Reviews For Healing Harry
Reviewer: pathseekerme
Date: 06/09/08 12:01
Chapter: Chapter Six: Birthdays and O.W.L.s

Your writing is TREMENDOUS!! PLEASE, PLEASE don't quit writing just because you've graduated! You have a wonderful gift for writing! Your dialog is great; it sounds so natural! It sounds just like the teenagers I teach every day! Your writing just "flows" so naturally and so well! (Yes, I know that's a teachers' word, but it fits!) Please keep writing, and please let me know when you do! Linda

Reviewer: pathseekerme
Date: 06/09/08 11:34
Chapter: Chapter Five: Talks and Speeches

“No… I guess not. It could have been a lot worse, but it’s a shame about the door rule” needs some ending punctuation, like a ".".

Harry laughed, “It’s your own fault you know.” SHOULD have a comma before "you know."


“Hello boys, might I have a word with you Harry?” SHOULD have a comma or SOME punctuation after "Hello" and again between "you" and "Harry."

"But why are you looking so mortified? Dumbledore said you had something to share with us all, are you not ready? Because if you’re not, we’d understand… NEEDS QUOTATION marks at the end.

“It wasn’t so bad really. All he wanted was for us to all leave the doors open when we’re ‘entertaining mixed company’. I think Mrs. Weasley is tired of walking in on Ron and Hermione,” they both laughed. CLOSING PUNCTUATION needs to be inside its "closer," so "'entertaining mixed company'," SHOULD be "'entertaining mixed company.'"
PERIODS, commas, and any other punctuation HAS to be INSIDE the quotation marks, apostrophes or tic marks, or anything else you are using as a closer.

SORRY about the grammar lesson!

“Yeah, well she’s the reason I want to talk to the Order. She’s so courageous, I owe her, everyone really, the truth.” NEEDS a comma after "Yeah, well, ...."


Healing Harry by pandafan81
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Rated: 1st-2nd Years | Warnings: None

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Summary: A rose, a new bedroom, a Pensieve, and a new home. Harry finds comfort in his friends and family. Will he find more?

Story is now complete!

Earlier chapters are going through a clean-up and final edit. Chapters 1-4 complete.


Half Blood Prince and Deathly Hallows Disregarded
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Dumbledore wasn’t able to make it to dinner the next night, nor the night after that. Many things changes took place over the next couple of weeks. Cornelius Fudge had been sacked as Minister of Magic and emergency elections were being held. Dumbledore was spending most of his time supporting Amelia Bones for the position, while spending just as much time determinedly turning down the requests of many for him to run.

Not being old enough to vote, the four teenagers residing at number twelve Grimmauld Place paid little heed to the events going on in the outside Wizarding world. Certainly the topic was much discussed at meal times but since they were all in agreement in supporting Madam Bones, there was little need to discuss it otherwise.

Harry hardly noticed that his pensieve still sat on his desktop. It was completely useless to him until Dumbledore could show him how to use it properly. He had considered popping in to see the memories that Sirius had left him, but not knowing how to get back out of the pensive on his own yet, he thought better of it. Harry didn’t mind much however, he had more pressing matters on his mind. Matters like Ginny.

The news that Harry and Ginny were boyfriend and girlfriend had swept through the inhabitants before they had even had the chance to tall anyone. Harry suspected a pair of Extendable Ears were to blame for the rapidity of the news running through the house. However not having to face everyone and tell them was actually quite a relief. Everyone seemed to approve of the match, even if the twins teased them mercilessly.

As the days passed, they settled into a happy routine. Mornings were spent helping Mrs. Weasley manage the house. Harry found a new sense of responsibility rise within him, he actually felt a great sense of pride when working around his home. He was not unused to washing dishes, mopping, beating the rugs and helping with the laundry thanks to his childhood with Aunt Petunia, but here it was so much more satisfying.

Afternoons found the foursome usually in the garden. Sometimes they practiced Quidditch, or they brought blankets to spread out on the grass and bask in the warm July sunshine. Harry found lying on a blanket with Ginny’s head resting on his shoulder even more exhilarating than practicing the Wronski Feint. One blistery afternoon found them forced indoors. Harry cursed the weather for denying him the opportunity to watch the sun light up Ginny’s bright red hair but soon found he didn’t mind the library either. He and Ginny were stretched out on their stomachs in front of the fire playing Wizard’s Chess. Ron and Hermione were curled up on the nearby couch, Hermione’s back to Ron’s chest. His arms were wrapped around her and looked, to Harry and Ginny’s surprise, intently listening to Hermione read her favorite Muggle novel, Sense and Sensibility.

The evenings continued in the same fashion as the first week. Ron and Hermione would disappear after dinner leaving Harry and Ginny to themselves. This suited them just fine. Much like the first week, they spent their evenings playing games or chatting companionably. Although Harry enjoyed the stolen kisses they shared, he enjoyed talking to the beautiful young lady just as much.

Mrs. Weasley favored their growing friendship as well since she didn’t walk in on them kissing nearly as often as she did Ron and Hermione. The deepest, most serious conversations could end in fits of laughter as, “OH YOU TWO!” could be heard bellowed by an exasperated Mrs. Weasley from somewhere in the house. She had taken to wandering the corridors like a prison guard once an hour to keep an eye on the new couples.

After walking in on her youngest son for the third night in a row, Mrs. Weasley was heard storming down the hall murmuring something that sounded a lot like, “having a talk with his father.” Harry thought his friend’s situation rather funny actually, until he was summoned into “the talk” as well.

Mortified, Harry entered the drawing room that evening ears burning with embarrassment. He hadn’t considered doing anything with Ginny he felt worth receiving a lecture. His stomach gave a squirm as Mr. Weasley hailed him to come in and make himself comfortable. Ron looked as if the couch were as comfortable as sitting on a porcupine; he sat there staring down at the floor utterly humiliated. As he sat Mr. Weasley chuckled at the horrified boys.

“No need to look so glum boys, you’re not in trouble,” he said with a warm smile. Relief washed over the faces of Ron and Harry. “Your mum… Molly… uh” it was obvious he couldn’t decide what to call her, so he settled on, “Mrs. Weasley… Mrs. Weasley is rather concerned about….well… the nature of your relationships.”

“What! Dad!” Ron spluttered embarrassed beyond belief.

“Mr. Weasley, Ginny and I never-“ Harry started at the same time.

“Hold on now,” Mr. Weasley interjected raising a hand silencing the protests, “let me say my piece first. Mrs. Weasley wants me to remind you that you are young, you both have two more years at Hogwarts and Ginny has three. She wants me to remind you that you have a lot of time before you are adults, and that certain things can wait.

“Now, I agree with your mother on these points as well, you are young, and certain things can wait, but I also know that you all have been through more than most full grown wizards. You are growing up in a different time than Molly and I did, and facing many more fears and dangers than we could have ever imagined at that age. And I am pleased to see both of you finding happiness after all that has happened and knowing what is to come, especially you Harry.

“I also understand that you both have only just started dating the girls, you probably haven’t even considered what Mrs. Weasley fears you’re thinking of, but I wanted to talk to you before your relationships became too serious. I want you to know I am here for both of you. I want you to feel free to ask me questions, knowing that I will do my best to answer them.” Mr. Weasley smiled and laid a hand on each of the boys’ shoulders. “Now for the hard part.”

Both boys gritted their teeth. Harry was starting to feel very uncomfortable, he knew where babies came from and really didn’t want to discuss that with Mr. Weasley. Harry knew that the Weasleys considered him one of their own, but they were also his girlfriend’s parents, which made the whole situation just a little too strange for him.

Mr. Weasley laughed reading their faces, “No, not that. Mrs. Weasley and I just have a request. I know that technically this is your house Harry, so I can’t really give you the ‘while you’re under my roof’ line, but I’m hoping that you’ll respect our wishes anyway. We would feel more comfortable if you would leave the doors of whatever room you’re in open if you are entertaining mixed company.”

“Oh! Sure Mr. Weasley,” Harry felt an immediate sense of relief, he couldn’t imagine what kind of requests they might have had. This seemed so simple a request he felt like he was being let off the hook. Ron, however, did not look so relieved. No doubt, Ron and Hermione’s interrupted snog sessions had brought about this request. Obviously he did not relish their loss of privacy.

“Thank you Harry, I know this must feel rather weird for you, but Mrs. Weasley and I have considered you one of our own for ages now, and I really hoped you would understand.”

“Thank you Mr. Weasley,” Harry replied turning slightly pink again.

“Alright, well, unless you have any questions for me, I’ll let you go now. Mrs. Weasley should be done with the girls about now too.” He give Harry and Ron each a pat on the shoulder as he got up to leave.

“Well, that wasn’t so bad,” Harry said turning to face his friend after Mr. Weasley left the drawing room.

“No… I guess not. It could have been a lot worse, but it’s a shame about the door rule”

Harry laughed, “It’s your own fault you know.”

Before Ron could retort, Remus entered the room.

“Hello boys, might I have a word with you Harry?”

Harry’s face fell, he was sure he was getting another round. ‘Having a family sure does come with a lot of lectures’ he thought to himself. Ron looked quite pleased as he bounced out of the room happy to get out of another talk.

“Sure Remus, what do you want?” Remus crossed the room and took the seat Mr. Weasley had just emptied moments ago.

“Well, Dumbledore told me about your request. We just got word that an Order meeting will be held on Friday, so you can do it then if you like. He apologized for not being able to show you how to use your pensieve yet, but he’ll come by in the afternoon to give you instructions. But why are you looking so mortified? Dumbledore said you had something to share with us all, are you not ready? Because if you’re not, we’d understand…

“No,” Harry looked sheepishly up at his former professor, “no, I want people to know, then we will all know what’s coming, ‘not leaving anyone behind’ like Sirius said. I was embarrassed because I thought you might… well… Mr. Weasley just gave Ron and me a talk about…” he trailed off.

Remus chuckled, “Ah, I see. I remember having a similar talk with my father, I was completely horrified.”

“It wasn’t so bad really. All he wanted was for us to all leave the doors open when we’re ‘entertaining mixed company’. I think Mrs. Weasley is tired of walking in on Ron and Hermione,” they both laughed.

“I think you’re right,” Remus chuckled. Remus resumed his thoughtful look, “You know, Harry, Mr. Weasley is not your father, nor am I, but I hope that if you ever needed to talk to either of us in that kind of way, we would be more than happy to-“

“I know,” Harry cut him off, “I really appreciate the offers, but I’m just not ready for that yet.”

“Alright, but when you are, promise me you’ll come to one of us okay?”

“Yeah, okay.”

“How are things going with you and Ginny anyway?” he said nudging Harry with a grin.

“Good, really good actually. I never realized before how easy it is to talk to her.”

“I’ve noticed, and I’m glad you’ve found someone you can open up to.”

“Yeah, well she’s the reason I want to talk to the Order. She’s so courageous, I owe her, everyone really, the truth.”

“And that is?”

“I’m going to share the prophecy about me and Voldemort.”

Remus looked shocked, “I knew one existed, but I thought it broke at the Department of Mysteries during the battle.”

“It did, but Dumbledore witnessed the prophecy, he showed it to me in his pensieve afterwards. That’s why I’ve needed him to show me how to use it, so I can borrow the memory.”
NEEDS a semi-colon after the word "prophecy," BECAUSE "prophecy" is the end of that sentence. ORDINARILY MOST people would use a period, but you are an extraordinary writer. You used a comma, I am assuming (remembering always what "THEY" say about assuming) because you knew the two sentences were closely entwined and needed to be joined together WITHOUT a conjunction. That's why you should use a "';."

I LOVE the way you write!

“No, actually Friday’s good. There’ll be a party, (NEEDS a semi-colon ";"here instead of a comma) Mrs. Weasley’s already been hinting about it. All the attention will be on me anyway, maybe people will see that I’m coming to terms with it, then maybe things won’t be so strained around here.” THIS is a run-on sentence. PERHAPS you might re-write it thusly: "All the attention will be on me, anyway; maybe people will see that I'm coming to terms with it, and then maybe things won't be so strained around here." Just changing the punctuation and adding one "and" fixes the grammar and STILL says what you meant, I think. What do you think?


“Again Harry, you’re showing maturity beyond your years.” Remus gave Harry another pat and left the room.

"“Better than the one you had with your mum (NEEDS A COMMA after "MUM,") I’m sure!” Harry replied laughing at her scowl.

“Honestly, you’d think she’d found us all dancing around starkers (NEEDS a comma after "starkers,") by the way she’s reacting.”

Wiping his eyes (COMMA) Harry pulled himself back together, “Ours was okay. I think we were lucky getting your dad, (SEMI-COLON INSTEAD OF COMMA) he just asked us to keep the doors open.”

“You did get off lucky then,” Ginny scowled again, (PERIOD INSTEAD OF COMMA) “Mum went on and on about being women who can make choices for ourselves and not letting boys push us into anything we don’t want to do, (SEMI-COLON INSTEAD OF COMMA) we should wait until we are old enough to know what we want and so on. Hermione was so embarrassed she nearly cried.”

“Ginny,” Harry was very serious now, “we’ve just started dating, and I’m not saying I’ve even thought about it yet, but your mum’s right, (PERIOD INSTEAD OF COMMA) I don’t ever want to pressure you into something you don’t want to do.”

“Who said I’d let you?” Ginny grinned, but sobered at the sight of him, “I know (COMMA) Harry, and I don’t want to pressure you into anything you don’t want to do either. Let’s make a promise to talk things out before either of us make any rash decisions.”

“Me? Rash decisions? Never!” Harry stated in mock hurt, “I think that’s a wonderful idea, and in honoring it, I have to tell you something.”

“It did, but Dumbledore was the one who saw the prophecy being made,(SEMICOLON) he shared it with me at the end of the year, and now I’m going to share it with everyone else.”

“Thank you (COMMA) Ginny, you don’t know how much easier you’ve made this for me.”

In reply (COMMA) she leaned into him and kissed him sweetly on the lips. He smiled back and returned the kiss (EITHER A COMMA OR A DASH) wrapping his arms around her.

“I thought you wanted Ginny and I to be together,” he said dejectedly (COMMA) trying hard not to laugh. Ginny gave him a shocked look, but saw the laughter in his eyes and glared at her brother (COMMA) playing along (COMMA) too.

It just occurred to me that, even though you are a TERRIFIC writer, and I have tried to present these trifling corrections in the spirit in which I am giving them to you -- as a GIFT-- that you might not want them. EVEN though you do have some writing in this chapter that still needs a LITTLE help, I have decided to wait to hear from you what you would like for me to do. Please write back to me. My yahoo address and my livejournal address are on my bio page.

Reviewer: pathseekerme
Date: 06/09/08 10:09
Chapter: Chapter Four: Adventures in Diagon Alley

Here is another gift for you:

"Ron turned pink but continued, “Well, yeah, the plan had it’s upsides for all of us.” IT'S = IT IS; ITS = IT OWNS SOMETHING; therefore, this sentence should read, "...the plan had ITS upsides for ... us."

(I'm afraid you aren't going to like having a grammar teacher LOVE your writing! If you want me to stop making corrections, I will!)

Reviewer: pathseekerme
Date: 06/09/08 9:31
Chapter: Chapter Two: The Pensieve

Better word choice -- "Harry was quite shocked. He knew Ginny was stubborn and determined to help when she could. She had been adamant in her choice to come along to the Department of Mysteries, but he hadn’t realized how dubious she was." "DUBIOUS" SHOULD be "he hadn't realized how DEVIOUS she was."

"Harry’s mouth dropped open. Something in the back of his brain told him he did not want to discuss his godfather, but that voice was quieted quickly as Dumbledore prodded the *sliver-misted* liquid in the Pensieve with his wand. A shape began to rise out of it taking shape. Sure enough, there was a tiny Sirius. With a final prod from the wand, it began to speak in an echoed voice" "SLIVER-MISTED" SHOULD be "SILVER-MISTED."

I'm sorry if this comes across as a criticism; it is NOT intended that way. I am a grammar teacher, and it has always seemed to me that to take a GOOD piece of writing and make it BETTER or even GREAT is a worthy thing. I think you should do that with what you write.

You are a GOOD writer; there is NO reason you couldn't be a GREAT writer -- even published and making money!! Please take my constructive corrections in the spirit in which they are given. They are a gift to a worthy writer....

Reviewer: hp_7_rocks
Date: 05/05/08 18:35
Chapter: Chapter 18: The Beginning

i loooved the story!! it was great, but if you add a couple of detailed sex scences it'd be better.

Reviewer: multicolour_biro
Date: 04/30/08 12:13
Chapter: Chapter 11: What Would Severus Do?

well, snape is obviously on dumbly's side cos he told voldy that harry was spending his time with the muggles so he is obviously keeping info from voldy. and u also said that snape rehearsed the speech so it could be part of a plan with dumbly.

Reviewer: ilovesnape
Date: 04/07/08 11:49
Chapter: Chapter 18: The Beginning

Thanks for writing that, I really enjoyed it!

Reviewer: Pandapoo
Date: 02/03/08 7:35
Chapter: Chapter 18: The Beginning

Wow, thankyou very much. I love the ending so much. The use of the sweet word "you" made a very touching and realistic ending. I really enjoyed reading your story and I hope you write other, Thankyou.
SB

Reviewer: PalmTreePrincess
Date: 02/03/08 2:03
Chapter: Chapter 18: The Beginning

AWWWW!!!!!! I loved this story!!!!!!!!! :]

I thought that was great way to end the story, I loved every chapter and every minute of it. I'm sad that it's over, but you did a really good job on it.

Reviewer: PianosAngel
Date: 01/19/08 8:24
Chapter: Chapter 18: The Beginning

This is an amazing fanfic. I've just read it all in one huge go! Your story actually completes with a bit of well-written action, rather then alluding to it and then not even playing it out. Plus, it is original AND fitting with JK's 'love' thing! Even the fluffstuff is balanced out and tempered, matching the charaters!!! Well done, I'm off to find some more of your stuff.........

Reviewer: Ginny20
Date: 01/11/08 19:37
Chapter: Chapter 18: The Beginning

Well, I absoloutely loved your story. It was just wonderfull. Me, I love romance and this was just the thing for me to read. Keep up the good work, and I can't wait to read more of your fanfic.

Reviewer: BioHazard82
Date: 01/01/08 23:23
Chapter: Chapter 18: The Beginning

Very, Very good story. It was entertaining and interesting throughout. Look forward to reading some of your other work, and maybe a sequel to this story? ;)

Reviewer: lyssa0128
Date: 12/28/07 13:12
Chapter: Chapter Two: The Pensieve

This is SO beautiful. It all just sounds like Sirius.

Reviewer: hmrpotter
Date: 12/21/07 12:47
Chapter: Chapter Nine: Dancing with Princesses

I love the Stars Wars theme! :o)

Reviewer: otter pratonus
Date: 11/15/07 11:23
Chapter: Chapter 18: The Beginning

really sweet. Loved it. Please write a sequal!!!!! PLEASE!!

Reviewer: otter pratonus
Date: 11/15/07 11:21
Chapter: Chapter 18: The Beginning

This was a really good story- I loved it!
But thought that the last chapter was a bit boring! You should do another one to follow on! GREAT!

Reviewer: harryyum
Date: 11/09/07 3:11
Chapter: Chapter One: Many New Doors

This FANFIC is AMAZING... in the space of two weeks i read 7 times... even in class!!
i couldn't put it down!

PLEASE RIGHT MORE!! ANYTHING... (romantic of course)

Reviewer: harryyum
Date: 11/09/07 3:10
Chapter: Chapter One: Many New Doors

This FANFIC is AMAZING... in the space of two weeks i read 7 times... even in class!!
i couldn't put it down!

PLEASE RIGHT MORE!! ANYTHING... (romantic of course)

Reviewer: DOBBYROX49
Date: 10/25/07 14:42
Chapter: Chapter 18: The Beginning

PLEASE PLEASE wright a SEQUEL!!!

Author's Response: Awww.. Thanks for the vote of confidence, but no, there will not be a swquel to this story. But keep your eyes open, there'll be some stories that'll appear and actually be in canon!

Reviewer: Ginny2
Date: 09/28/07 17:43
Chapter: Chapter 18: The Beginning

love it ... sooooooo sweat

Author's Response: Thank you.

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