Reviewer: bookaholic_au
Date: 06/10/05 22:30
Chapter: Ch 3: A WHOLE NEW WORLD

I really like it! i don't think that Jessica is a Mary Sue at all. I like the way Hermione took Jessica shopping. I would not have thought it possible to make Hermione realistically like shopping but you did it.

Author's Response: Yeah, I just could not picture our Hermione holding up a robe and saying..."Isn't this cute?" LMAO

Reviewer: dumblydoor
Date: 06/10/05 9:09
Chapter: Ch 3: A WHOLE NEW WORLD

hey! im so sorry that it took me so long to get here...i forgot to put this on my favorites and then i forgot about it....but luckily i was skimming through stories and found it! yeah im the first to review! this is such a great story with lots and lots of potential. very original...most people assume its over once harry defeats voldemort, but look at grindelwald--voldemort just took his place! this is very probable and you write it so very well. im so glad i found this again! will we meet harry or anyone else in the potterverse? i have this picture in my mind of exactly how jessica should look. this is truly a wonderful story--great job and keep going with it!

Author's Response: Harry, Ron and all the rest come in VERY soon, only one or two more chapters setting up the new character. Then we get Draco by Ch 8..Lucius, Severus and all the rest of the motley crew come in later. Like I said, the first chapters are light, but hang on...This is actually rather fast paced. I thank you so much for taking the time to review...I know it's trite...But, it does make my day!

Reviewer: Laudomia
Date: 06/04/05 21:09

Poor Jessica! So much has happened to her so quickly. Dumbledore might have given her more time to get over the shocks (and the jetlag). She's in for it now. Keep those chapters coming!

Author's Response: Oh, she's a tough gal...she will handle it. So glad to see you! Next chapter was been in limbo for 10 days. I forgot to capitalize 'Muggle' once and was denied. Resubmitted yesterday, so it may take another week to appear. Story is finished with a new ending....MUCH better! and will be posted as soon as validated.

Reviewer: Laudomia
Date: 06/04/05 20:38

Hey, NT, I really, really like how you've written this chapter. The subtle changes work to make everything flow nicely. It's going to be fun to read the rest.

Author's Response: Hey! Laudomia! Great to see you!!! Thank you for reading. I think you may find some subtle changes and some not so subtle. I'd like to think I have grown a bit since my first effort. Not as afraid of emotion now. Thank you for respomnding!

Reviewer: dumblydoor
Date: 06/04/05 8:16

first of all, yay im the first to review! second of all, yay you made her beautiful! still not seeing the summary part, but im sure it will come in soon, and i cant wait until it does! *adds to favorites* i see a lot of potential here! btw, do you need a beta? if so, im available.

Author's Response: Oh the Potterverse comes in now. I may have to take you up on the beta offer if I don't get validated soon. I forgot to capitalize a word almost 10 days ago and am still waiting for validation for the next chapter! Thank you for the reviews they mean a lot!

Reviewer: dumblydoor
Date: 06/04/05 8:08

not sure where this is going, but it looks like it could be good. the summary sounds esp. interesting and i think you have a great writing style. you made me feel bad for poor jessica.....make her beautiful!! lol off to read the next chapter, can't wait to see where this is going.

Author's Response: Your wish is my command! LOL

Reviewer: Rita Writer
Date: 05/22/05 21:28

This story has great potential. I very much enjoyed the way you started off. The first paragraph let me know strait away what you writing style was. I could picture it perfectly in my mind. What I really enjoyed was that it was not cliche. I've read several fics where people have discovered that they have magical abilities, and they tend to be a lot alike. In this, however, I get a feeling that Jessica is a real person, not a fictional character. Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you! Just to give you a heads-up, I have an authors note in Ch 3 that explains that I wrote this in response to a dare. The challenge was to write a story that had all the elements of a cliché and a Mary Sue, but make the character likeable and realistic and the story interesting. So you will see some pieces of the dreaded MS come into play. After Ch 7 the story starts getting darker with more plot and intrigue. The story is 24 short chapters. If you can hang in, let me know if I have succeeded. I will post as soon as each chapter comes out of queue.

Reviewer: snivilus
Date: 05/20/05 23:00

I love the writing style. And I agree with Bones..The story has potential. But a cliffy on the very first chapter???? It'll be cool if you update quickly. Anyhow...10 very well done

Author's Response: Oh I am evil....and I so love cliffies! Next chapter in queue. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Madam Bones
Date: 05/20/05 18:32

I am your first review EVER!! I feel so darn special!! Yah for Madam B... Anyway, your story has SERIOUS potential. WHAT HAPPENS NEXT??? WHAT DOES THE PIECE OF PAPER SAY?????????????????????????? Great job. I was really able to empathize with the made it easy. Keep up the wonderful work. Hanging helplessly from your cliff... ~Madam B.~

Author's Response: Wheeee! My first review! Thank you so much!. I know this is a strange beginning, but trust me things will make sense soon. Ch 2 in Limbo. The whole story (24 Ch) is finished, but will be posted as soon as validated! Thanks again!

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