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Name: redvelvetcanopy (Signed) · Date: 12/23/05 12:25 · For: Chapter 2 - Off to Hogwarts We Go
I love how you've written young Sirius as playing both sides of the fence. That the world around him could have him for any number of reasons puts him in an excellent position for mischief. Love the interplay between Sirius and Harry.

Author's Response: I always did imagine him to be sort of a mix between Draco and the Weasley twins -- I meant cunning, with some sort of mean streak, but also a lovable prankster as well ^_^... and in this story he does get into plenty of mischief. ^_^

Name: redvelvetcanopy (Signed) · Date: 12/23/05 12:23 · For: Prologue
Oh, no, just wanted to clarify that I am NOT anti-AU at all. I am anti-Rowling-killing-off-the-most-wonderful-wizard-to-walk-the-earth. ;)

Author's Response: *lol* Then we're on the same boat here *lol* ^_^

Name: Lurid (Signed) · Date: 12/23/05 1:06 · For: Chapter 1 - Out of His Time
I LuB this story, I am SO glad i ead it. Oh, and Nataniels wand, noted.... but you see i tink you might have made a time error/ harry will be 7, Hermione 8 and Ron, 8 depending on what time of the year it is, and Sirius is only 6. Nicholas Flamel died some time between their first year, and their sixth year, i should think. Nicolas and Perenelle visited Nathaniel just befroe they too died, and Nathaniel would still be im possession of his wand it this time. But, taking into considereration, this si the statr of a wonderful fic. I'm off to read more, and will reveiw at the end. Kudos!

Author's Response: *wince* canon error? I'll have to re-check those date lines.

Whoops I guess I'm not that good in trasitions and managed to confuse you on that other story *lol* C.A. did pointed out some problems in the transitions. Nathaniel was supposed to be an artist during the Renaissance era. This story takes place in a more modern era - thus he's long dead. (but he'll make an appearance since I originally created him in this story).

Transitions in time frame is definitely something that I need to work on ^_^.

Name: redvelvetcanopy (Signed) · Date: 12/22/05 14:02 · For: Chapter 1 - Out of His Time
I loved how you let us in on the context of your AU through the conversations between Mad-Eye and Kingley and then later through the Minister and the others--nice little device. You have Kreacher written dead-on, just right. I felt so bad for young Sirius, thrust into the world, missing his mum, with only nasty Kreacher to help him. Young Sirius was certainly able to handle himself with a wand--I am impressed! I am a bit worried about Sirius, going to live with the Malfoys, but I am sure he'll hold his own. I love how Narcissa appealed to Lucius to convince him to take Sirius in. LOL!

Author's Response: On Narcissa. I owe that to my beta Kerry ^_^ she advised that Lucius needed a stronger reason to keep Sirius (than Narcissa's nagging) - e.g. money. Her prodding made me look deeper. Betas are great at that.

Thanks for the review and hope you'll read on. ^_^

Name: redvelvetcanopy (Signed) · Date: 12/22/05 13:56 · For: Prologue
Young Regulus and Sirius are just as I imagined! Fabulous--an AU story in which Sirius Black lives! (Normally, at this point, I might walk away muttering curses about Rowling like a mad House-elf, but I will try to stop myself.)

Author's Response: *grin* It's the age old cliche plot. ^_^ Just thought I'd want to do something different with it.

Anti-AU? *lol* I used to feel the same way until I read 'Promises Unbroken' by Robin4 (it's in ff.net). Not only had I been converted. I'm now writing AU as well ^_^ ... gives us more leeway to go wild and do fun things. :)

Name: Xriak (Signed) · Date: 12/01/05 9:37 · For: Chapter 17 - Siriusly Wicked Ideas
great chapter! I absolutely love the Sirius you portray in your story! it's also very easy to read your story, which is also a big +! update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks. Ill try to do but experiencing a few problems with writing Hagrid This shows that Ive been relying too much on betas to help me with this. Now am determined to do this on my own. Appreciate your review. ^_^

The first reviews for a chapter is always special :)

Name: koolgirl1993 (Signed) · Date: 11/04/05 2:13 · For: Chapter 15 - Reflections on the Past
cool chapter, i'll be your regular reviewer from now on... oh, and can u send me that 'Old Man' song parody?

Author's Response: Yes! Someone finally asked :) I was starting to think that no one is interested in my silliness *lol* Below is the complete 'This Old Man Song'

This old man, he played one
He doesn't mind when SPAWN has fun
Snape blew up, Flickwick's a hairy king kong
This old man just whistled a song

This old man, he played two
He only smiled when we turn him blue
Lupin's got hiccups, Snivellus wearing a tutu
This old man played on his kazoo

This old man, he played three
We gave him a purple goatee
Quirell's so scared and he tried to stake Snape
This old man went to bake a cake

This old man, he played four
We sealed off all the doors
Teachers are stuck in, students stuck out
This old man fed the kelpie a trout.

This old man, he played five
Flitwick got hit by a big beehive,
Bees buzzed in, students hid under their chair
This old man ask Snape about his hair

This old man he played six,
We poured salt into the soup mix
Snape sang and danced, pulled Lupin off his seat
This old man asked for veggies and meat.

This old man he played seven,
Snape got attacked by all those raven
Quirells' a soggy mess, Flitwick's a bunny that hops
This old man offered us a lemon drop.

This old man he played eight,
Snivellus wailed about his state
McGonagall's well loved, she beats prefects off with a stick
This old man offered muggle lollies to lick

This old man he played nine,
We charmed the elves to look like mimes
Hagrid's been shrunk, Snivellus' a tatooed goon
This old man whistled a happy tune.

This old man he played ten,
In his room, we left some hens
Quirell's a frog, Snivellus' a fine feathered beast,
This old man prepared a chicken feast.

Name: Cinderella Angelina (Signed) · Date: 09/30/05 16:32 · For: Chapter 13 - Aftermath and Reflections
Uh-Oh--You left Orlaith's comments on the bottom there, so everyone knows what's improving and what she had to say about it. Not that that's bad. Anyway, on to my review . . . . Hah! I loved it! Dumbledore and Moody in perfect control of their situations, hah! Hermione's "reflection" being the kelpie all the time, hah! I had no idea there was anything fishy about that--so much for textual clues. (and so much for a pun. ha, that was a funny one.) I refuse to be nitpicky and tell you any errors that I found, so I've purposely forgotten them already. It clearly got accepted anyway. I can't wait for what Rita Skeeter comes out with. I expect that will be fun. Oh, I loved this chapter! Have a nice day! *D*

Author's Response: Whoops ... *L* am such a scatter-brain ... thanks for telling me *lol*

^_^ Guess my clues were too subtle :) so much for the 'Mystery of Hermione's Reflection'.

You still found errors? *L* I can tell you and Lei are already in that 'Beta Frame of mind' ^_^ Thanks for reviewing. :)

Name: NaginiFay (Anonymous) · Date: 09/29/05 21:56 · For: Chapter 13 - Aftermath and Reflections
Beleive it or not, I knew about the rainforest. I'm from around there. This is really a great story. I've read it with enjoyment. Sometimes reading my fellow Gryffindors fics is a bit of a chore, but this story often has me in stitches. The bit with Tonks in the rainforest made me a little homesick.

Author's Response: Me too! I do miss home as well (And I only left it last month *L*), so I just have to blatantly insert a bit of it in this fic of mine *lol*. Glad to hear that you enjoyed this.

(I wonder if I ought to have this in the humour section instead of the Mystery one ... I really did intend to write a serious story but Sirius is just too tempting to use for comic relief as well ... *sigh*)

Name: Cinderella Angelina (Signed) · Date: 09/21/05 11:32 · For: Chapter 12 Cycle of Chaos
Hmmm . . . pretty good action sequence. You used "low curse" twice in a row, though. I would change that just so it's not repititious. I saw almost no comma errors this time. Creative idea (I enjoyed Sirius' demonstration almost more than the whole action sequence), but now I want to know what happens next--NOW! But I will wait patiently just like everyone else. have a nice day.

Author's Response: Thanks for noticing... corrected. The next chapter has been validated and the one after that with my beta ^_^ ... I try to update fast regardless of reviews. Thanks for being my first (and only) reviewer on this installment.

I don't know if it's good that you enjoyed my sub-plots over my main plot *L* ... But it's good to know that you had as much fun reading that as I did writing it.

Name: Cinderella Angelina (Signed) · Date: 09/19/05 21:27 · For: Chapter 11 - Mirror Mirror
Well. I don't know how this slipped, but . . . "Lavender Browned looked to the left and the right" That might want changing, eh? I wish the boys would listen to Hermione. Sirius' antics, while funny, aren't as funny anymore when he's so mean too. I enjoy the action. Look forward to seeing more ^_^ Good job!

Author's Response: *lol* OMG! am I original with my mistakes or what *L* ^_^ As for Sirius, thanks for noticing his meanness ... I'm doing that on purpose, as part of his characterization. I want that mean streak to sprout out once in a while (as JK showed - he's a bully) but he also ought to be charismatic enough, that people will still love him despite this faults. Fortunately Harry does not fuel this mean spark of his, as much as James does. ^_^

Name: PuppetPal (Signed) · Date: 09/06/05 16:27 · For: Chapter 10 - Tricks and Deceptions
This fic is really good. I love the way Sirius acts, and your style of writing is really good too. I'm interested in the black family history, as well as what those horsetype things at the end will do. Ending was awesome. Can't wait till next chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you for that enthusiastic review. Unfortunately I'm having a bit of a problem on the next chapter (Don't worry it's basically grammar related) Hopefully I got it all right this time around ^_^

Name: koolgirl1993 (Signed) · Date: 09/02/05 8:12 · For: Chapter 10 - Tricks and Deceptions
Wow!!! I loved your fiction... Sirius is absolutely superb... i love him. Snape cool too!!! 10/10

Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed Sirius and his antics. *snicker* poor Snape ... but Sirius just wouldn't be Sirius if he doesn't pick on Snape would he? Thanks for the review. I'll upload the next chapter as soon as the one in queue gets approved. ^_^

Name: SiriusLover2 (Signed) · Date: 08/24/05 13:52 · For: Chapter 10 - Tricks and Deceptions
This is a great story, can't wait to see how it comes out..waiting for the next chapter...

Author's Response: Chapter 11 is already in queue and Chapter 12 is will follow ASAP. ^_^ Can't wait to post 12 ... it's my first attempt on an action scene ^_^

Name: Harriet Evans (Anonymous) · Date: 08/23/05 3:17 · For: Chapter 10 - Tricks and Deceptions
Good chapter - I especially liked the image at the end with the creature flying off into the night. Also loved the singing cauldron. I find Sirius' pursuit of Minerva a little difficult to take at times - would expect her to be capable of squashing him, but it worked better for me in this chapter - especially when you added the aspect of the potion and her new admirer, Cedric! Snape was hilarious. Glad to see Hermione taking a more active role - hope she manages to clear poor Neville's name. Think you are doing a good job portraying this AU Sirius - he has the prankster side, but also the lonely boy, fighting his 'destiny' and longing for a family like the Weasleys. Very touching. I really enjoy your writing style - refreshingly different in composition and structure. There still appear to be a few grammatical mistakes here and there (but I'm no expert) and these certainly don't detract from my enjoyment. Well done.

Author's Response: I picture Sirius as the type of pest that can't be suppressed. The more your punish him ... the more irritating he'd get as he returns to pester you all the more ... It'll be really hard to handle that sort of pest especially on the fact that you're a teacher thus have to set a good example. You can't bully the idiot to leave you alone, or tell him off rudely. Sirius just enjoys irritating her as he does all the other professors.

*L* I love Snape as well ... the ideal prank target ^_^

Thanks for your support and reviews. I really appreciate them.

Name: Harriet Evans (Anonymous) · Date: 08/11/05 13:51 · For: Chapter 9 - Draconian Methods
I loved that chapter, Nutty. Especially the opening portion with Nathaniel which I thought was extremely well written. Snape as a Von Trapp - now that is something worth seeing indeed. I have one gripe and I'm going to get very, very angry now. You need to find a better way to announce a flashback then just putting 'flashback'. Someone who can write as well as you can is quite capable of managing the transition without using a heading. There. I've said my piece and I hope you don't mind. Otherwise, I think it was the best chapter yet. Oh, and I am intrigued by Pettigrew/Remus. Great stuff.

Author's Response: Thanks. I appreciate the constructive advice ... *L* I've been adviced on using transition to switch venues/locations instead of (inside), (outside) before but I never thought about using them for flashbacks ^_^ seems I have more to learn. Thanks, I'll see if I can fix that and remember to stop announcing my 'flashbacks' in future chapters. ^_^

Name: Harriet Evans (Anonymous) · Date: 08/09/05 8:10 · For: Chapter 8 - A House Divided
Very good - I enjoyed your take on the troll scene. Am afraid I am still slightly confused about Snape and that hat. Sirius in the infirmary was excellent particularly this line "Very funny Mr. Black. You're quite an actor and a comedian, nice try but not good enough." Sirius crossed his arms and grumbled. "Everybody's a critic."Hee, hee. I agree with your assessment of Sirius and yes Harry because of his less cherished background would be a better influence than James. Look forward to some Black history next time.

Author's Response: ^_^ oh the hat it's a continuation from the last chapter's prank on the lavender hair and bowler's hat that the Weasley Twins and Sirius pulled.... I guess continuing a joke from a previous chapter does get confusing ... I'll have to remember that...
Yep, Harry wouldn't be the type to go along, or even encourage Sirius to pick on people...I don't even think the twins would... I mean they pull pranks, but they're not bullies. Thanks for reading and reviewing ^_^... am really happy to see that daunted 'zero' disappear and be replaced by an actual number *lol*

Name: Harriet Evans (Anonymous) · Date: 07/20/05 14:57 · For: Chapter 7 - Seidon the Kelpie
Funny! I really like your Kelpie character - especially the line where he would kill humans that poluted his waters! Also interesting how you have brought Fred and George more into the group and that the Marauders' map is being used in year 1. If they see Quirrell, will it say 'Lord Voldemort' next to him?PS Have you managed to blag a copy of the HBP yet?

Author's Response: Just thought Fred and George would probably get along with Sirius better than they would with the Trio.
OffTopic: Yes I managed to borrow one ^_^ JK outdone herself. It's darker and more intriguing than all the others. I think it's my 2nd fav HP book. (The first being POA)

Name: Laudomia (Signed) · Date: 07/17/05 19:12 · For: Prologue
I'm intrigued--and so in need of a Sirius story! The prophecy idea is very clever and in keeping with wizarding society. Think I'll enjoy this one.

Author's Response: Thanks! I've been enjoying your fic as well (Harriet Evans) pointed it out to me ... but I wonder how you managed to leave a review *L* I'm having a hard time logging in....(which is why it took me quite a while to reply as well)

Name: Harriet Evans (Anonymous) · Date: 07/10/05 9:55 · For: Chapter 6 - S.P.A.W.N.
I loved the bit with the Kelpie and the link with the house of Black. Poor Professor Flitwick! And Neville was funny. I feel a bit sorry for Ron in all of this - Sirius and Harry seem to be so close. Well done, very intriguing and entertaining.

Author's Response: Poor Flitwick ... What about Snape ... he's the main target *L* Ron will eventually come around. I just didn't want the friendship to develop too fast. Thanks for all your reviews ^_^

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