Reviewer: d3pr3ss3dNhappy
Date: 05/30/05 9:39
Chapter: One-shot

Wow. I'm impressed. That was really very good. Though I may protest that Little Whinging belongs to the British and not just JKRowling. ;-) Your writing style was very smooth and made for a quick, enjoyable read. Their conversation (Harry&Marla) seemed rather abrupt though. I was kind of hoping for more. Oh well, Harry isn't exactly a luquacious (vocab word) person. I also must say that I thought the blank business card at the end was a nice touch.

Author's Response: You're impressed? I'm flattered. Little Whinging isn't real, Marie. Otherwise it would belong to Britain and the British.... Luquacious? I have no idea what that word means....*looks it up online* Oh, you meant locquacious....I still have no idea what it means. *continues to search online* OH, no, Harry isn't exactly wordy, that's Hermione. :)

Reviewer: OuchKibble
Date: 05/28/05 17:57
Chapter: One-shot

Brilliant as usual wwB. I really like the use of the first-person narrative and how the characters interacted with each other. The ending left me wanting more. 9

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing Ouch! :) I was considering adding an ending that takes place years afterward but it involved Harry doing illegal magic.....so I didn't write it.

Reviewer: fvweasley
Date: 05/24/05 7:48
Chapter: One-shot

Nice use of one person narrative here. I like the way the protaganist was so eager to close up shop and then forget all about it when she became interested in Harry. His saddness was very real as were his sudden bursts of anger! You're a lovely writer.

Author's Response: Oh, stop it, I'm blushing. You're really too kind. I'm not -nearly- as talented as JK....thanks so much for all the reviews! I'm so happy that you liked all of my one-shots so much!

Reviewer: BunnyT
Date: 05/23/05 17:46
Chapter: One-shot

Very interesting! I like this a ton! I give you a ten too btw... Anyway, very mysterious- care to tell me what spell he used as he left the shop, and more about the blank business card? (you could tell me in French, if you prefer) Too bad this was a one-shot, it would be wonderful if you wrote more! ^_^

Author's Response: Il ne....uh....fait pas faire....le magique. *is very sure that her French is incorrect* I was going to have an ending part which showed the opposite, but I killed it. *mwahahahaha*

Reviewer: Scheherazade
Date: 05/22/05 1:30
Chapter: One-shot

Great job on the story! Ten !

Author's Response: A ten!?!? You must be kidding....*shakes head* Thanks so much, both for the ten and reviewing! :)

You must login (register) to review.
Information
Find out everything you need to know about the site right here.


We have stories and authors in this archive.

:

RSS
Choose Theme:
SOCIAL MEDIA
     
MOST RECENT
Unexploded Bombs by Oregonian 1st-2nd Years
Dudley Dursley has just experienced the death of his elderly father Vernon from...
Ginny's Big Decision by dg04 1st-2nd Years
After Dumbledore's Funeral, Harry tells Ginny that they can't be together anymore...
Little Lions by SexY_LydZ 6th-7th Years
On a stormy October evening, a letter, a late night trip to the library and...
FEATURED
Going Against Salazar's Grain by hestiajones 1st-2nd Years
"Sometimes," said Dumbledore, "we sort too soon." Originally writtten for...
Whispers in the Night by lucca4 6th-7th Years
"Swear to me, Cissy. Swear you won't tell." It's a secret, and it haunts...
Fear and Loathing in Florida (Mostly Loathing) by minnabird 3rd-5th Years
Scabior and Greyback had to escape the Aurors somehow - they just hadn't expected...
Just Before Healing by WeasleyMom 3rd-5th Years
With Hannah, things always go to yellow.
In Bloom by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor 3rd-5th Years
It figures that he ignores the other side of roses. Thorns fit to draw blood...
Magical by Nagini Riddle 1st-2nd Years
Ginny and her brothers sneak down the stairs to look at presents, but instead...
CATEGORIES