This is absolutely wonderful, Vader. I have a slight obsession with poetry, and this was really beautifully written. I love the rhyme-scheme and the simplicity of the lines, especially the way the words are used in such a minimalist way. I do believe that not one of your lines is over four words…is that right? (Please excuse any inaccuracies on the counting of lines because I am very tired) My favourite part of the poem, however, has to be the whole story you tell in the poem. The fact that Voldemort can tell that Harry loves her (is this right? I really hope it is, otherwise I shall feel like a fool) and that Harry worries about Hermione’s safety. It’s so sad, depressing, etc. Also, while this story might have been a bit of a cliché if told in a conventional fic, the poem has made it less so.
As I said, I really love this. It is going on my favourite list!
Author's Response: Wow! Thanks so much for the review! I’m really glad you liked it. Yes, the “storyline” in this one is certainly cliché, I agree. I’m really liked the format so much. My original goal was that no line here would have more than 3 syllables. A couple of the stanzas have four but that’s the most I have. I was trying to keep the number of syllables consistent to keep the flow nice and smooth. Thanks for the great review. I appreciate it so much!
Wow!!!! im not a big fan of H/Hr but I loved it! please keep writing im your biggest fan! i give u a 10! please R&R my stuff!!! all of it is in poems-"I wish","Luna Lovegood", and "Iam alive." please please R&R!!! it would mean a ton to me! thanx a bunch and great job!!! ~Loverofluna~
Author's Response: Thank you for you review. I'm glad you liked it. I will try to give your work a read when I get a chance.