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Name: marvelousmeg (Signed) · Date: 09/25/07 19:47 · For: Key To My Heart
That is good. To me, it sounds like how Hermione feels when Lavender enters Ron's life. Really interesting!

Name: Hermione Lurves Ron (Signed) · Date: 06/03/07 19:39 · For: Key To My Heart
She is talking to Ron, rite? That's what it sounds like.

Name: Soccer_rocks_likeHP (Signed) · Date: 03/16/07 22:52 · For: Key To My Heart
This was so beautiful. I think it's Ron that Hermione is talking to. Poor Hermione! Keep up your lovely work!

Name: Euphrates (Signed) · Date: 01/15/07 14:52 · For: Key To My Heart
I think it is Ron she's talking to/about, because I am a huge R/Hr shipper.

Very good poem.

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

Name: Rita Writer (Signed) · Date: 09/11/05 22:02 · For: Key To My Heart

First if all, I love how you leave the actually person being spoken of a mystery. As I read this, I sort of scanned it while looking for clues, though Iím still not sure (though if you asked me Iíd wager a guess at Ron). It really makes it more interesting for the readers. The metaphors used in this were wonderful.

I changed the locks.

[What you don't know is that your Key will still open the door]

This was my favorite line of the entire poem. I actually took time out of reading it to think about what had been meant by that. Another one I like was:

But time does not bend For unfortunate lovers

Alright, I know this is rather picky, but Iím going to bug you about one little bitty comma error, simply because comma errors in dialogue agitate me. "We can't" I said. "This isn't right." A comma is needed after the word canít. I know: Iím picky. I just had to mention it though.

Iím not really sure what kind of poem this is (or even if it has a name) but I really liked the way it flowed. Everything sort of blends together; itís not just a jumble of Hermioneís random thoughts towards someone. I enjoyed this greatly; good job!

Name: Miseryluvsu (Signed) · Date: 06/18/05 0:23 · For: Key To My Heart
i like how you didnt tell the reader who the person was, thats up to the reader to decide.

Name: Vader (Signed) · Date: 05/13/05 9:57 · For: Key To My Heart
You did a great job on this one, DanceUponMyToes. I really liked the flow it had. I like how you didnít say who was on Hermioneís mind here. That leaves it up for the reader to decide for themselves which can always add a little intrigue. I was hoping for a little more of a hint than I saw in there, but oh well. I liked it just the same. The ending was so, I donít know, tragic I guess. Hermione just left aching and allowing herself to think thatís the way it should be. Great job! Looking forward to reading more of your work!

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