Wow. I'm impressed. That was really very good. Though I may protest that Little Whinging belongs to the British and not just JKRowling. ;-) Your writing style was very smooth and made for a quick, enjoyable read. Their conversation (Harry&Marla) seemed rather abrupt though. I was kind of hoping for more. Oh well, Harry isn't exactly a luquacious (vocab word) person. I also must say that I thought the blank business card at the end was a nice touch.
Author's Response: You're impressed? I'm flattered. Little Whinging isn't real, Marie. Otherwise it would belong to Britain and the British.... Luquacious? I have no idea what that word means....*looks it up online* Oh, you meant locquacious....I still have no idea what it means. *continues to search online* OH, no, Harry isn't exactly wordy, that's Hermione. :)
Brilliant as usual wwB. I really like the use of the first-person narrative and how the characters interacted with each other. The ending left me wanting more. 9
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing Ouch! :) I was considering adding an ending that takes place years afterward but it involved Harry doing illegal magic.....so I didn't write it.
Nice use of one person narrative here. I like the way the protaganist was so eager to close up shop and then forget all about it when she became interested in Harry. His saddness was very real as were his sudden bursts of anger! You're a lovely writer.
Author's Response: Oh, stop it, I'm blushing. You're really too kind. I'm not -nearly- as talented as JK....thanks so much for all the reviews! I'm so happy that you liked all of my one-shots so much!
Very interesting! I like this a ton! I give you a ten too btw... Anyway, very mysterious- care to tell me what spell he used as he left the shop, and more about the blank business card? (you could tell me in French, if you prefer) Too bad this was a one-shot, it would be wonderful if you wrote more! ^_^
Author's Response: Il ne....uh....fait pas faire....le magique. *is very sure that her French is incorrect* I was going to have an ending part which showed the opposite, but I killed it. *mwahahahaha*
Great job on the story! Ten !
Author's Response: A ten!?!? You must be kidding....*shakes head* Thanks so much, both for the ten and reviewing! :)
