i love ur story? ;) 1000000/10
Author's Response: Thank you!
i dont think you should end the story...ever. like its that good. either a never ending story... or a sequel? please? that'd be amazinggg haha. i dont want it to end!
Author's Response: Haha, to be honest, I've grown so attached to this story, I don't want it to end either! I've not any more ideas for fictions (except one really terrible one). This was just something that popped into my head and I felt the need to write, so I can hardly believe that it's gotten such positive feedback. Now I don't want to let go! I do hope you'll be satisfied with the end, and thank you so much for your reviews!
Hi Crickette, I think that this is one of the best love stories about Sirius I've read. There's no useless chapters, like how some writers do just to "throw it in for fun" and every part of the story actually means something. I love the way you describe the settings, like Mirium's nightmares, because I can visualize it so clearly in my mind. It's extremely romantic, but not enough to be overly dramatic (aka annoying) I registered myself on this site just to let you know you are a very gifted writer, and to keep writing. I'm afraid that if you don't get enough reviews you'll stop. Don't. Anyways, keep up the good work, and update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you for this very humbling review. That is actually the same reason I registered on this site about a year ago, to review someone else's story, so it is wonderful to hear someone felt compelled to do the same for me. Thank you so much for the review, and don't worry, I will keep writing until the end (but don't stop reviewing, heh!)
I luv it!I luv it!I luv it!I luv it!I luv it!I luv it!I luv it!I luv it!I luv it!I luv it!I luv it! Did I 4get to mention that I luv it?! JK. It was really good. I like the end, I really wan tto know what happens next!!!
Author's Response: :::grins::: Thank you! X number of "I luv it"s!
Was that short or was it just me? Am I going insane? Lol, anyhoozle! Great chapter...if you could call something that horrific great... **shrug** YEAH! Okie, anyways! It was good, but! Quick question...how many chapters are going to be memories of Miriam's? Just wondering. I have nothing against them of course. (I particularly love how you update so regularly, I have read numerous stories where the author updates once every three months...) OKIE! I'm WAY off topic now! Thanks for updating so quickly, thanks for the great chapter (even if it SEEMED shorter than normal...?) and thank you so very much for anything else I have yet to mention... :-) HeartIZZLE's!!! ~banned~
Author's Response: Haha, no, thank you! I'm not exactly sure how many more chapters this story has left in it....know that it is coming to a close, and we have definitely reached a turning point with Sirius looking into Miriam's pensieve. Much of the rest will take place within her memories in order for some resolution to take place, but not all of it. Thanks again for the review, and I hope you're satisfied with these answers....can't give away too much, after all ;-)
omigosh i cried when i read b-cuz MY EX-boyfriend broke up with me on Firday... I cried then,i should stop :crying: now. any way it's really good
Author's Response: Oh no, I'm sorry this made you cry for such a sad reason...it's his loss. I hope you feel better, and thank you for the review!
One of the best ... definitely..... you really make my heart itchy ... what will Sirius see in the pensieve ? Please update soon... I can't wait ...
Author's Response: Sirius will see A LOT in the pensieve. Thanks!
this is the best story from all the ones iv'e ever read on fanfics. i just love ur writing its sooooo properly written and gives u shivers and all sorts when u read it. luv it. can't wait for ur next chapter!
Author's Response: That is truly humbling. Thank you for the review, and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!
I luv it. I thought it was so sweet when she said that she didn't want him to leave again. She wants to be with him. Yay! Sirius. Always meddling. He is so pulling a Maurauder right now. Well, I guess he can, since he is a Maurauder. 10/10
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it! I know what you mean though, if I ever caught someone snooping into my pensieve...
ahhh you are amazinggg you almost had me crying at the part where she told him not to go away again... i was like :-O awe! and...getting to read 2 new chapters in the same week... was exciting. haha... i cant wait for ch 14... the story just gets better & better... and was spectacular to begin with so thats saying something =) eagerly awaiting chapter 14, ~ks
Author's Response: Thank you so very much. I hope you enjoyed chp. 14! Chp. 15 is recieving its final touch ups, and will soon be submitted to the queue!
Oh no...here we go. Can't he just drop it and leave it alone? NO! He has to go all Marauder on us and look through her memories. We all know how that turns out (coughsnapepensievecough). Sigh. To quote Hermione..."What...an...idiot." Please update soon! ~banned~
Author's Response: Ha ha! Oh, this made me laugh...I've really come to look forward to your reviews! I do hope I won't disappoint in the future.
great job again! lol your fab!
Author's Response: :::blushes::: No, you are!
My favourite chapter! Brilliant! 10/10
Author's Response: I was really worried about this one too...thank you for the reassurance!
I luv it, luv it, luv it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It's fabulus!! I really liked the flashbacks best, but now this is my favorite chapter!!!!! 10/10
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you!
Bravo! You managed to convey both sirius' and miriam's feelings marvelously. Good work.
Author's Response: Many, many thanks :)
Okay, I’m back with more. Sorry, random author is deluging you with feedback. It’s because I like your story, though, so I hope you don’t mind. I’ll make this one shorter and more manageable, I promise! The reason I chose this chapter to review rather than chapter eight, which fascinated me as well, was because I got hooked on the subject of appearance, and wanted to finish what I started in my last review. Anyway, I love the way you change show that Sirius’ perspective of Miriam’s appearance changes.
She wasn’t beautiful. He now realized the aura of light surrounding her now as it had before, giving her an angelic resemblance, had been nothing more than the sunlight draping the whole infirmary. Sirius saw Miriam the first time as an angel, someone saving him, but now that he’s saved, he looks on her with a much less romantic light. Her halo is stripped away, and she becomes just an ordinary girl. Point number one in your favor – she isn’t beautiful! (Though there is something.) However, the moment she responds to his comment with a smile, she blossoms in his eyes. Smiling down at him, Miriam looked utterly bewitching. Sirius had the unsettling idea that he would do anything to make her smile again. I love the fact that she’s not beautiful all the time, and that it is what she does that makes her beautiful. I’m also hoping (though this may just be me making random interpretations – I do that a lot) that it has something to do with the fact that we’re seeing this particular scene from Sirius’ perspective, and that she has just responded to him. He sees her once again in light of what she has done – and she becomes beautiful.
Moving away from appearance, I have to come back to your characterization. In my opinion, at least, characters are what make a good story – and yours are something special. Sirius is so cocky and ready to accept a challenge that I can definitely understand why Miriam is attracted to him. I would like to see a bit more of him, and his insecurities with respects to Miriam, though I can understand why you’re holding back, in light of the events to come, which we see from Miriam’s perspective. I suppose it makes sense – it would ruin things a bit if we knew exactly how he felt about her; I do hope, though, that sometime in the future you give us some hints as to how Sirius’ own insecurities factor into chapter eight. I’m getting ahead of myself, though. Back to this chapter. Miriam, I love. She is a wonderful, well rounded character. I’m delighted to see her in Hufflepuff – a perfect house for a healer, someone who must seek to serve and be oriented with people. I also really enjoy her personality. She’s so acerbic, so ready to answer, and yet so unsure of herself that she cannot believe anything good would come out of a relationship with Sirius. She staunchly refuses, putting up a front of a girl who is not convinced by his charm and who is not going to be budged by his pleading; and yet she remains uncertain, and you’ve given us a few choice hints that make me think her feelings towards Sirius are not so neutral as she pretends. Remembered the way her stomach had dropped when she had wiped away enough blood to recognize the mangled face. I love this…you so sneakily imply that finding this face is more dreadful than finding another. You reinforce this in Miriam’s parting shot as well. “Charms,” she said again. “We’ve never had a Divination class together.” Wonderful characterization here again; you’ve not only shown her acerbity and her unwillingness to be taken into hand by Sirius, but you’ve managed to show us that she pays attention. She, whether she admits it or not, knows exactly which classes she has with Sirius Black. Very tricky you are! Wonderful story yet again…I’m definitely signed on to see what happens!