ok u TOTALLY have to update before i explode miriam sounds like an actual person not a one-dimesional charater
I've just read this fantastic Story and it has blown me away! Its brillaint esp for all us Sirius Black fans! I actually felt like I was reading a Harry Potter book and we all know what a genius of a writer jk is. When u finish the story send it to JK Rowling with all our reviews on i bet she be blown away too!! Can't wait for the next chapter!
tereffic story!! i love it!! i feel soo sorry for miriam in that memory... i can't wait to see what happens when she goes up to find that Sirius looked at the thing she was trying to hide from him... i also love how you characterized Sirius... well update soon!! plzzzzz
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I really enjoyed your story and am particularly impressed that this is your first fanfiction. I thought you did a really good job of capturing the true characters of Remus and Lily. It was interesting to see them come to know each other in a different light. I also enjoyed the foreshadowing of Lily’s future. Your vocabulary is impressive too Though the story seemed slow at times I think as a character study it worked really well. It is interesting to see how Lily relates to James’ friends and I like how Remus’ feelings about Lily are subtle and almost ambiguous. All in all very impressive I was sad to see it end.
Oh! Poor Miriam! She just found out she was pregnant, and Lily and James die! How sad! And what about Sirius? He is going to be a father and he doesn't even know! I love the interaction between Lily and Miriam, though. Very realistic to real life! Good job!~ MALD
Okay, so I've just read your entire story. All I have to say is, "Wow." Wow. That's it. I love it; I absolutely love it. You have amazing characterization, plot, style. I'm very much impressed and in awe. I love everything you've done with this story, and I can't wait to read the rest. Thanks for putting this up--amazing writing like this shouldn't be hidden away. This was awesome. Really...
Wow!!!! You are so creative and your writing is really good. I love how you do your transitions from the past to the present. And Miriam is such a great character! She's just the kind of girl I'd always picture him with: strong, smart, and no nonsense. And I especially loved the way you did the fight in chapter nine. It really ties in with what we know about the original story. The only thing is that you had her helping Neville's parents before James and Lilly died and I think that they went mad after James and Lilly died because the Death Eaters were trying to find Voldimort. But everything else seems totally right. What a cliff hanger though! Update soon, PLEASE!!!!!
oh no. i definitely love this story more than anything. it just has that lil...spark. its awesomeee. the wait for the next chapter has been tooo long. i cant wait til its up! and when this story is done... i vote for a sequel. haha you're a very talented writer. keep'em coming <3
This story is the nearest to perfect i have read in a long time. i've been reading it for a while and cannot wait to find out the ending. the plot is great, with sadness and little bursts of happiness. and i love all the marauderness! please update... it's killing me, child!
ARGH! Wow, riveting, absolutely riveting. I've been spell bound for the last I don't know how many chapters. You have talent and skill. And if you don't update soon I'll .... I don't know but it won't be pretty.
This is definately on the top favorite chapter list. Very definately. Quite.
It's so sad! I want to beat Sirius, and yet it was probably necessary, but does he have to pretend to be quite that happy and rub it in her face? It's like he really doesn't know her, and yet he does. You write complicatedness.
Oh you just had to put that last line in to torture me. The toffee was funny. Um, have you said anywhere how long this fic is going to be? On one hand I don't want it to end but on the other hand waiting for updates kills me.
Ack! Wonderful! I wonder how much shock Sirius will be in when he realizes he's "stuck" on Miriam...
Ditto first chapter. I .... sense.... flashback coming..... hmmm. I wasn't actually expecting a flashback, oddly enough. I probably should have.
Oh very nice! I love Miriam already and she completely has my sympathy. Good good good.
Loving your story!! I'll be disappointed when it's over!!! Update soon!!!!
wow, i read all 17 chapters in one day because i couldn't stop. it's such an amazing story. it's so exciting and sad because we (kind of) know what's comming..... keep writing. please. kate x
this is my favorite story of Sirius Black. i like the plot in it. Update soon!