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Reviews For Bellatrix

Name: Adeyla (Signed) · Date: 11/17/08 22:51 · For: Angsty One-Shot
this is a really strong piece of writing, very emotional and slightly terrifying! i thought it was so sad but it spoke so well

Name: Shalashaska (Signed) · Date: 03/11/07 19:48 · For: Angsty One-Shot
I think it's really good you REALLY should add more to the story!!!!

Name: Shalashaska (Signed) · Date: 03/11/07 19:47 · For: Angsty One-Shot
I think it's really good you REALLY should add more to the story!!!!

Name: Shalashaska (Signed) · Date: 03/11/07 19:47 · For: Angsty One-Shot
I think it's really good you REALLY should add more to the story!!!!

Name: HELENz (Signed) · Date: 11/25/06 17:20 · For: Angsty One-Shot
Hmm... Interesting!

Name: Valentinia (Signed) · Date: 07/14/06 1:14 · For: Angsty One-Shot
Wow. Very short, but touching. I love how Bellatrix is so cruel, just like she is in canon. The last sentance was absolutely chilling; just when you thought she had changed her mind... so very... Bellatrix!

Name: HeRmYgInS (Signed) · Date: 04/28/06 13:16 · For: Angsty One-Shot
Wow, that was amazing. Great job. It explains a lot. Wonderful! I'm giving it: *****/5. Yep. Becuase I don't think you can rate stories anymore, so i'm just doing my own little system.

Name: Buckbeak22 (Signed) · Date: 06/28/05 19:45 · For: Angsty One-Shot
I liked this... If I had written it myself I would have chosen another female instead of McGonagall. I can't really see her as the crying sort, more like the purse her lips up and whisk you to the hospital wing sort while telling you that is no way to deal with anxiety. Just my thoughts though, that is the only quibble I had, otherwise it was great, and I felt really sorry for her (Bellatrix).

Author's Response: Yes... Maybe someone like... I don't know, but I see what you mean. Thanks!

Name: Louisa Chocolatecake (Signed) · Date: 06/23/05 20:31 · For: Angsty One-Shot
Very strong imagery. The thought of all that blood seeping everywhere makes me dizzy. However, maybe you should explain why Bellatrix let Professor McGonagall into her confidence? It seems to me there's a big hole there.

Author's Response: Thanks! I will think about your suggestions.

Name: Miss (Signed) · Date: 06/15/05 6:04 · For: Angsty One-Shot
Definitely very different from my own, but as promised, my review. I guess I'm usually interested in the Dark Side, but then again mostly then men that are on the Dark Side. This little story leaves me wondering, however, if I should perhaps pay more attention to the women. I wonder why she would let McGonagall in so easily.

Author's Response: Thanks; it is very different from yours, but we both enjoy the Dark Side! I honestly hope that Bellatrix will be a featured character in Half-Blood-Prince. Thanks for reviewing!

Name: MithrilQuill (Signed) · Date: 05/31/05 13:54 · For: Angsty One-Shot
Hmm definately a different way of seeing Bellatrix, i thought it ended too quickly, but other than that it was good, and the thing with wanting to make sure Sirius would be in the flames too, that was interesting(i just like Sirius too much...evil Bellatrix), oh and McGonagall crying-that would be sight =)

Author's Response: It did end too quickly... Unfortunately, I don't know if I'd have the time to add something on to the end. I thank you for your review! (and I also like the Sirius in flames bit. I think that was a bit cool on my part... Poor Sirius...) Oh, and McGonagall crying... that would be a sight... But, now that I think... doesn't she already cry a bit in one of the books? I must read them and find out! I honestly can't remember.

Name: the nutty imp (Signed) · Date: 05/31/05 7:22 · For: Angsty One-Shot
This is definitely a different view on Bellatrix. I often see as a cruel nutcase but this is very good. The way you portrayed her as sad and troubled.

Author's Response: Thanks; this is my favorite of the stories I've written.

Name: OuchKibble (Signed) · Date: 05/28/05 14:55 · For: Angsty One-Shot
Ooh. I am a huge fan of Bellatrix, and I quite enjoyed reading about her as a teen. I like how you focused on the different things that troubled her, and how she saw it fit to deal with them.

Author's Response: Thanks! I think Bellatrix is cool, also!

Name: Subversa (Signed) · Date: 05/27/05 10:53 · For: Angsty One-Shot
I read through your work, and each of your stories begins with a unique central idea, which I consider to be an accomplishment within itself. This one is my favorite; I like the idea of Bellatrix as an emotionally disturbed teenager. It certainly explains her later choices.

Author's Response: Thanks; I dislike writing a story unless I have a really good plotline to it. Yes, Bellatrix must have been somewhat like that to become what she is know. Thanks for reviewing!

Name: Gianna (Signed) · Date: 05/23/05 20:46 · For: Angsty One-Shot
First, I just got done reading your review and you are one in a long line of others who like my writing but not my grammar. I also really appreciate your critism and was actually sort of happy that someone took the time and pointed out the mistakes, beta searching as I type. Second, in response to the question, I was fitting Bellatrix into another fic (Lupin/OC with Lilly and the Marauders) but as I got to working on her and idea came up and I wrote the first chapter to 'Passages'. When I saw that you were also writing about Bella I decided to submit 'Passages' so you gave me the courage to SUBMIT it you could say. Can't wait to see your humor piece!

Author's Response: I gave you courage *ego bubbles over* OK, seriously, I wrote Bellatrix partly because there were barely any stories about her, and I'm flattered that you'd follow my lead! And I am glad to help you make your fiction better!

Name: witchwannaB (Signed) · Date: 05/23/05 15:23 · For: Angsty One-Shot
I liked it but there were a few mistakes...McGonagall should have called Bellatrix *Miss* Black, not Ms. Black. Additionally, since when is a knife a "muggle artifact?" *is extremely confused* Rating this a 6.

Author's Response: Correct me if I'm wrong, but aren't women over 12 supposed to be referred to as 'Ms.'? Or is it that in dialogue it is to be fully spelled out? If not, Ms. is the correct usage for a 16-year-old Bellatrix. And 'artifact' simply means An object produced or shaped by human craft, especially a tool, weapon, or ornament of archaeological or historical interest.

It doesn't always have to be a historical object. I simply chose that as the word to use. It is considered correct.

Thanks fore reviewing, though, and for pointing out things that might be mistakes. And I know most people would hate you for that '6', but I give out stars lightly as well, and know that for you it replaces what most people put as an eight. No biggie!

Name: HPotter7 (Signed) · Date: 05/22/05 14:46 · For: Angsty One-Shot
Wow! Another brilliant fanfiction. You do have a lot of talent for this sort of thing. It was extremely dark, but you managed to make her seem so human. I feel that once you know why someone was the way they were than you can understand them. I really enjoyed reading this! 10/10 HPotter7

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Bella is my favorite character!

Name: Gianna (Signed) · Date: 05/22/05 12:47 · For: Angsty One-Shot
I was waiting for this story to come...I was thrilled when you said you were writing it! Well done! Also, I have to give you credit, you're the one who gave me the courage to write a story about Bellatrix. If you would be so kind to review I would love to hear your thoughts, it called 'Passages of Bellatrix'. It begins where book 5 ended. I love how you make Bella really human, not just a manicial crazed witch so many would go to. Once again well done!

Author's Response: I gave you courage? Does that mean you read this, then wrote your story, then reviewed? I'm a bit curious. I will review your story. Thanks very much for all your compliments!

Name: Kira (Signed) · Date: 05/22/05 11:57 · For: Angsty One-Shot
Wow! this is a really neat consept. i liked the story and such but maybe you could have ended it differently, i dont know how. hummmm? well the beggening of this story is wonderful. what was written on her hand and such. i would love to know that. also it was dark at the beggining but it lost a bit of its darkness when you brought minerva into the picture. you could have maybe had snap come instead. he wouldnt nessecarily have saved her, but he could have ticked her off enough to the point that she wouldnt have killed herself. saying like that her death would have been meaningless. if you want to get back at sirius then do it dont be weak and such. he so could have told her that she was wearing her heart on her sleave and that would have just ticked her off. i dont know its your story and such just an idea. i must go find more of your wonderful writing if you have it! 8/10

Author's Response: I shall think about your suggestions. I might even re-write the one-shot (posting it as a second chapter) and put Snape in there. Thanks for reviewing!

Name: HermoneRULEZ (Signed) · Date: 05/21/05 11:47 · For: Angsty One-Shot
Not to repeat other people but...dark. Yeah. You have a way with darkness and angst that many people don't have! Most of the angsty fics I've read can go very wrong if they aren't written exactly right, becoming to unbelievavle or melodramtic. But you write it just right, which I believe is a very rare talent, one I'm not sure I posess. Exellent writing!

Author's Response: Thanks! This story is my favorite of the ones I've written. I have a question for all readers: do you think I should enter this in fanfiction contests? I am planning on doing that in August. Any comments?

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