luv love luv love it!! i especially love that last part [ ill be their pawn, defeat their monster, and if i survive, if im lucky, maybe ill get to ride off into the sunset with the girl. ill be a hero if i have to. but theres no way in hell im going to act like one.] ha, sarcastically hilarious :)
OMG!! That was so great! Thanks for understanding Harry's character s well. That was really, truly excellent and I loved it!! I hope you write more stories because I love both that you wrote :)
woah... this si probably the first piece of fiction I've ever read that makes me empathise with harry. EVEN THE REAL BOOKS! i sympathised with him, sure, but i never empathised with him before now. i dont really know how to explain - on the surface JKR does a good job with poor little harry, it's just you included a vicious side, a kind of sharpness....oh forget it, il never explain it right. all i know is you manouvered her main character better than she did. i think i sort of hate you....oj
this is really good along with your other one you should write a chapter story
brilliant, its excatly (However you spell it!) the way harry thinks. very well written
When I read the summary, I was thinking that Harry's revenge would be, like, fleeing the wizarding world after defeating Voldemort, or something like that. His revenge is awesome - I thought it was hilarious, and very much in tune with Harry's personality.
And I love, love, LOVE the part about Harry's parents being props. That's a perfect metaphor, and your description of that is fantastic.
This fan fiction is written in a kind of solioquay fashion. It's well written. But at the same time it just seems like a commentary on loads of stuff we already know. Like a "Last time on Harry Potter..." summary for the beginning of the book. Also it's really whiney. It's written in that angsty 'the whole world is against me' tone. Don't you think we had to endure enough of Harry's whining in book 5!!!!!
This is a WONDERFUL monologue! People try to often to thow together some depressing thoughts and call it a one-shot, but you've taken all the old stuff and put together in a fresh, heartbreaking perspective on "being a hero." This is how I will always see Harry. Thank you so much!
Great fan of all your fics. Love this story! 10/10
Nice one. Thanks
wow that was excellent. i truly love your fics.
great fan fic, angsty without being a pretentious arse. like the stuff about his revenge being not looking like a hero. great last line. great fic, keep writing, your writing has a quality, of being emotive without being melodramatic and that is a rare thing, a hard balance to strike and you just nailed it. 10/10
I think that about sums up Harry in a nutshell. Strong work!
You really have some good ideas. The last few lines about being their hero, destroying their monster and getting the girl are a riot.
Wow (again). You really captured Harry's angst well. I don't usually read the dark/angsty fics but I saw you had one, and of course I had to read it. I love the last line, classic Harry. You're really a great writer, keep it up!