Reviews For 'Mione My Only
Reviewer: mAgic62442
Date: 05/14/06 6:23
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

is there more? there should be!!!!!

Reviewer: mAgic62442
Date: 05/14/06 6:22
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

is there more? there should be!!!!!

Reviewer: North_Star
Date: 05/08/06 23:37
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

Interesting aspect of their relationship and life after Hogwarts. Interesting....but good. I liked it.

Reviewer: Starmaiden
Date: 05/07/06 15:50
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

It's a fun idea. Your grammar is a bit offin places, especially the commas. There are some places where sentences should be strung together:
The Healers and crew moved to the next bed. She walked toward him. Her friends followed. He heard her dress ruffling. He closed his eyes tightly for a minute. Opened them and bent down to check the patient.

It would be a lot smoother if you did something like this: "The Healers and crew moved to the next bed, Hermione and her friends following. He could hear her dress rustling. He closed his eyes tightly for a minute, opened them and bent down to check the patient."

There are also some sentences that are really long and slightly confusing:
He had his back to her ,Ronald Weasley, his red hair having been cut short since before he became one of the most famous healers of their time, Neville , who was also a healer was standing next to him, bending over the patient, there were two nurses next to them.

It would clear up a lot if you separated the various ideas that are part of this sentence. For instance: "Ronald Weasley had his back to her, his long hair cut shorter than it had been before he became one of the most famous Healers of their time. Neville, also a Healer, was standing next to him, bending over the patient. There were two nurses next to them." See where I moved the commas? You don't need to put a space between a word and the following punctuation. Check out the Mugglenet FF Help stuff, especially the dialogue section. It's got some great stuff on commas and quote marks and the like.

Your depiction of emotion is pretty good, and your explanation of what happened to get Hermione to this point. I rather like the way it ends, so that you see a lot of back history just in the way Ron reacts.

In short: I like the story; the grammar could use a bit of work; but you've got something worth working at. Don't stop writing!

Reviewer: HelgaHufflepuff
Date: 05/03/06 20:29
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

where is the rest

Reviewer: drunk_on_firewhiskey
Date: 05/02/06 18:53
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

great story! im too lazy to scroll up, bit is it one-shot or a series?

Reviewer: HelgaHufflepuff
Date: 05/01/06 14:10
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

that was too short!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: prongs12433
Date: 04/24/06 19:31
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

Wow, that was different. Ron's a healer, and Neville too. That's a good thing though, Ron's my favorite character:). And they didn't kiss or anything, which is different but it worked for this fic. Your wrting was great, very clear and straightforward. I can't believe you only have 13 reviews...

Reviewer: pheonixfire967
Date: 04/24/06 16:07
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

awww... that was so lovely!!!!

Reviewer: PadfootsGirl_722
Date: 04/24/06 4:00
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

i really liked this, but i thought ron was a bit out of character apart from that great!

Reviewer: Ravenclaw_5th_Year
Date: 04/20/06 16:42
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

Very interesting. You have definate potential as a writer, but I have seen better. I don't wish to offend you however... I rarely give anyone a good rating. Out of a ten, I'll say seven.

Reviewer: angellex
Date: 04/16/06 19:49
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

That was really sweet.

Reviewer: lordofthering222
Date: 04/16/06 13:49
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

short and to the point. i loved it.

Reviewer: louisesuperstar
Date: 04/15/06 13:58
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

umm...wheres the rest? not sayin its bad (it really good actually) but it was slighty rushed, you havnt even told me what what day it is.. gd though....needs more...

Reviewer: romalda_peach
Date: 04/15/06 9:31
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

Awww... that was a very sweet story..
I loved how it ended very happily!!

Reviewer: obsessedwithron
Date: 04/13/06 11:21
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

Ahhhhh! That was just what I have been looking for! A short little cute fic! Thanks!!! 100/10

Reviewer: whiterose
Date: 04/09/06 21:22
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

that was so so so goooooooood. very good job , keep it up.

Reviewer: james and lily fan
Date: 04/04/06 20:34
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

great job! that was realy well written and it had a tiny bit of hunor, but not too much so AWESOME job on that. cute story, but i agree with the others, MORE FLUFF! Otherwise I loved it!

Reviewer: Blueshadow
Date: 06/28/05 15:52
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

Such a lovely little story. I don't care what anyone has to say this story explains how it has to be... Ron and Hermione in each others arms. Good for you! Keep it up!

Reviewer: Hermioleen
Date: 06/15/05 17:59
Chapter: One: Heal my heart

I liked it so much! Very sweet. But I agree with flame_girl, more fluff would have made it even better. Great job!!

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