A very good effort on your part i must say! I was just browsing stories for the scavenger hunt and i came across this. A particularly good story. What i like most about this story is that it is very entertaining and this is one of the most important ingredients of any story because that is what the reader want to see. I am a bit confused though- Black with Malfoy? Did i miss something over here? And also as harriet says about neville- he does seem confident. Good job with this story!
Author's Response: *Sigh* I know ... I've tried to tone him down a bit .. but to no avail. Guess I'm not good with Neville. Good thing this is tagged as an AU... else I don't think I could had gotten away with that...
An excellent story. Wow! I really liked it but peter pettigrew and umbridge? *shudders*. They are suited for each other though. I really should have used this in the rare- pair scavenger hunt. Oh well! What i like was your characterization, your ideas, your imagination, your humour and your creativity. They were all excellent and i thoroughly enjoyed your story. You migbht want to add a little bit of action to prevent your story from becoming too much of a drag but overall an excellent effort
Author's Response: *lol* I don't think it was even in the option *L* - No one is probably sick enough to actually write a romance about those two. *snicker* I do have a sick sense of humour.
Thanks for the advice.
This story is really, really not right...IN A GOOD WAY!! It's all happy and funny, like me!
Author's Response: *lol* You're the first one to have actually noticed that ... *lol* ... It's not the sort of story that one indeed ought to find in the dark and serious 'mystery' section, *snicker* but I managed to sneak this through. *L*
That serious storyline does give me an excuse to stay in this section *shh* don't tell anyone -- you wouldn't want me kicked-off this section for Sirius ... I mean serious writer's would you? ^_^
hey great story actually it was BRILLIANT how u could fit the new details in the origonal story
i dont know U R GREAT plz plz update soon
Author's Response: Thanks. I know ... I really ought to finish up that chapter which I have half-way done ... Thanks for the motivation :)
need i repeat myself?It was amazing.Nothing to criticise (darn!).But what i am really amazed at is how you manage to put comedy without deffering from the general plotline.Your story is extremely good with regards to your wrting style, grammer and word usage .Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks. Glad to here that this is a serious comedy *wait - that doesn't sound right * Sirius comedy? *nope* sigh my vocabulary's failing me *wails*
Ignore me ... I'm being pointless ^_^
A rather interesting story written from a whole new angle.I can't beleive i did not notice it before.Ok i have to go out so i will leave a short review- what i liked was the way you took the story, its angle, its gist, i realy liked it.Your construction grammer and general writing style are excellent as well.Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks :) AU does give us a chance to twist everything up nicely :)
I found it! The story ascended out of the depths of the MNFF Archive and I was able, finally, to log in (I always forget that part) and add it to my Favorites list. So you should have a new one, since that's only a couple days old.
I don't know what else to say, but . . . you're funny, miel.
How many more chapters have you got going?
Author's Response: maybe 5 more ... I really have to go finish that pending chapter for this one ... too many contests got me distracted *lol*
I do enjoy making people laugh -- although lately I've been writing those dark stories ... I really should quit those challenges ... *L* too serious for my own good :)
Author's Response: *squeals* another one who placed this in their favourates! *squeals*
Three words for your story- it was amazing. I was really amazed at the brilliance. I mean i had to review with some constructive criticism and then i realised there was simply nothing to criticise. The mystery is good, with lots of suspense and the humour is excellent. This is the first fic ever that i have rated 10.
Author's Response: Thanks you... that's a pretty big compliment. Glad I was able to convey the mystery despite all those comedic sub-plots (I can't help it - this is a long fic - and I'm originally a humour writer) ^_^
I hope you don't mind, but I've used a piece of your review in my summary for Malicous Intentions, basically promoting the story, and letting people know just what the great author's are reading!
Just tell me if you don't want your quote on there, I'll take it down instantly if you want =)-Steph
Author's Response: I don't ^_^ the reviews are yours to use as you wish :) -- BTW you can email me for these the next time :) I just prefer not to spam up my review page after raving (in the forum) on how I dislike spammed up review numbers because the review page is being used as a chatline :)
A very intriguing Prologue and First Chapter. I'm really curious about finding out what happens next. It's a very original idea and I think you have kept the characters OC. I like Moody's interaction with Shacklebolt, those little details always make the story believable and enjoyable.
Author's Response: Thanks joanna ... believ it or not those details were just added in after my beta grilled me to do that and later Laura who modded this asked that I improve the transistions :) This site truly teaches you to write. :)
"Tenebrus" *nods* yup, got that one, although.. i thoguht "it" was a guy... something about a whole heard? *eyebrows knit*Tee-hee, i loved the Sirius prank. Seemed a little like "Squigly wiggly, jigery pokery" in CoS.... "Muggle Beheading Device" classic.
Vell, ve haff to go, toodles!-Steph
Author's Response: I did too … but luckily I check via the HP lexicon. They’re bound to be correct :) She’s the head of the herd and also Hagrid’s favourate.
I’ll have to look up that CoS squiggly thing *lol* I can’t remember that :)
"Mix his blood with a kelpie he attempted A bride which the family rejected" *giggles* eww! That's worse that the Umbridge/Peter ship. *rolls on ground with tears of laughter in eyes*
Learn more about Nathaniel Black, we did indeed. I find Aris interesting, i love the rhyming. I think when rhyming, certain things become very ironic when you read them again, you can cover your tracks.
*guawff* Look! It is a bird? Is it a plane? No! It's the Amazing, flying Pest Percy!*squishes with toe*
Author's Response: *giggle* Given the ship I come up with – aren’t you glad I don’t write romance *lol* Rhymes are good that way *grin* - you can be vague (and truly not know what you’re talking about) but seem smart – later you can say – that’s what I meant – you’ve got to read in between the lines *snicker*
You wonder who’s truly the bigger pest: The Pranksters? or The Prefect? *lol*
"Mudbloods, half breeds, and Weasley trash" Covered all bases there, Imp. I don't get how Sirius could be swayed so easily. Like, didn't he hate Malfoy? *Confused* I just thought (even though Sirius is open to pranking anyone, anytime) that he wouldn't have done it in plain view of Harry, Ron and Miss-know-it-all knowing they ddin't feel the same way.
*Sigh* My computer had died... again. I swear, if they take 3 months to fix it again, *shakes fist* This is the third time it's gone to silicon heaven... come to think of it, yours was the last review i ever wrote before it died. *glares at Sirius*-Luridly, Steph
Author's Response: He’s mad at the Weasleys , so he’s likely stupid enough to go along with Draco just to spite them. He doesn’t like Lucius and probably finds Draco overbearing – Sirius is not exactly known to ‘think’ before he acts :) after all in the canon he did sent Snape towards a rabid werewolf without thinking that this could have killed the git. He rushed off to the Department of Mysteries despite Dumbledore telling him to stay put. I like Sirius, but he’s not exactly a reasonable guy :) too fiery, impulsive – he’s an idiot sometimes.
I don’t know why but I can’t find your new story that you mentioned. Maybe my laptop needs a good shake *lol*
Aww. I only got up to Snape, but thought I'd leave a review before i forgot different things.
"So long, farewell. I need to say adieu. Adieu to you and you and you and you..." I lub The sound of music. Good stuff. *thumbs up*
Eeewww Dolores Umbridge/Pettigrew. Yueach. Oh wait, though... err... no one knows Pettigrew's alive at this point. Huh. *stumped* unless it's not Umbridge...
Sorry Really must. Conversation between Peter and Remus- Voldermort. Sorry. I just have this obsession with people spelling the main charatcers names wrong. Myself included. I feel so ashamed for my tedious Typos!
OOh, and one more thing. I never quite worked out why the dialogue is on Italics. Prolly shouldna asked before now huh?
I've submitted another story to MN! It's called The Potters and the Blacks; a Family Torn Apart and i wrote it when iw as 11! Wowsa. I only foudn it after 4 years the other week! oooh *jumps up and down* I'd like a copy of book 7. ch. 1 pleeeeeeeeease.-Steph. LOL. And this wasn't even for the whole chapter. (",)
Author's Response: *lol* That pairing grossed so many people out *lol* so much so that it's funny *giggle* (yeah I've got a sick sense of humour)
Oh this is an AU - no Sirius around thus Petey got away scott-free and is now 'ugh' Deputy Minister. *snicker* and you thought the Ministry under sudge is bad enough *lol*
The italics? *lol* When I started ... I had a hard time with switching tenses - so, the genius that I am figured this system out. -- non-italicised words ought to be in past tense *lol* -- Now, I can handle the tenses better, but since I started off with that style - I had to continue doing that.
I'll be sure to check that as soon as I finish beta-reading some chapters.
*lol* I'll sent it to you (well ... as soon as I can find where I buried that file *L* It's probably burried somewhere with the partially done chapter of this story that I've also been neglecting ^_^)
your story is absolutely awesome!!! 10/10!!! i'm one of those 25.... hey, why don't u name the group of people who have u'r story among their favourites??? u know, something like S.P.A.W.N???? i'd surely love that... pls reply if u r going to name the group something, and even otherwise... yours- **koolgirl1993**
Author's Response: A name? hmm.. I'll have to think of something ^_^
Author's Response: *giggle* How about Readers Unitedly Suffering from Excruciating Stomachaches ^_^ *lol*
Those poor souls were expecting a normal mystery fic ... unfortunately the author was way ... uhh... twistier than expected....
Ah, this prank would put Sirius in Fred and George's good graces wouldn't it? It's amazing to see how similar Lucius and Vernon are. Same type of abuse and mentality.
Another edit note:
"Narcissa, you take our son, Crabbe and Goyle down that wall"
You should add "from" in there, "down from that wall".
I hope you don't mine the edit notes. I always appreciate them myself. I can always use an extra set of eyes (of four!) Another excellent chapter by the way and I've added this to my favorites list!
Author's Response: Thank you ^_^ I do appreciate those little corrections and being added to a fav list :). *giggle* I'm just warming up with the usual cliche pranks here ... the pranks gets more outrageous as the story moves further.
Goodness! There are so many little and yet big events that would have changed without Sirius there. I'm am most curious! Editing note: "Should we send him back, we might be jeopardize our own existence.” "be" sould either be removed or "jeopardize" should be changed to "jeopardizing". Again, an excellent chapter and I'm moving on to the next one right now!
Author's Response: Thanks for the correction :) I do tend to not read my own works carefully *lol*
I always try to return the favor and read and review works by my reviewers (and in your case, beta) but you have so much! So I decided to start at the top! This is a very interesting concept and look forward to reading the rest. As such, here I go...
Author's Response: *lol* I know ... I can't believe I write this much as well. This story is actually the first one I've written and is still on-going. It lacks structure, but its the most fun to write. It's my attempt to write a humour fic with a very strong plot line. PLaced it in the mystery section because I do want to emphasize that I have a plot. ^_^
This is truly a unique piece of art. There is no other description for you story except WONDERFUL. 10 Keep up the great work.
Author's Response: Thank you. I'll try to update this when the queue opens ^_^
Hello, hello again! 'Tis Christmas Day, 1:00am, to be precise. My Dad thinks it's funny to tormet me a with KING SIZE Green prawn head that he had for dinner. Ever since I was a little girl I've been scared of those things, and all because of his stupid Christams Antics! Hehe Wolfsbane Potion "Pity Sugar makes it useles" Sirius has enough Suger in his that it woudn't do anythign anyway!
Merry Christmas, Miel! I get prezzies in about 8-9 hours! Woot!!!-Steph
Author's Response: King Size Green Prawn?!? *lol* Your dad sounds like a fun guy.
You've got a point there. *lol* Sirius does seem to be on a constant sugar-high. *lol*
Merry Christmas! I already opened mine ^_^. So satisfying to rip those wrappers and have ribbons flying about :)