Reviewer: WelshGreen
Date: 08/07/08 1:33
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

(: more more more! it really is a clever idea. I like how you've put it all together. its so good. whens the next update?

Reviewer: LilyRose15
Date: 03/24/08 12:58
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

I love this story and really hope that you will continue with it! I love your idea of how Harry learns his parents' story. Its great! Update soon! =)

Reviewer: Fat_Bottem_Girl
Date: 11/07/07 17:44
Chapter: The Sorting Ceremony

Daniles is my mothers madien name!♥

Reviewer: grrl77
Date: 08/31/07 20:12
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

i love this story. my only concern is frank he wasnt a marauder but im sure you have something brewing. i still love your disclaimers they get me to laugh so hard sometimes.

Reviewer: Cedrics love
Date: 05/04/07 18:49
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

This is such a great story. I like that Harry is finally getting to see his parents story. I always felt bad that he imagined his parents as hating each other when they got married. Is this going to be a prequel to your other story? Because if so are you going to have Harry read about his parents having sex?

Reviewer: Dorky Dorcas
Date: 02/04/07 17:46
Chapter: The Notebook

Love it!!

Reviewer: harryginnyforever
Date: 01/22/07 15:47
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

I can't wait to see where this story goes! Keep it up!

Author's Response: Unfortunately this story is on hold for a bit... I'm trying to finish my other ones before I start to really work on this epic.

Reviewer: Sdogg
Date: 12/18/06 16:43
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

it would be great if you updated...hint hint. I really like the outlines of the characters. can't wait for more

Reviewer: books 4 ever
Date: 11/05/06 18:45
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

Hmm, Verry interesting. I can't wait for later chapters! verry good. :)

Reviewer: kaisers_rockchic
Date: 10/24/06 13:14
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

A really good fan fic amost as good as your too far gone can't wait for you to finish it.

Reviewer: SiriusandJamesLiveOn
Date: 09/15/06 8:48
Chapter: Friend or Foe

Better. Even though the characters are still presented in a much different way than I've seen previously in good Marauder tales, they are coming along quite nicely. I expecially like the way that you explain their bond with the "Brothers" metaphor, it's rather cute.
One important mistake that I noticed was the wrong verb case. In the bit where you wrote about Peter's abilities, you should have written "weren't" rather than "wasn't".

Reviewer: SiriusandJamesLiveOn
Date: 09/15/06 8:44
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

Hmm, as I'm reading I can almost take back what I said about the characters being OOC. Until this point, I didn't like it. However, now that you've "explained" it a bit, by showing what a change the boys make in each other, it rather "works". Good job, and keep up the good work!

Reviewer: SiriusandJamesLiveOn
Date: 09/15/06 8:37
Chapter: Friend or Foe

Better. Even though the characters are still presented in a much different way than I've seen previously in good Marauder tales, they are coming along quite nicely. I expecially like the way that you explain their bond with the "Brothers" metaphor, it's rather cute.
One important mistake that I noticed was the wrong verb case. In the bit where you wrote about Peter's abilities, you should have written "weren't" rather than "wasn't".

Reviewer: SiriusandJamesLiveOn
Date: 09/15/06 8:18
Chapter: The Sorting Ceremony

I really liked the Sorting Hat Song, one of the best I've read so far. The plot is coming along nicely, and this seems to be shaping up as good story.

However, the characters are severly OOC. It seems as though Lily and James have had personality transplants! James is supposed to be arrogant and cocky--especially whilst trying to woo said maiden [sorry, I had to quote PotC, lol] and Lily the shy one if either of them must be so, for she seems as though she could be quite confident as well, it most certainly is not in this overly-done why. Another major thing I noticed is her lack of interest in school. She's supposed to be a Hermione type and one fo the best students in her class!

On the subject of James, why is he so accepting and nice with Peter? Obviously he must have some degree of liking for him as he is one of his best friends, but as shown in our glimpse at the Marauders in OotP, it is never outright. As for the relationship between Sirius and James, egads! I understnad having them dislike each other, but in the Ceremony scene, why does James suddenly become so sure of himself? Sure enough that he can say such things to Sirius, when hours ago he was tripping over his own feet?

Lastly, I do believe that Alice and Frank were both of Hufflepuff.

I know these reviews are not the nicest, but I see a lot of potential and that is why I have responded so harshly.

Reviewer: SiriusandJamesLiveOn
Date: 09/15/06 8:00
Chapter: The Notebook

Good, but it could use a bit of grammer and sentence structure work. Mainly there are quite a few of misplaced commas, and some of the sentences are worded oddly. The only other problem that I see is the constant repetition of some words. Make sure that you use synonyms, especially for actions or names.

Overall I quite enjoyed it and I'm looking forward to reading the next three chapters.

Reviewer: SiriusandJamesLiveOn
Date: 09/15/06 7:59
Chapter: The Notebook

Good, but it could use a bit of grammer and sentence structure work. Mainly there are quite a few of misplaced commas, and some of the sentences are worded oddly. The only other problem that I see is the constant repetition of some words. Make sure that you use synonyms, especially for actions or names.

Overall I quite enjoyed it and I'm looking forward to reading the next three chapters.

Reviewer: xo___jen
Date: 09/12/06 18:35
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

the story is great but there's one thing that's bothering me and it's that frank wasn't a Marauder...it just doesn't feel right..sorry

Reviewer: sara_potter
Date: 07/21/06 3:24
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

yay! i love the marauders! nice story! wrtie more!
p.s - there a hay haired hottie in the making..and we all know him as remus lupin!

Reviewer: GiNGeR HaiReD GiRL
Date: 07/18/06 11:59
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

i love this story! its so cute so keep it up!

Reviewer: LordV
Date: 06/25/06 1:49
Chapter: Birth of the Marauders

nice one. hurry up and get the next chapter up. im eagerly awaiting the next one.

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